Joined: 29 December 2006
this is soo bad....but i still post it....i dont like it...it isnt good like the other ones....thats what i think.....i know its bad
Manthan is passing hrough the hallway whenn he sees KT. KT is trapped because her dupatta is stuck. She is trying to get it out when Manthan comes over and see. He helps her out. Manthan stares at her and leaves while mumbling the word 'gawar'. Kt thinks to herself,"Iska problem kya hai. YEh hamesha mujhe gawar bulaya karta hai.Ek din mein usse batadoonge ke mein gawar nahi hoon." Then she does a hmmph and leaves.
She goes to the kitchen to see what's cooking. In the kitchen she meets with Pari and Archita. They were talking about their ideal husbands or ideal guy that they'll fall in love with. She askes,"Kya Chalraha hai, tum log kya batte kar rahe ho" Pari says,"hum ye soch rahe te ke jab hum shaadi karenge toh hamara pati kaisa hoga" Archita says"arre kt tum batao na. tumhe kaisa pati jahiye"kt says"mujhe....mujhe ek aisa patu jahiye joh sirf mujhe nahi balki sare parivaar ko kush rake.Jo baro ki izat kare, bhagwa ki puja kare. joh mujhe bohot pyar kare. jab humare bache ho to uska kyal rakhe aur usse kush rakhe. ek aisa pati..."just them manthan inturrupts,"bas bas. jaisa ladka tumhe jahiye woh tume kabhi nahi milega...aur joh milsakta hai woh tum kabhi nahi jahogi..aur tum to aise keh rahi ho jaise tum kud hi aapna pati bana rahi ho." no one knew he was there and listening. then he started to laugh and left the room. Archita said,"tum iski baton ka bura mat mano.yeh hain hi aisa." kt ignores archita and left the room angrily.
told you its bad
its my first one
give me some improvemnt ideas
Joined: 29 December 2006
theres still more to come..i have to go so ill post it tomorrow or so depending if u guys like it or not...the first main part is still gonna come tho
PLEASE DO REPLY IF YOU READ IT...IF YOU WANT....TELL ME IF YOU LIKED IT OR NOT...
there will be an index to where the parts are located...
part 2: http://www.india-forums.com/forum_posts.asp?TID=507540&T PN=2
part 3: http://www.india-forums.com/forum_posts.asp?TID=507540&T PN=3
Part 4: http://india-forums.com/forum_posts.asp?RTE=1&TID=507540 &KW=desichick4eva&TPN=4
Part 5: http://india-forums.com/forum_posts.asp?RTE=1&TID=507540 &KW=desichick4eva&TPN=4
Part 6: http://india-forums.com/forum_posts.asp?TID=507540&TPN=5 �
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