Hey Storyteller,
"Coming Home"... Buddy, I am hooked!!!👏 Everything felt perfect. Sumo's mum is alive. Shravan's parents are together. Kamini Chachi, is not evil... Pushkar being the perfect friend and good brother... Thoroughly enjoyyyeeed reading the first chapter.
I read your previous work "Desire" and "Vertigo".. when I saw "Coming Home" this morning, couldn't stop myself from reading it further, despite telling myself, I wont visit the forum or pick up another Shraman story to read once i am up in the morning, but i just couldn't. And now, i am hooked.
Loved the content, loved the conversation between Sumo and Shravan... Loved how he went to see her, before heading home..He sounded so cute, when he said "bhoog lagi hain!!".. This felt so in place, as if it was a normal thing and they weren't seeing each other after 3yrs and 6months!!
After the first chapter, I could only ask, "why can't the TV make shows as this perfect?" "why does the maker have to show conflicts and problems?" 😡😡why can't they just take your story and make it into a show? 🥳
You are brilliant. I guess, I told you this before...But once again, take a bow and accept that... I loved each and every word. Looking forward to read more!!! Till then, take care dear and write beautiful stories.
Loads of Love,
Susmita
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