Writers Corner

   

Deception - A Sinister Betrayal....C1- P1

Post Reply New Post

Page 1 of 1

Sujalthegreat

Goldie

Sujalthegreat

Joined: 13 January 2005

Posts: 1294

Posted: 18 March 2007 at 12:34pm | IP Logged
Deception - A Sinister Betrayal ...... Do Not Believe What You See....?

Hi Everyone!

This is a story that I've been working on, for quite sometime. Its a murder mystery/thriller. Some of you have already read this and have told me to post it as they think its good. So I'm posting it on this forum. I have already posted this before, but now I have re-posted the story with a new title.

However please bear with me, as I am re-posting Chapter 1 and will post part or the whole of Chapter 2, later on today.

 P.S. If any of you have any ideas as to what should happen next in story or anything that should be changed then feel free to PM me and let me know or just post a reply in this topic.

So I hope you enjoy the story........ Very Happy


Chapter 1




It had been almost a year since what had happened. The memory of that horrifying incident had followed Sean. It haunted him. That one incident had taken away all reality.
Even now, Sean could still see Sarah, in that frightful state. He could still see, her hand shaking in fear and her finger pointing towards him, accusing him of a crime he didn't even commit.
Because of this one incident, everyone that Sean had known, his family and his friends had turned against him, leaving him on his own.
What hurt him the most, was when Amanda refused to believe him and reminded him that he was never part of the family.
Even Nicola, the girl of his dreams, had hurt him in such a way, that he was left with nothing. Because of this pain, he was left broken from the inside. He had no feelings and no emotions. He didn't know what or how to feel anymore.
Nothing seemed to be clear to Sean; he didn't know what to do or where to go.
It was then that, an old friend, Nisha, who believed in him, came to his aid. She convinced him to come with her and get away from everything and start a new life. At first Sean was reluctant to go with Nisha, because he was afraid of getting hurt again. But Nisha convinced him, that she believed him and that she wouldn't hurt him like everyone else had done.

Sean had now moved on with his life, although no matter how hard he tried he just couldn't forget about the past. Even now he just stared up at the sky, while looking back at his past. It wasn't just tonight. Just about every night Sean would go up to the mountains and look back at his past and ask himself, if all of the good times were just one big happy dream. But then it would all come back to him, telling him that everything was just a faade.

In a way, the moon reminded him of him self. It just glowed, all on its own, up in the dark, motionless sky. Sean just stared at all of the places where the stars used to be.
"Looks like the stars have deserted you, like my friends had deserted me"
Tears started to form in his eyes, rolling down his face. The moonlight reflected from them. He just sat there on a rough, cold patch on the ground and just thought to himself.

"So much of my life has passed by, but it feels as if I haven't even lived a moment of it. I haven't got any friends. Even when it gets dark, my shadow leaves me alone. I'm all alone like you. It's only just you, me and my loneliness"

Instantly Sean broke away from his thoughts, because he started to get the feeling that someone was approaching him from behind. But he already knew who it was, as he had already felt that presence before. The atmosphere indicated to him that it was a presence from his past. It was a presence for whom he held so much hatred inside himself. It was Amanda.
"Why have you come here?" asked Sean, with hatred.
Amanda could sense how much Sean hated her, for what she did to him and what she had said, in the past. She could tell that even now he still remembers the past. Sean just stood there with his back turned against her. She didn't know where to start or what to say.
"I…I…I've come to take you back", her voice quivered.
"Well I don't think you have that right anymore".
Amanda could easily sense the coldness and bitterness in his reply. His voice was as cold as the air, up in the mountains.
Tears started to form in her eyes. She could feel her heart breaking, while she remembered the past.
"I…I...know what I did and what I said was wrong, but…."
Instantly Sean broke her off. "So what are you doing here anyway?"
"I've come to take my brother back home"
Just by hearing the word 'brother', Sean went into flashback, trying to remember a time where Amanda treated him like a brother.
"I don't even think, that in your whole life you have ever considered me as your brother"
Amanda knew that, what ever Sean was saying, he was right. Neither could she remember a time, where she was there for Sean. Maybe it was the fact that he was adopted and not her real brother, what made her hate him. However it was now that she had realised that she was wrong.
"I know that I was wrong and I'm sorry"
"You know as far as I can remember…whenever I needed you, you just pushed me away from yourself"
All Sean could think about was all of the times when he needed her, but she wasn't there for him. When their parents were alive, they trusted him and believed, no matter what anyone said. All they did was just look into his eyes and they would get their answer.
More tears started to form in his eyes as he remembered his parents. But then the realisation that Amanda was still here, bought him back.
This time he turned around and saw her standing there in the darkness. He could barely make out her face. She was camouflaged by the darkness.
"Can I ask you one question?" asked Sean.
"Of course" replied Amanda. For some reason Amanda started to get the feeling that there was still hope for Sean to come back with her. Her heart started to feel at ease.


To Be Continued..............
 
Link To Next Section -:

http://www.india-forums.com/forum_posts.asp?TID=569972



Edited by Sujalthegreat - 18 March 2007 at 1:11pm

Dear Guest, Being an unregistered member you are missing out on participating in the lively discussions happening on the topic "Deception - A Sinister Betrayal....C1- P1" in Writers Corner forum. In addition you lose out on the fun interactions with fellow members and other member exclusive features that India-Forums has to offer. Join India's most popular discussion portal on Indian Entertainment. It's FREE and registration is effortless so JOIN NOW!

coolniyu

IF-Dazzler

coolniyu

Harry Potter Crossword winner

Joined: 27 July 2005

Posts: 3953

Posted: 19 March 2007 at 2:22am | IP Logged
whoa..sean seems real depressed Ouch uve brot it out well Smile n the stry seems intrestin,bt i hav to leav nw so will read the rest of the parts later~~

bt pleez post it all in one topic na? if u keep postin each chap in a new topic itll crowd up the forum Ouch bsides its more convenient in a single topic SmileWink thnx Big smile

Sujalthegreat

Goldie

Sujalthegreat

Joined: 13 January 2005

Posts: 1294

Posted: 19 March 2007 at 2:37am | IP Logged
Originally posted by coolniyu

whoa..sean seems real depressed Ouch uve brot it out well Smile n the stry seems intrestin,bt i hav to leav nw so will read the rest of the parts later~~

bt pleez post it all in one topic na? if u keep postin each chap in a new topic itll crowd up the forum Ouch bsides its more convenient in a single topic SmileWink thnx Big smile


Thats what I thought, but I was told a while back that if i posted it in one chapter at once, then it would be too much to read. so i'm going to post each chapter in parts.

Post Reply New Post

Go to top

Related Topics

  Topics Topic Starter Replies Views Last Post
do you want deception - a sinister..... Sujalthegreat 2 598 14 May 2007 at 6:03pm
By Sujalthegreat
IMP INFO ABOUT DECEPTION.....A SINISTER Sujalthegreat 0 496 14 May 2007 at 5:59pm
By Sujalthegreat
Deception - A Sinister Betrayal...C2- P4 Sujalthegreat 2 524 30 April 2007 at 8:14am
By Sujalthegreat
Deception - A Sinister Betrayal...C2- P3 Sujalthegreat 0 464 30 April 2007 at 6:53am
By Sujalthegreat
Deception - A Sinister Betrayal...C2- P2 Sujalthegreat 0 568 30 April 2007 at 6:41am
By Sujalthegreat

Forum Quick Jump

Forum Category

Active Forums

Limit search to this Forum only.

 

Disclaimer: All Logos and Pictures of various Channels, Shows, Artistes, Media Houses, Companies, Brands etc. belong to their respective owners, and are used to merely visually identify the Channels, Shows, Companies, Brands, etc. to the viewer. Incase of any issue please contact the webmaster.