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Morgoth

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Posted: 10 February 2007 at 4:43pm | IP Logged

Originally posted by datspreets

Originally posted by T.

I personally found this story much better than Lakshmi - plot-wise. I think you just need to tighten up the ending a bit for this one and it will be perfect :)


Now, that's what I had been looking for, a comment that'd help me grow. Tighten up the ending, does that mean i reduce the size? or don't make the inherent message so apparent, and let the reader decide what i intended to convey? 

Yup :)

 

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Posted: 11 February 2007 at 9:53am | IP Logged
another beautiful story preeti di! Clap
i liked this one better than the one about lakshmi, coz i luved the way you conveyed the meaning out...
its beautiful! Clap

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Posted: 25 February 2007 at 8:51am | IP Logged
Hm.. interesting. The ending confused me a bit though because she seems sad, and yet she's saying that the man is lying?

Overally though, I liked it. It was deep. Keep up the great work!

~Sunita~

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Posted: 05 March 2007 at 3:28am | IP Logged
dat was realli nice preeti di! Clap luvdd da way u brought out da meaning Smile Embarrassed Embarrassed

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