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Oblivion

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Posted: 03 April 2007 at 3:55pm | IP Logged

the precious thoughts you have given me
i always relish them and smile
i live those thoughts everyday
and continue to smile
in disbelief and disappointment

your memories bring tears down along with the smile
how i wish you were still mine
the words that dropped from your mouth
were like the petals falling from a rose
i can still remember them well
and continue to smile
in disbelief and disappointment

Your thoughts have disorganised my mind as such
cant think of anything else
even today;its one year after i lost you
still cant get any sleep .no way
thinking again of your precious thoughts
and continue to smile
in disbelief and disappointment

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Posted: 04 April 2007 at 1:33am | IP Logged

What struck me about this poem is how genuine it sounds, its not fake at all. I love the poetic tool of repetition that you've used here.
Great work!

amisra

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Posted: 04 April 2007 at 2:06am | IP Logged

I agree Preets, this is coming straight from the heart...really very touching!! Clap

Cheers,

Anjali

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Posted: 04 April 2007 at 2:17am | IP Logged

really touchy dear excellent dil se nikli hui

keep posting more love to read them Smile

Oblivion

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Posted: 04 April 2007 at 5:00am | IP Logged

actually, this was posted in the memory of someone...

and i never intended to write a poem.. i just couldnt sleep that night , had immense feelings and i had to write to take them out...... it took just 2 mins to write my feelings down...... never edited it .......

amisra

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Posted: 04 April 2007 at 6:08am | IP Logged

It's still very beautiful Oblivion!! Feelings coming straight from the heart don't need any editing. They are a masterpiece in their own way! Clap

Cheers,

Anjali

Edited by amisra - 04 April 2007 at 6:08am

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^^Oh, i check out your blog, you've got some funny stuff there! LOL

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Posted: 05 April 2007 at 9:15am | IP Logged

very good... u r too good to write it in two mins.. Clap

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