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Posted: 12 August 2007 at 4:37am | IP Logged

Monster Chase

 

I've never been this scared in my life. The last time I was half as scared was when the bigger monster was rotating me at top speed, tightening my muscles, squeezing my length into a tense ball.

 

And now, this monster is chasing me, in a steed no less! The monster is huge and furry. It's got white hair and a patch of black hair on its right eye. It looks like a dangerous pirate, but one who's not creating havoc in the sea, rather in a monster house.

 

I'm rolling on the floor, feeling dizzy as the monster is pushing me. The stupid furniture is coming in my path. I bang here and bang there and the monster has a good laugh!

 

I feel like vomiting, my muscles are loosening, the stiffness of my body is melting away, and I think I'm growing tall. Mother sure would have been proud, only if she weren't stitched up with that rough wool Uncle Staid in a sweater that stinks of Staid odour!

 

I have a plan.

 

I know I can't avoid rolling- for the monster is huge- but I can trick it. So I hold on to furniture pieces- with my body that's growing longer roll by roll – to create a web. C'mon monster, I yell secretly.

 

The monster raises its hand and runs behind me to give me another whack. But its too late, it's caught in the web, the web of my body!

 

Suddenly the monster that had squeezed my length into a ball appeared with a black box and began clicking away excitedly. The excited monster moved its joints and I heard something which sounded like, 'Kitty, look at you. You're stuck in the web of wool from the very yarn that you were chasing! Hahahaha'

 

Mom, I won! I bet my photo will be in the papers, because I think the monster is carrying a camera which lights up like a tube light!

 

I smile teasing my victim in monster lingo, 'Kitty, Na Na Na Na Na Na!' and roll about in celebration, not caring about how dizzy I feel.

 

Prompt: Write from the point of view of a yarn of wool being chased by a cat!

 

(346 words)

(12 aug 2007)

 

 

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Posted: 22 August 2007 at 4:54am | IP Logged
hey thans an interesting point of view ROFL ur flash fiction rockss... and so cute... i mean to write in some other PoV it sorta gives u different ideas... i lyk how u think out of the box and ur language is amazingg... post more preeti, waiting Big smile
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Posted: 22 August 2007 at 8:48am | IP Logged
^^agree!!
well first off its relly funy i think i guessed what it was halfway thru LOL
the number of PoVs there are in this world is amazing LOL n ur definitely keeping up to it bcos ur words and phrases all rock, uve got a real talent Embarrassed
keep it up re Wink
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Posted: 23 August 2007 at 11:46pm | IP Logged
Very nice!
Loved the different POV..
Big smile

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Posted: 26 August 2007 at 12:37am | IP Logged
Thanks guys, as always for supportine me in my pint-sized ventures..cause i never seem to get the time to write something longer Embarrassed
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im sure u would rock if u tried something longer as well re EmbarrassedBig smile y not give it a shot? Wink
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Posted: 26 August 2007 at 1:04pm | IP Logged

That's really good, preets! Brilliant!!! I love your flash fictions! They're so much easier to keep up to than stories!

And what i love is that you always keep your readers guessing! I was wondering of all the million things this could have been and my best guess was Chewing gum! You really are a fabulous writer, keep it up!

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Posted: 01 September 2007 at 10:29am | IP Logged
wow awesome! Clap

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