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TS: Of Parental Love & Heartache| Part B - Pg 6 - May 7|

Neetz Goldie
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Posted: 24 April 2016 at 1:17pm | IP Logged
Hello Forum waasis!!!!!! :)
I am sure most of you don't know me.LOL

I am here with a TS. Its basically on Adi's feelings. The boy has been neglected by the CVs. He has legit no place in the story. His character had so much potential but he was always ignored. I feel for the boy. I am not happy with the fact that he is treated as a side character. So, this is just my attempt at penning down his thoughts. I haven't been watching but you can't really stay off yhm when you have friends who strongly believe in 'Sharing is caring'.LOL

The scene that gave me the idea for this was the one where Raman refuses to take Adi along with him but readily agrees to take Pihu and Adi feels bad. I have only read about it and not watched it.
I have tried my best here and I hope you guys like it.

A special shout out to my girls. My bunch of crazies- Anku, Krishy, Nidz, Aka, Atii, Anju, Boo, Kavya, Aani and Alu.  Hug

Also, this is dedicated to Anku, my soul sister, my critic and the one who always has my back. Thank you for always encouraging me and bearing with me.I love love you. Heart  Though I should be mad at you for not letting me surprise you. Duhh.. But its still a surprise for the girls.
Yeah yeah..before the rest of you start being DQs, I love all you girls too..LOL

P.S. Before you guys read, let me tell you that this is my first ever piece of fiction. Actually, my very first attempt at writing anything other than essays in school. LOL. So, its highly possible that this may not be up to the mark and may have errors, grammatical or otherwise. I hope you guys will bear with me.

PLEASE do leave likes and comments.

First part in next post.


Edited by Neetz - 06 May 2016 at 1:31pm

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Posted: 24 April 2016 at 1:47pm | IP Logged
I thought this was a wonderful read! Esp since these days, Adi seems to be waffling around despite the presence of his father and Shagun. The only one truly close to him is Shravan (and Pihu of course)

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Posted: 24 April 2016 at 1:49pm | IP Logged
SISTAAA  Hug


Stop with the thanks, rather Its me who should be saying sorry and thank you for foiling your attempts at surprising me. But it wasn't helping when a pretty detached Neets was asking constant questions and opinions from me in regards to Adi LOL And even if you hadn't ultimately told me I would have still known you were up to it. 

Coming to this being your first attempt, CONGRATULATIONS on that, you've finally done what I've been asking you to. With someone with so many ideas up her sleeves and such clarity of thoughts you should have been writing all along Embarrassed But thank god to Aditya Bhalla for inspiring you finally,all the more reasons to love him now. 


I don't have to tell you how much I love Adi, and how much I've always felt for the kid. He was misguided for 13 years of his life, taken away by his mother from his real family to just be pushed aside in a house that only provided him with riches and no love. Then comes in Raman and Ishita who manage to rescue him post a lot of drama where he's made to feel like a pendulum swinging two and fro. And when he finally did manage to gain a family, the incessant drama by his parents lead to him losing both families, both parents and now left with nothing. 

Ishita wanted to die for Adi, Raman doesn't mind dying if Pihu wasn't around either and Shagun is also Pihu's mom more than Adi's. So where does that keep Adi? That hurts when thought about and my heart goes out to the boy.

You've penned down his inner turmoil, his loneliness, his queries and dilemma so so well that it hits right where it has to. Not only have you gone over every detail of his entire life and its wavy ride but also made him honest to accept his own flaws there. 

What stands out the most in all of this is the scene with Ishita, where his shock on seeing her and the deluge of varied emotions he went through made me literally tear up. I cried when he hugged her, when he was elated on finding her alive and then cried with him feeling the frustration and anger and disappointment when he realizes she chose to stay away too, even though she could have at least chosen him. Again it was either Ruhi more important or Pihu.

Thanks so so much for writing this NEE, this story will be cherished for as far as I can remember because surely the writers wouldn't dare penning something so beautiful and concentrate on the feelings of this boy whose as much as part of the show and IshRa's life as Ruhi is. 

Thanks once again for the lovely surprise sista, and for always being there to bear me and my tantrums and for understanding me so well. I am so so proud of you for finally writing, and I want to hug you tight for not just attempting but for also choosing something that is so close to our hearts Hug


P.S - Don't say you aren't nuanced or skilled enough. If this isn't genius then nothing is. And I wouldn't just say it like that.


Edited by -Anku- - 24 April 2016 at 11:22pm

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Posted: 24 April 2016 at 2:10pm | IP Logged
woww..
vry well u've written..
superb awsme..
adi is also a imp character of yhm which was neglectd by cvs
glad u've cme wid dis story ..
lyk dis updte..
plz continue soon nd if possible try 2 add adi-ishu more scenes hw dey bond after so much of revelations/shocks 

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Posted: 24 April 2016 at 2:14pm | IP Logged
Hi Neetz,
You have beautifully penned Adi thoughts

Do Pm me when you update please

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Posted: 24 April 2016 at 2:28pm | IP Logged
Wow superb
From adi's perspective ... Emotional, realistic and relatable .
Thank you for writing this wonderful piece.
To continue and please pm me .

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Posted: 24 April 2016 at 2:48pm | IP Logged
Nee!! This was such a bolt from the blue and so so so beautifully written.Clap
I knew you felt for Adi ..that you actually hurt for him and you have managed to turn that into something so beautiful..

The opening scene where Adi was reflecting on his life was agonizing and as you rightly expressed "he has always got the shorter end of the stick". Yet there is this calmness about him now - such a far cry from the hatefilled and bitter 11 yr old boy that he was although the circumstances are just the same. He was grossly neglected then and he is being grossly neglected now .
I also loved the simple, direct and very valid questions that he asked his Ishima . And the way he cut Mani off - sooo like his Papa Day Dreaming 
 " ghar ka Chirag" line was hard hitting... Surprisingly , all through out his outburst I couldn't sense any bitterness in him...it was just PAIN..HEART WRENCHING PAIN..and desparate cry for some answers..

And I just realized - how many times has this kid suffered the loss of a parent?CryCry  Only to realize later that it was all a farce.

His parents need a reality check very badly Nee and I am eagerly waiting for the next part . 

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