Surya 2 : Avval Than Anthu Penn(Closed) (Page 7)

Hosanna Goldie

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Posted: 15 August 2007 at 6:54am | IP Logged
Episode 4 was a violent piece! Reminded me of Charlies'angels beating off the baddies!Well written by Po!
Episode 5 by Roja raised suspense - uh oh Sanjay!she's not Sonia!!!.....stupid!...

rojapoooo IF-Sizzlerz

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Posted: 15 August 2007 at 8:48am | IP Logged
just got a msg from Pokkiri that he is busy.
I will write the next 2 episodes by tomorrow -
Pokkiri will continue on Friday.
rojapoooo IF-Sizzlerz

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Deepa tried to close her eyes and sleep but
sleep was still elusive. She allowed her mind
to wander and it went back to Sanjay.

The next day as she was coming out of her
classes, Sanjay was waiting outside and looked
at her expectantly. Deepa refused to recognize him
but could not walk faster - the ankle was still sore
- Sonia was just behind her.

Right then, she heard someone calling her name -
"Sonia" - she turned to see the caller but the
caller was looking at Deepa, willing her to turn
and look back. Sonia was confused for a moment
but decided to play along and see how far this can go.

Sanjay called again, a little louder this time but still
no reaction from Deepa!!!He strode faster and blocked
Deepa's way. Deepa looked up and started to say some
thing but Sanjay was quicker " hey Sonia, listen, i am sorry
for what happened yesterday. I see that you still
limp slightly, can I drop u home?"

"Look Mr.who ever you are, no.1 , I am not Sonia and
no.2, I dont take lifts from strangers. Please leave me
alone" - Deepa walked ahead leaving behind a disappointed
Sanjay. Sonia watched this drama and smiled to herself
"well well, ice maiden is not who she is... not any more.." .

Deepa and Sonia reached their street and turned to
their respective homes. Sanjay followed them and
made a mental note of Deepa's address. That night after
dinner Deepa sat with her books and tried to study but
she could not concentrate. Just then the phone rang and
Sarani picked it up. A deep resonant voice asked for
Sonia and Sarani disconnected saying 'wrong number".
The call came again and Sarani called out to Deepa -
"some one asking for Sonia here, Deepa, is any thing
wrong with Sonia's phone?" Deepa had a smug smile and
asked her mom to ignore the call.

Sanjay was walking up and down impatiently. He could
not get that face off his memory - "she looked so pensive;
why? I know that she is attracted to me and I also know
that she is mine" ..........

Deepa got up the next morning and went out to pick the
news paper - a bouquet of dozen red roses was lying
at the door step - "To Sonia with profuse apologies for
hurting those beautiful legs"...... Deepa's eyes scanned
the street to see if Sanjay is around but the street was empty.
She picked the flowers, smelt them and hugged them silently...
.. Sanjay was hiding himself from her view and saw her actions...
his face broke in to a wide grin.. " now I know how u feel Sonia,
I will see u this evening my love".......

Edited by rojapoooo - 15 August 2007 at 10:23am
Caryn IF-Rockerz

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Posted: 15 August 2007 at 5:43pm | IP Logged
Nice going Pokkiri & Roja..... Clap

Liked it.

Pokkiri what I liked about your episode was you gave Deepa a brave outlook. I am a big fan of Deepa as well. Unlike in serials, where the women folks are featured weak, you gave your heroine a style of dharma addi.   Smile
Hosanna Goldie

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Posted: 16 August 2007 at 3:59am | IP Logged

Well, I actually read Episode 6 cos it was written by Roja. Nice romantic thriller!
usha_pooja IF-Dazzler

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Posted: 16 August 2007 at 2:05pm | IP Logged
Nice chapter Roja much better chapter. Well done keep it up.

BTW WHOS PLAYing Sanjay? Also all the new characters.
rojapoooo IF-Sizzlerz

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Posted: 16 August 2007 at 7:49pm | IP Logged
Usha, the cast will be decided by Pokkiri.

EPISODE 007 (Present)

Deepa gets ready to go to work. It is her first
day at the bank. Her mom is worried about being
alone at home - what if Pokkiri strikes again???
Deepa leaves her at Sonia's house - that house is
always full of people - a combined family.

Deepa boards the bus and it will take almost an
hour to reach her destination. There is a kid sitting
next to her who looks like Akshay - Sanjay's nephew -
and Deepa's thoughts go back to Sanjay.

( back to where we left in 006)

In the evening Deepa was coming out after her
classes and Pokkiri followed her closely. He has
been after her for a long time but his villainous
looks and rough behaviour scares her. She hides in
the ladies' room waiting for Pokkiri to leave.

Sanjay walks in with Akshay and asks Pokkiri about
Deepa - " hi, I am Sanjay and I want to see Sonia.
Can you pls tell her that I am waiting in the reception,
thanks" - Pokkiri takes this as an opportunity to
linger around a bit more - "Deepa, nee Ladies' vittu
veliye vanthu thane aaganum!!" - he runs in and brings
Sonia to Sanjay.

Sanjay is confused. Sonia has a playful smile on her
face and confronts Sanjay "yes, i am Sonia and...."
Sanjay immediately apologizes " Oh, this must be a
mistake. I want to see ...." suddenly he is at a loss
for words. Little Akshay is quick to fill in " Oh this
is not that aunty" - Sanjay tries to hush him up but
Akshay continues " aunty, my uncle fell on some one the
other day and broke her leg. He wanted to see her and
find out about her leg - not you".

Sonia is impressed with that little imp - tussles his hair gently
and says" oh yes my dear, I know that and I also know about
some red roses - saw a thief placing them at a particular
threshold and hiding right below my window" - Akshay has
a quizzing look - "hope this aunty is not some maddie!!" -
Sanjay blushed and Sonia laughed.

Sonia then explained to Sanjay about how he mistook
Deepa to be Sonia. Both laughed and Sanjay requested
Sonia to help him to get know Deepa better. Sonia readily
agreed and warned him about Deepa being a very sensitive girl.
"She is one of those 'touch-me-not' types, does not make
friends easily. Right now, she is hiding inside the ladies'
because of Pokkiri. He has been pestering her for a long time
and he is the rowdy of the college."

Sonia points out to Pokkiri who is still loitering around.
Sanjay asks Sonia to go and bring Deepa , " I
will make sure that she leaves here safely. From now
on, I am there and she need not be scared of anyone".

Sonia is happy that Sanjay is so fond of Deepa. She
goes to get Deepa out. Pokkiri is looking for Deepa to
come out and Sanjay goes near him slowly......


Edited by rojapoooo - 16 August 2007 at 9:06pm
usha_pooja IF-Dazzler

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Posted: 17 August 2007 at 7:05am | IP Logged
Super chapter Rojaakka, its really good nicely written out and I love the suspense loads. LOL

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