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Posted: 27 May 2016 at 3:49pm | IP Logged
You touched me on the wrong places
and now your fingerprints are everywhere

Your unwanted touch has stained me
and now I crave for the touch that would
wash your fingerprints off
but that's just foolish of me because
I've been scarred for life

Maybe you took my smiles and the
confession of my puppy-love for you
as gestures of consent, isn't it?
Maybe I let this happen

The first time your hand slipped into
my shirt and you spread 'em all over my chest,
I was fooled to believe that it was
okay since I liked you

eventually you were all over me;
on my body parts and on my mind
and I felt loved when you looked at me
like that; like you were drowning in my
deeper shade of blue,
and so I thought this was all okay

But the day your long and slender fingers
slithered into my pants, paying no heed
to my disapproval,
realization dawned upon me;
this is not okay. I didn't ask for it.

There are parts of me that died that day;
parts of me that were caused to wither before
they could get to bloom

This wasn't how I was supposed to
feel love for the first time,
this wasn't how I was supposed to
Be touched for the first time



Edited by incognito. - 07 June 2016 at 7:12pm

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Posted: 28 May 2016 at 11:39pm | IP Logged
wooow

exotic
nice work
cnt like this

all the best
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Posted: 29 May 2016 at 5:08am | IP Logged
Wonderful attempt ,loved it alotClapClap
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Posted: 01 June 2016 at 2:22am | IP Logged
What you've written, it's raw, it's demanding and piercing.
There are parts of me that died that day;
parts of me that were caused to wither before
they could get to bloom.

^Must be my favorite lines of the lot.

Great job!






Edited by Starkheart. - 01 June 2016 at 2:22am
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Posted: 04 June 2016 at 8:32pm | IP Logged
What I love about this poem is that how it is so raw. It has free verse and some parts feel jagged but it just rings so real that it comes across as a beautiful mesh of words. I loved the entire struggle of whether it should be allowed or not because maybe, it's love? But yes, good job. 
Also, I am not sure but I think the word should be dawned and not donned. 

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Posted: 06 June 2016 at 2:34am | IP Logged
Omg.. beautiful ! 
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