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ShraMan poem : Faaslein...!!

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Posted: 21 April 2016 at 6:27am | IP Logged
Hello guys!!!

As I said am back with a new poem on ShraMan's equation with each other Embarrassed

Hope I all like it Smile


FAASLEIN...


Tere mere darmiyaan yeh...
Chand kadmo ke faaslein...

Doori yun toh kuch palo me ho jaaye paar...
Arso puraane zakhmo ke ghamo ne par rokk rakha mere yaar...

Chahe shikvo ko keh na paaye yeh zubaan...
Nazarein toh karti hai har dard ko bayaan..

Sanjoye hain jo yaari ke dhundle pal...
Aaj ho gaye hai humaara beeta kal...

Qaafilein ab bhi teri yaadon ke aankon mein rehte hain...
Mutmayeen shabo mein ashqq ban kar behte hain...

Chashme-E-Nam phir haule se muskuraati hain...
Khushnuma yaadein jab teri hawaon ki bheeni mehek si sehlaati hain...

Roothi nazarein gilo ke lamhe bhi ginwaati hain..
Beete palo se yun rubaroo karwaati hain...

Man karta hain ab har gham bhula dein...
Muskura ke tumhe gale se laga lein...

Pal bhar mein har khamoshi mite dein...
Dil ke shor ko sukoon dila dein...

Jod le tumse apne saare raaste...
Kyonki tum aur hum bane ek duje ke vaaste...

Am hoping u all will give me ur feedback on my first ShraMan poem Embarrassed
Likes, appreciations, n constructive criticisms are welcome Smile


Dictionary Sleepy

*Chand = Few
*Zakhmo = wounds
*Shikvo = complaints
*Bayaan = express
*Sanjoye = cherish/treasure
*Mutmayeen = (here) silent
*Shabo = nights
*Ashqq = tears
*Qaafilein = groups/ caravan (here referred to memories)
*Chashme-E-Nam = wet eyes
*Khushnuma = happy
*Bheeni mehek = sweet fragrance
*Gilo/Gile = reproach
*Rubaroo = face to face


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Posted: 21 April 2016 at 6:38am | IP Logged
Ooh Amreen! This was really really nice man! 
"Roothi nazarein gilo ke lamhe bhi ginwaati hain..
Beete palo se yun rubaroo karwaati hain..."

^Personally loved this line! Keep writing girl! :)


*Also lowkey thanks, I'd like to think my Hindi is pretty good but reading this much Hindi at once it was a bit hard for me to read + make sense of what I'm reading LOL so the little word-key at the end was a really thoughtful & sweet gesture! :)

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Posted: 21 April 2016 at 6:44am | IP Logged
Originally posted by .SankaDevi.

Ooh Amreen! This was really really nice man!
"Roothi nazarein gilo ke lamhe bhi ginwaati hain..
Beete palo se yun rubaroo karwaati hain..."
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*Also lowkey thanks, I'd like to think my Hindi is pretty good but reading this much Hindi at once it was a bit hard for me to read + make sense of what I'm reading LOL so the little word-key at the end was a really thoughtful & sweet gesture! :)


Thanks a lot Kritu!!!
Am so glad u wrote ur response...

My fav is Chashme-E-Nam stanza Smile
Baby... its not hindi..but pure urdu...
I knew here most people must not be knowing such high level urdu... so did that...
Kyuki agar padhenge par samjhenge nhi toh kya faayda ROFL
I have written one more...check it too!! Embarrassed

http://www.india-forums.com/forum_posts.asp?TID=4613009




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Posted: 21 April 2016 at 6:45am | IP Logged
Aaamreen. .. u r a GEM..loved it Embarrassed

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Posted: 21 April 2016 at 6:49am | IP Logged
Originally posted by Ruchiritu

Aaamreen. .. u r a GEM..loved it Embarrassed


Shukriya... shukriya Big smile

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Posted: 22 April 2016 at 6:32am | IP Logged
very nice...
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Posted: 22 April 2016 at 12:28pm | IP Logged
Originally posted by MysticRiver

very nice...


Thanks!! Smile
But seriously such thanda responses... like 2 3 comments discourage from writing more!!!!

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