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kanak1309

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internals.....
OMG!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

ok ok.... all the best devu....

hope u do really really really well.....

il wait for the next part... ()patiently Embarrassed Embarrassed

luv
kanak

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Posted: 24 January 2007 at 10:28pm | IP Logged
hey devu i really like all the parts its awesome you are really a good writer plzzzzzzzzz post the other part soon can't wait to read it and all the very best for your internals

drymaple

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Yudi ran towards the checkpost where few army officers were literally fighting with the crowd to explain them the situation.
"excuse me please…plz" yudi squeezed his way through the crowd to meet up with the officers.
"please go back sir..you are not allowed inside!" shouted an officer at yudi.
"I am Lt Yaduvan Sahani. Could you please tell me what's going on ??…kya main koi madad kar sakta hoon?"
"please go back Sir!" it looked like the officer wasn't paying him any attention and pushed him back.
"Ae officer aane de use!" yelled a voice from behind…. Yudi stretched his neck to have a look at the speaker and the other officer looked behind, hating that man..who spoke those words and allowed Yudi inside the checkpost. "you can go"
Yudi went inside and looked around…suddenly a man slapped his back hard and said "kyun be yudiae…dole shole bana diye hain tune…koi janani pat gayi kya?!"
Yudi couldn't forget that voice…anger,happiness were attacking him from all sides…like waves of a disturbed sea.
"huda?"
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ritu stood there motionless…devoid of any emotion and kept staring at the person who destroyed her life.
"you can't marry him ma'am…because I love him"
"what?! Are you in your senses cadet?? You have already caused much trouble…for you capt shekawat's respect suffered…and you can still say such utterly insensitive thing!!!"
"I am not lying ma'am and I am in my senses..i love him and I don't want you to destroy his life as you did with my brother!"
"I never destroyed naveen's life!!...did you get that!!"ritu screamed at naina.. "whatever happened to me because of naveen is something which you will never understand!! I loved him! And I trusted him ,he broke my trust!… he framed me!!…he told the army officials that I also helped him in his mission…how could he do that and how could you expect me to still be with him after all this!! And now I love capt shekhawat and I can't let you soil his name again!"
"I am sorry ma'am…but after all this you have said to me…I am pretty sure that rajveer sir is going to suffer in the same way as my brother did…a woman who couldn't believe the person she loved …what else can I expect from her??! You didn't have the strength to support my brother ma'am…what support will you give to anybody else?I love captain rajveer because I know I can support him throughout my life…"
just then rajveer entered…ritu went towards him,
"rajveer…look at her…she says she loves you…and you were going to support this girl??…" rajveer stood there not uttering a single word. Ritu went silent and looked at rajveer… "do you love her too?!" …rajveer didn't speak…and stared at naina. Ritu was shocked and whispered to him "you love her too…don't you" and ran out of the room ..Crying..


"ma'am you can sit here till we get some better accommodation for you" instructed the officer whom ritu was following…he pointed to the place beside Naina.
Ritu obeyed and sat near naina. Her body was in flames…as if it was going to burst.
Naina glanced sideways at ritu and wished she had killed this woman right there…and continued looking ahead. For several minutes none of them talked…atlast ritu couldn't keep her emotions trapped inside… "how are YOU naina singh ahluwalia?"
"fine dr mishra…god has kept me alive till now..aren't you happy?"
"oh how I wished I was…" responded ritu with a sarcastic smile.
"isn't it funny dr mishra…that after so many years we are meeting in such circumstances…? I had forgotten your face but the wounds are still fresh inside.."
"you are warning me of something Naina?"
"No…I don't warn troubling strangers dr mishra, I just remind them."
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Major rajveer , Alekh and ali rushed towards the site where there was a report of infiltration. The informer had reported a blast and injuries...one of them was critically injured.
"Where is the site of infiltration sir?" asked ali who was sitting behind Alekh and Rajveer in the jeep.
"Outskirts of shimla"
Ali was nervous …he wondered why.
SITE
The innova had been parked near the place where the bomb was kept which when burst…destroyed the car's front and badly shaking the rest.
"Lt Bedi reporting SIR!"
"Details! Quick!" Hurried, rajveer running along with Alekh and Lt bedi.
"it is an innova sir…which carried six passengers…front destroyed …but the rear end didn't suffer that range of blow…driver died on the way to the hospital…one of the women is injured badly and they are on the way to the hospital too…the other five people which includes two men and three women.. are shifted to the camp here… till army help comes…one of the women is unconscious…"
"Why weren't they stopped at the check post?"
"This was the last car to have entered the outskirts…just before the check post orders came sir!"
"damn! Let's go...there is no time to waste…has ali gone to the camp?" rajveer asked Alekh.
"yes sir!"
Camp
It was a dreadful sight...blood was spilled everywhere, the car was destroyed.…ali entered the camp…and looked at the injured people. One of them had a broken leg…someone's hand was heavily bandaged with blotches of blood showing its ugly face…a women in the corner bed was crying badly...because of the burns her face suffered.
"Sir please ...please come over here…the situation is getting out of control…this woman is losing lot of blood!!" screamed a doctor at ali helplessly wanting for the medical help.
Ali ran towards the bed that had the woman the doctor was talking about. "I tried my best with whatever I had with me…I can't do anything more without the medical help"
Ali stared at the woman lying motionlessly on the bed…a thin line of blood streaming out of the badly injured forehead…
Ali was numb.
"Pooja?!!"
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Edited by drymaple - 30 January 2007 at 8:16am

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Posted: 30 January 2007 at 7:43am | IP Logged
here's the nex part guys!! Embarrassed Embarrassed
hope you haven't forgotten the story LOL LOL LOL
sorry for being late Cry
hope you like this too because i changed the whole thing i had written taking a cue of the present scenario of LRL LOL LOL

love you all! Embarrassed Embarrassed Embarrassed

and i am sorry...just like that! Ouch

*Dakoo_Minzy*

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Posted: 30 January 2007 at 7:49am | IP Logged
its good..it seems a bit close wat might take place i real LRL 2day....keep going..its very nice...
RN 2gether na..
its an RN jodi rite,.?? Tongue Tongue Tongue

angeliclooks_me

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Posted: 30 January 2007 at 7:51am | IP Logged
Originally posted by drymaple

Originally posted by angeliclooks_me

hey devu dear! Big smile ALL DA BEST 4 ur internals! Clap Clap Clap n plzz do post da next part after ur internals r over Wink Tongue Big smile

thanx a lot juhi dear!!EmbarrassedEmbarrassedEmbarrassed

actually my internals are in the first week of feb...still time for that...but as usual i haven't prepared a thingCryCry right now i am going through an "emergency syndrome" LOLLOL have to copy notes and stuffCryEmbarrassed 

nothing new though..it happens everytime before xamsTongue i will try posting the story  because i have written half..Tongue EmbarrassedEmbarrassedTongue

thanx again juhi!!EmbarrassedEmbarrassedEmbarrassed

lots of love,

devyani.

 



no probs dear!!Wink

n btw, dis part was amazing!!!Clapeverything was sooo awesome!!Clapud wid huda.... ritu-naina flashbak....raj-alekh.... n ali n poo.... so poo n her cusinz r injuredCrynyways... dis part truly rocked!!Clapway 2 go devu dear!Clap plzzzz post da next part asap!Wink

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Posted: 30 January 2007 at 8:12am | IP Logged
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Originally posted by angeliclooks_me

Originally posted by drymaple

Originally posted by angeliclooks_me

hey devu dear! Big smile ALL DA BEST 4 ur internals! Clap Clap Clap n plzz do post da next part after ur internals r over Wink Tongue Big smile

thanx a lot juhi dear!!EmbarrassedEmbarrassedEmbarrassed

actually my internals are in the first week of feb...still time for that...but as usual i haven't prepared a thingCryCry right now i am going through an "emergency syndrome" LOLLOL have to copy notes and stuffCryEmbarrassed 

nothing new though..it happens everytime before xamsTongue i will try posting the story  because i have written half..Tongue EmbarrassedEmbarrassedTongue

thanx again juhi!!EmbarrassedEmbarrassedEmbarrassed

lots of love,

devyani.

 



no probs dear!!Wink

n btw, dis part was amazing!!!Clapeverything was sooo awesome!!Clapud wid huda.... ritu-naina flashbak....raj-alekh.... n ali n poo.... so poo n her cusinz r injuredCrynyways... dis part truly rocked!!Clapway 2 go devu dear!Clap plzzzz post da next part asap!Wink

thankkkkkkkkkkkk you juhiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiHug

i know even i felt bad hurting pooja and her cousins....ConfusedCry

i will post as soon as possible...EmbarrassedEmbarrassed

thanks you so much for you lovely comments !EmbarrassedEmbarrassed

take care and have loads of fun!

devyani!Embarrassed

drymaple

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Posted: 30 January 2007 at 8:15am | IP Logged

Originally posted by minnee

its good..it seems a bit close wat might take place i real LRL 2day....keep going..its very nice...
RN 2gether na..
its an RN jodi rite,.?? Tongue Tongue Tongue

actually i am a RN fanEmbarrassedEmbarrassedEmbarrassed

and this story also includes RNTongue but it includes other jodis tooooTongueEmbarrassedEmbarrassed

thank you for liking it!!Smile

take care and have loads of fun!,

devyani.!Embarrassed



Edited by drymaple - 30 January 2007 at 8:16am

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