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First of all sry fr late rly.concept is diff.go ahead babes continue soon...nd all the best fr ur exams

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Edited by eufara_naghm - 7 years ago

Simply love the concept. Plus its tashan type of concept. Looking forward to next part. Please continue soon. 

So far Chapter 1 is looking great! I will give detail review on Wednesday during my day off. 😃

hey sahira,
go ahead dear...
I am yet to read your 1st chapter, but eager for the plot you described..

Alright!
Read the first chapter too...
First of all, congratulations on your maiden work...
The concept by you is great...
It's something different...
eager to know what conspired between the two to have landed in such a mess...
Apart from all this, I have a few suggestions for you as well... If you feel okay about it, otherwise I don't intend to intrude obviously...
1. I know your exam is about to begin, so you kept it short, that's fine... But as a reader and a writer for a few years now, I can obviously suggest you that, spend time with your script, with each update... You can't always run with writing and posting it immediately... Take a bit more time, read what you wrote in the first go, and make bit of more detailing into the scenes... You would be astounded to see your updates will take a better shape and shall be more meaty.. (It's obviously a suggestion dear... I didn't intend to hurt you... When you can conceptualize a plot, you can definitely write it better, and I know you can do that..)

2. Dear, carefully choose the font color you post your updates with... I would personally suggest never to use lighter shades into writing updates of stories, coz all that you write is all the reader can read.. And colours like light green, yellow and light pink would need readers to strain too much to read the update, and in cases he may skip it coz he can't keep on doing that.. So, in my suggestion, take dark, bright colors to catch the attention of the readers...

That's all from my side for now... I again am saying, I was just suggesting, if you felt bad, I am already sorry dear...

Take care

Aazeen

They both lv each other but now kabir hates her.vry diff.concept i eagerly wnt to read ch.1

Originally posted by: Aazeen02

Alright!
Read the first chapter too...
First of all, congratulations on your maiden work...
The concept by you is great...
It's something different...
eager to know what conspired between the two to have landed in such a mess...
Apart from all this, I have a few suggestions for you as well... If you feel okay about it, otherwise I don't intend to intrude obviously...
1. I know your exam is about to begin, so you kept it short, that's fine... But as a reader and a writer for a few years now, I can obviously suggest you that, spend time with your script, with each update... You can't always run with writing and posting it immediately... Take a bit more time, read what you wrote in the first go, and make bit of more detailing into the scenes... You would be astounded to see your updates will take a better shape and shall be more meaty.. (It's obviously a suggestion dear... I didn't intend to hurt you... When you can conceptualize a plot, you can definitely write it better, and I know you can do that..)

2. Dear, carefully choose the font color you post your updates with... I would personally suggest never to use lighter shades into writing updates of stories, coz all that you write is all the reader can read.. And colours like light green, yellow and light pink would need readers to strain too much to read the update, and in cases he may skip it coz he can't keep on doing that.. So, in my suggestion, take dark, bright colors to catch the attention of the readers...

That's all from my side for now... I again am saying, I was just suggesting, if you felt bad, I am already sorry dear...

Take care

Aazeen

Edited by siramani - 8 years ago

Originally posted by: MistiofMistz

So far Chapter 1 is looking great! I will give detail review on Wednesday during my day off. 😃

Originally posted by: prasannakamila

They both lv each other but now kabir hates her.vry diff.concept i eagerly wnt to read ch.1