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Originally posted by Naughty_n_nice


Never heard of a boy and a girl sharing a room, but it's very funny! The guy amuses me, sounds like a brat! LOL

hehe he is.. thanks for liking itEmbarrassed

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Posted: 14 April 2007 at 8:31am | IP Logged

Originally posted by umrao_jaan

IT"S HILLARIOUS!!!!!

But....girl+boy roommatesss???? Agreed! Neva heard it b4!!!! Bit it seems funny! Da guy's a brat! And da gal does have some cheek! Whoaa-way to GO!!!! Wondering what awaits in the future...

lol thanks for the encouragement.. i know the guy's a total brat.. but im picturing him to be really hotEmbarrassedLOL 

Originally posted by T.

Love your writing style. Looking forward to a little more background on how Her and Him got to be roomies even though they hate each other so much.

thanks soo much Embarrassed.. there will be background after two or three chapters.. so dont worry Big smile

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Posted: 14 April 2007 at 8:32am | IP Logged

Originally posted by ~Sirius*Ysh~

read this long back but got disconnected so couldnt reply!!!
btw i liked ur introduction the best!!!!!!!!!
and the guy and girl are cute Embarrassed but the guy seems to be an ultimate bugger
great job!

thanks soo much for the appreciation..hope you like the next part Big smile

 

 

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Posted: 14 April 2007 at 8:33am | IP Logged

 

Part 2

 

 

It was later on in the day when she actually started feeling the teeniest bit of sympathy for kicking him in … private… areas.  She ploughed through the dining room to his bedroom to find that he wasn't there. Not that their apartment was big, but she searched the whole of it and found that he has disappeared. Completely , utterly, gone. 

 

It was then that she had the idea of searching the laundry room and the garbage room. As she pushed the door and entered it, she saw him sitting on a bucket with his head clutched in his hands. He looked up as the door creaked, to see her standing there and started up. As she started to walk in towards him, he shrieked, "Don't let the door--"

 

The door slammed.

 

"--Close." He finished, and glared at her, "Look what you did. Now we're both stuck here. Great, just bloody great."

 

"Stop whining, you brat. How was I supposed to know about the door?"

 

"Har, har. It's your house,  sweetheart."

 

"Well, darling, you should have said something before."

 

"You know what, Sonja, leave. Leave before I absolutely start pulling my hair off--"

 

"That will be good. I mean, look at you—eww.. your hair is sticky and damp. Disgusting."

 

"That's a bloody mop. Not my hair."

 

"Same thing to me."

 

"…"

 

"Karan?"

 

"…"

 

"Say something."

 

"Stop talking, will you? I'm currently trying to block off your shrilly voice by putting this bucket over my head."

 

"Err.. you do know that our janitor uses that for cleaning the toilet?"

 

"…"

 

"Karan, say something."

 

"MY HAIR. MY BEAUTIFUL, SMOOTH, PERFECTLY TRIMMED AND GELLED, COMPLETELY VIVACIOUS AND SMOOTHLY PARTE--"

 

"Karan?"

 

"WHAT?"

 

"Shut up."

 

"How would you feel if your hair--"

 

"I don't give a damn right now. Will you stop your whining?"

 

"I will, if you move away. You're being alarmingly close to some.."

 

"Oh."

 

"Jesus Christ."

 

"Yeah."

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Posted: 14 April 2007 at 8:34am | IP Logged
sorry for the extreme delay you guys Ouch
and thanks all of you so much for SO MUCH appreciation .. thanks all of you.. you were VERY sweet Embarrassed Hug
hope you like this part as well Embarrassed
happy reading,
shreyasi

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Posted: 14 April 2007 at 10:29am | IP Logged
awwwwwwwwwwww..... chooooooooooo chweeeeeeeet..... Embarrassed Embarrassed Embarrassed
& poor karan LOL LOL LOL i mean, his hair.... his smooth, beautiful, perfectly trimmed & gelled hair LOL LOL
and shrey.... u better continue asap Smile .... & also write longer parts.... or ur dead Wink

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Posted: 14 April 2007 at 11:56am | IP Logged
Great part!
I loved their reaction when locked in the room. Can't stand each other but still want to talk.

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Posted: 14 April 2007 at 12:06pm | IP Logged
LOL ok cant stop laffing!
the karan-say something and karan-shut up part was shooo cute LOL
sooo stuck in a room cnt w8 to c wht happens next Evil Smile
do update soon,cnt w8 LOLTongueEmbarrassed

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