4C: (HitenGauri)Plz reply

Posted: 16 years ago

 

                      : FAMILY:

                *INTRODUCTION*

Hello guys. How r u all???? I am back with new story. This story is abt Mahek and Pratham. Mahek's nature is similar to my friend's nature. Little bit. But u can differentiate both of them's nature. This story will have 10 to 12 parts.Hope u will like it. No suspense in khalnayak.

 

.CHARACTERS:

1}Main Characters:

a)Hiten Tejwani as Pratham Mittal, also known as PM

b)Gauri Pradhan Tejwani as Mahek Punj also known as PM.

c) Akshadeep Saigal as Ansh Gujral.

d) Shabbir ( Hrishi of Kaahin Toh Hoga) as Krrish Gujral.

e) Abhey Gujral

f) Aditya Gujral( Father of Ansh, Krrish and Abhey)

2} Other Characters:

A] Punj Family.

a) . Shekar Punj =dad of gauri in old kutumb

b) Sumi Punj =mom of gauri in old kutumb

c) Shashank Punj - Deepak Qazir.(Comedy) ,as shekar pradhan's brother,sanju's dad.

d) Shanti Punj -Mom of sanjana( Same of TLS)

(e) Saahil Punj =Saahil of kyunki(in this elder brother of priyanka)

f) Sanjana Punj.Sanju =Ganga of kyunki(cousin sis of Mahek, Mahek's chacu's daughter.

g) Komal Punj,Komo-=Rakshanda khan,Younger sis of gauri in this.

h) Niharika Punj '' Nihu ( same of TLS)

i) Kasak Punj- Surveen chawla. .(Comedy)

j) Vicky khanna- Vikas Seth( Abhir of Kyunki) .(Comedy)

k)Pari Malhotra –Maninee Mishra.(Comedy)

l)Bobby darling. .(Comedy)

m) Riya Mittal =Jennifer Winget.

n)Dara Singh as Siddharth Punj.

o)Dadi of Kavvanjali as Mahek's dadi.

p)Saahil of kyunki as Aryan Mittal.

q) Eijaz Khan as Nishant Mittal.

r) Yash Tonk as Yash Mittal. .(Comedy)

s) Punit Mittal: Tally of Krishna Cottage. .(Comedy)

 

.Intro of the story:

       Most important thing is tht ki Pratham's family,i.e., his mopm and dad, are not there. They died in a plane crash when all were small. They were killed by Aditya Gujral. As u know Yash and Punit are adopteed sons of Pratham's father and mother. Sumi and Shanti Jethani- Devrani.

                      After the death of Pratham's family Punj family took care of pratham and others. They treated them like their own child and grand children. They gave everything what every they wanted. They made the strong, self reliant.

Then later PM became ACP. Aryan becomes Adocate. Kunal becomes Boxer, Yash becomes A spy. And Riya becomes an Forensic expert. And Punit becomes a computer master. Yash loves riya like anything.

In this story Saahil as usual ACP. He is all rounder. Sanju, mehek, komu, nihu r like dons in their Delhi..

All of them r good in fighting. They r like Angles to the people. When ever sumi shouted at any of them all colony people used to get angry. They were like socialist. In this story there r 3 new character, Surveen, Vikas and Deepak Qazir. They all r comedy Characters. Surveen,i.e., Kasak is Qazir,i.e.,Shashank's daughter. Kasak is in love with Vicy ,i.e,. Vikas. Everyone likes their jodi .But Shashank hates  him. His thinking was tht only a military man will marry his daughter. Shashank has a moustache like an military officer., Big one.(HEHEHEHE)

Now Abhey is aditya gujral's  third son. I cant say whom I am referring. But when I will get his photo I will surely send it in the group.

Baki sab u will come to know. Hope u will like this part. Do Comment

Usha.

Edited by gauriandme - 16 years ago
Posted: 16 years ago
nice intro...continue soon
Posted: 16 years ago
yes. Please continue soon 😊
Posted: 16 years ago
Thnks for comments 😊 . I'll continue soon.


Usha.
Posted: 16 years ago
Well I am upset. Viewrs r 33 but only 2 ppls have commented. 😭 πŸ˜•


Usha.
Posted: 16 years ago
WEll Niharika is Mansi verma and Shanti is BJ of Ek Ladki Anjani Si.


Usha.
Posted: 16 years ago
β€ž     Chori chori chupke chupke

Hello. I am back with my new story CHORI CHORI CHUPKE CHUPKE. Its a comedy story. Hope tht u will like it. I got a lot of comments regarding this story. Hope tht u will continue ur comments. And plzz tell me if there are some mistakes or something u all didnt understand. Ill surely help u.
    
                    


β€ž     Chori chori chupke chupke

Delhi. A big city which has lakhs of peoples. HMM so beautiful. The streets are so quiet. Hey whtz tht. A man is snatching a womans purse. He snatched it and started running. Suddenly his way was stopped by a Black Scorpio car. From tht climbed down seven people. 2 boys and 5 girls. All had worn black top with black pant. Tht thiefs face turned white with fear as if he has seen a gang of ghost. He took a different direction and started running. All seven people with a gr8 force stared running behind him. 2 girls took a short cut to reach him. In no time the thief was surrounded by those 7.
                      Saahil came running and made 180 degree circle on the ground and the thief fell on the ground. He saw a girl coming towards him. She had black hairs, black brown eyes which had anger, she is Mahek. ( Mahek denoted as PM2): I hate crime. Saying this she gives tht ea big punch and kicks him down to ground. AAAAAAAaa A noise came from front.6 more thieves were running towards them. But they were ready. With one kick and one punch they all fell down on the ground. They were better than ninjas and boxers. No BEST. At the same time police came and took them and took those thieves with them. They were Saahil(ACP), Sanjana, Mahek(PM), Komal, Niharika, Kasak and Vicky. Komal took the purse and gave it to that woman. Woman thanked her.Saahil: Chalo aaj phir ek mujrim pakda gaya. Sanju: Ha. Hey PM chal. Chal kar party karte hai. PM2: Hai chal. Lekin kaha??? Komu: Aree apna ROCK AND ROLL CLUB. Toh Chale??? All nodded.
AT THE SAME TIME:

In Nanital, a culprit was running faster than a horse. He was followed by an ACP. They saw a grass land beside him. He just layed on that land so tht he could be invisible from the eyesight of ACP. ACP came and looked here and there. He couldnt find the culprit. In disappointment he went away. That culprit got up and turned. He got afraid as he saw a man with dark blue shrit with lite blue jeans and with black gogs. He was ACP. The culprit said in fear: PMMM!!!!! ACP: Yes, PM. PRATHAM MITTAL.(Pratham will be denoted as PM1) He gave him a forceful punch. Then the culprit started running. SHOOT HIM!!!, shouted his officials to PM1. He took his gun and adjusted him gun towards the target. His target was 30 feets away from him. With concentration he pressed his trigger. And the culprit fell on the ground. From backside came a big black car, Travelta. 4 boys climbed down the car. They had worn black shirt with black jeans with black googs. Good bhai. Kunal told. They were Aryun, Kunal, Yash and Punit. There seniors came and told to them: Good job. They all: Thank you sir. Kunal: Bhai chal na masti karte hai. Aryan smilingly: Kaha pe?? PM1: Rocking Club.(looking everyone) Chale?? All: Chalooo!!!!!!!
( Song is Dhoom again. THIS SONG IS FOR BOTH. Dances r the same. The starting part of
Hrithik, think abt Pratham and his brothers. And of Ash think abt Mahek and her sis and bro. And between the music think abt Sanju-Saahil and Kasak-Vicky.)


dhoom again and run away with me
on a rollercoaster ride
dhoom again and see your wildest
dreams
slowly come alive
dhoom again and gotta break the
rules
and party all the time
dhoom againwe gotta steal the
show
you know that ain't no crime
so steal all that you can
the magic you begun
let's shout,break out
comes on once againlets hear it
dhoom machaale.........

dhoom againand feel the beat of
the rythem
rythem of the night
dhoom again and hear the voices
calling
creatures of the night
dhoom again and see the shadows
dancing
in the pale moonlight
dhoom againa and feel your
heartbeat pumping
now the time is right
so go walk out the door
get down....get on the floor
let's shout break out
come on once again let's hear it
dhoom machale

and when love comes your way
you'll know its here to stay
you'll steal the chance 'cose you're
the thief of hearts yeah
you'll win with a galance
walk away with your romance
there's no more ther's no backing
out now

dhoom again and make the whole
world crazy
set your spirit free
dhoom again anf take a break right
now
come celeberate with me
dhoom again 'cos all wanna do
is steal the showsomehow
shoom again 'cos all i wanna say
is hey the time is now
let nothing get you down
go out and paint the town
let;s shout break out
come on once again lets hear it
doom machale....


                    In Punj house, Sumi was busy in kitchen. As she heard the door bell, she came running towards the door bell. She got shocked because she never expected them. She saw her sasur, husband and devar on the door footsteps. She exclaimed: Aap. Lekin aap toh kal aane wala the Nanital se,aaj kaise???? Kaam khatam ho gaya??? Shekar: Saab idhar he puchogi??? She looked all surrounding. She smiled nad said: Sorry. Aaeye. They all came inside. Shanti coming out of the kitchen: Kaun hai didi?? AS she saw them she smiled and run inside the kitchen. She came out of the kitchen with three glass of water. Siddarth: Bacche kaha hai??? Hearing smile disappeared from Sumis face: Social service karne gaye hai. Siddarth: Kya hua bahu?? Kya baat hai??? Shanti watches Sumi and nods her head in negative. Sumi: Chup reh tu shanti. Apko pata hai kal kya hoa??? Shekar: Kya hoa?? Sumi: Kal Mahek ko dekhne aachanak ladke wala aaye the. Toh ussene ladke walo se maafi maga aur kaha ki who shaddi nahi karegi. Aur use Panditji ko jhadu se mara. Shekar,Siddarth and Shashank together: Kya!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!.
                  A loud sound came : Hiiiii!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! Shekar: Areee mere bacche aa gaye. Mahek and other came towards them. Hugging them Mahek said: Aap itne jaldi aayee. WOow thtz gr8. U know we all missed u a lot. Shekar to Mahek: Tumne pandit ke sath kya kiya??? They looked at Sumi and Nihu said: Ohh toh aate he mom ne complaints batana shuru kiya. Gr8. She got annoyed with sumi. Shekar: Tum lag aisa kise kar sakte ho. Humare aanae se pehele tumne Pandit ko mara. YYYYY. Humhe bhi mazza lena tha. Kya Shashank??? Shashank: Hain bhiya. U r right. Everyone looked at them and laughed. Shekar: Gr8. Accha kiya. Usse pandit ko asee he hona chahiye. Hamesha jabardasti karta hai. Sumi looked at him in anger. Mahek: Ohh . U all r soooooooo sweet. Next time Ill keep tht in mind. Sumi was fuming with anger. Shanti got happy tht they all didnt shouted at them. As Shashank looked at Vicky he got angry. Shashank: Tum?? Vicky in fear: HHHHEELOOO Uncle. Shashank nodded. Kasu got angry. But she kept quiet. Siddrath: Beta kaise ho?? Vicky: Fine dadu. Siddarth nodded and smiled.

IN NANITAL:
Pratham came out of his bathroom. He was wiping his hair with a towel. He saw an image of a girl who was standing behind him wearing blue sleeveless Punjabi. He smiled and exclaimed: Riya!!!. Riya too smiled: Hi bhaiya. Take juice. From gym room Yash came out. He looked at riya. She was looking like angle. He smiled and said: Hi. She looked at him and smiled. Hi! Take loo juice. Aur backi sab ko de dena. Bhaiya maine kitchen maine jati hoo. Khana banana hai. PM1 nodded. Yash followed her. When PM1 noticed it he smiled. Then turned towards the mirror. He saw a Mahek. He got happy. (Guys He doesnt know his name, address nothing. U all will come to u when did they met in the next part). But when he turned back there was no one. He just waved his hand towards his hair and smiled.
           When Mahek and others got fresh they came out of their room. Mahek and her sis and same room while Saahil and Vicky in other. They came down in the hall. Mahek had worn Blue sleeveless top and short white skirt. She caught her dadu from backside and said: Hi Boy friend.( She used to call him boy friend and her dadi her saut, hehehehehe). Then her sat beside him. Sunaina came and sat beside Siddrath. PM2: Hi Mere Saut. Sunaina looked at her and laughed. Shekar came there and give a file to Mahek. She said: Yee kya hai??? Shekar: Ek file. Ism eek ladke ka photo hai. Pm2: Dad plzzzz u dont start now Shekar: Plz beta. Ek baar dekhoo. Plzzzz. She looked at him and nodded. She knew tht she will never force her. She opened tht file. Yee kaun hai??? PM2. Pratham. Pratham Mittal. Umesh ka beta. She looked at him clearly: Sanju idhar aaa zara. Sanju came towards her and looked at the photo. Both started thinking. Together: YEHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHH!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! !!!!!!!!!



COMING UP: AABB AYAEGA MAZZA Mahek gave a mirthful smile.



Ab kya hoga???? Kya Pratham aur Mahek ek dusre ko jante hai?????? Kaise??? Kab?????

U will come to know abt it soon. DO COMMENT.


     


       


Posted: 16 years ago
its interesting plz continue
Posted: 16 years ago
            
       
β€ž     CHORI CHORI CHUPKE CHUPKE: part 2
       
        Hello friends. I am back with 2nd part of 4C(Its short form). Plzzzzz read the part and tell me about ur views.



β€ž     CHORI CHORI CHUPKE CHUPKE: part 2

             Shekar came there and give a file to Mahek. She said: Yee kya hai??? Shekar: Ek file. Isme ek ladke ka photo hai. Pm2: Dad plzzzz u dont start now Shekar: Plz beta. Ek baar dekhoo. Plzzzz. She looked at him and nodded. She knew tht she will never force her. She opened tht file. Yee kaun hai??? PM2. Pratham. Pratham Mittal. Umesh ka beta. She looked at him clearly: Sanju idhar aaa zara. Sanju came towards her and looked at the photo. Both started thinking. Looking at each other: YEHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHH!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
They were surrounded by Nihu, Kasu, Komu, Saahil and Vicky. PM2: Hey toh wahi traffic wala hai na?? Sanju: Nahi. Airport wala.. Hai na?? Komu: NOO. Flirt guy. Mahek: Exactly. ( Looking at Shekar] kya ye Pratham hai??? Nodding in positive Shekar: Tum isse kaha mile thi??? Mahek: Nanital mein. Last year mein aur Sanju picnic ke liye gaye the. Yaad hai??? Waha mile the. U know dad, he is damn flirt guy. Who airport maine jo ticket collector hote hai na unko bhi nahi choodta hai ye. My god. Sumi: Tunhe ussese baad ki?? PM2: Ha. Who actually ye hoa.(Remembering)                                                        
FLASHBACK:

In Nanital, the street was full of car. Landslide had taken place. Also a thief had escaped. Thtz y PM and other were present. Due to this there was traffic. Mahek and Sanju were sitting in a cab. The window of the cab was little bit open. PM was busy in reading some files. Suddenly he saw a taxi. In tht he saw Maheks beautiful brown laughing eyes. Tht cab was 3 feet away from him. He was just busy in watching her. At the same time Aryan, Kunal, Yash and Punit arrived. They saw him watching someone. Aryan keeping his hand on PMs shoulder: Kya hoa. Kisse dekh raha hai??? PM pointed towards Mahek. All of them looked at her. They kept their mouth wide open. Suddenly Mahek looked at them. Sanju too watched them. PM fell in a trance of her beauty. He was so lost in his thoughts tht he fell down. Both Sanju and Mhek started laughing. PM gets up and watches Mahek. Mahek then got busy in reading a book. After sometime when she looked at him he was still looking at her. She felt very uncomfortable. Sanju also looked at both of them and started smiling. Mahek got very angry. Then a police inspector came towards the cab and called them out of the cab. Then checking took place. PM got a golden chance. He came near the cab. He said: Inspector aap jao maine dekhta hoo. Inspector nods and goes away.
                  PM looks at Mahek but she ignored him. She turned her face. Sanju: Kya hoa hai?? Kab traffic khatma hoga??? PM looking at Mahek(trying to impress her): WohKK ek choor bhag gaya hai. Toh MAINE(specifying) ussko pakadne ke liyaK. AS Mahek heared choor she turned and said before he could complete his words: Kya. Chor bhag gaya??? PM looked at her deep beautiful eyes strangely. PM: Ha. Sanju kept her hand on Maheks shoulder indicating wht she was talking. Mahek then kept herself calm. PM got happy after hearing her voice. Police started checking the cab. Then a he told them to go. PM wanted to talk to her. Sanju and Mahek were going to sit into the cab when a police man came near Mahek and said: Madam. Aap kya MISS INDIA ya fir MISS UNIVERSE hai kya??? Mahek got puzzled: Kyun? Police man: Woh aap bohot sundar dehk thi hai. Mahek looked at him in anger. She started fuming with anger:(Smiling) Thnk u. (Catching his coller) Muhje lagta hai ki aapko aapne kam par zada dhyan rakhna chahiye. Cab driver: Madam chaliye. Sanju: Chalo. Mahek leaved his coller and looked at PM in anger. She went towards the cab and sat inside the cab. Then the cab went towards the airport. Pantnagar is the nearest airport (71km from there). Tht Police inspector got scared. PM got felt it very strange.
     In Airport, Sanju and Mahek were sitting on one of the bench. PM followed them and reached the airport. He saw them going to check their tickets (a person which checks the ticket inside the airport. For checking their tickets, a woman was there. She was beautiful. But not beautiful more than Mahek. PM went towards her and started talking with her. He was trying to make Mahek an impression. He took her hand and started telling abt her future husband. Mahek and Sanju were standing in line. When their turn came the woman was busy in talking with PM. Mahek got irritated. Not bcoz she was getting jealous but bcoz her time was getting wasted. They waited for 5 mins. But no response. Mahek was short tempered. She just banged her hand on the desk. Everyone looked Woman: Sorry wohhK (Removing her ticket) maineK (Smiling, looking at the ticket) Ohh aap Delhi jane wali hai?? Mahek: Ha. She sat on the bench. Sanju brought two cups of coffee for both of them and had their coffee. PM was just looking at her. She was getting very angry. She was reading her book and was moving from here to there. Suddenly she fell down. When she saw back she was dumped by a small boy. She sat on the floor and looked at tht boy. Tht boy was just 3 yrs old. He had got scared after seeing her behavior with tht woman. Mahek was really getting angry. But when she saw tht boys cute face her heart melted. She smiled, waved her hand on his head and asked: Kya hoa??? Tum gir gaye???? She made him stand up on his legs. She sat on her knees and asked: Tumhara naam kya hai??? Tht boy: Hrishi. Ek baat kaho??? PM2: Kaho. Tht boy: Aap kya MISS INDIA ya fir MISS UNIVERSE hai kya??? Mahek(Smiling): Kyun?? Tht boy: Woh aap bohot sundar dehk thi hai. Mahek looked at him and smiled and said: Nahi. But u r very cute. She kissed him on his head and asked: Aap kaha ja rahe ho?? Tht Boy: Delhi. PM2: WOOW!! Maine bhi. Chalo plane mein betkar masti karege. He nodded. He went running towards his parents. PM watched this whole affair. Sanju: Chal Mahu(They also called mahek mahu). Mahek got up and looked at PM who was busy watching her. She ignored him. Tht boy came running towards him and they all went towards the exit door. PM was gonna stop her but she went away. Suddenly PM2 cell rang and she picked it up and exclaimed: Mamma!! Woow kaisi ho??? Hum abhi airport par hai. Jaldi aange. Sumi: Thik hai. Bye Mahek: Bye.


FLASHBACK ends:

      Everyone looked at her and started laughing. PM2: Kya hoa?? Ussme hasne jaisa kya hai???? Siddarth: Nahi. Hum Pratham par has rahe the. Bada Flirt hai. Pata hai humme. PM2: Aur aap aise insaan se meri shaddi karwana chahte hai??? Sumi: aise insaan matlab?? Toh tuhje kaisa pati chaheye?? PM2(moving here and there like old film actress): Joh bahoot handsome hoo. Joh bahot accha hoh. Joh mujhese pyaar kare. Sirf muhjese. Joh mere pyaar ko samjhe. Joh mere feelings samhje. Joh mereK. Sumi: Ha. Mera pratham bahot accha hai. Tujhse aur bhi sundar, intelligent hai. PM2: Kya matlab??? Muhjese bhi intelligent. Muhje intelligent sirf mera dreamboy hai. Woh PM nahi. Woh toh buddhu hai. Sumi (pointing her fingers towards Mahek) AA mera pratham bahot intelligent hai ha. Bohot se cases solve kiye hai ussne. Har paheli ka raaz janta hai woh PM2: Acchaaaaa, Thik hai. Muhje waqt chahiye.
               
Angles bedroom:

Angles were sitting on bed and on the phone riya was there. The phone was on speaker. PM2: Maine ek plan karonge jo sabit karega ki woh intelligent nahi hai. Muhjse toh nahi. LekinK She turned towards them and gave a naughty smile: Pratham Mittal aa rahe hai. Usse welcome karne ki responsibility humari hai. Usse welcome hum aapne tarike se karenge. All understood wht she wanted to tell. Vicky: Itna bata diya hai toh tumhara plan kya hai ye bhi bata do. PM2 smiling: Ha. Toh sunoK. Saying this she started describing her plan. Everyone understood wht was there work.
               

Coming up: Mahek was running with Prathams laptop. Pratham: Hey. Chorrr Chorr!!!!!!!!!!!..


Usha.




Posted: 16 years ago
Thnks for the comments. I think ppl didnt like my story.

Usha.

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