Posted: 03 July 2016 at 6:29am | IP Logged
Yesterday it was raining cats & dogs here and I was stuck at home. My laptop was kaputt, there were no new books with me, Mom was watching some
show on the TV & I was going crazy. I was in desperate need of something to read or I would have gone crazy. That is when I remembered your SS. Now, I usually never read a story till its complete (you have to complete this one or I will go crazy & will keep pestering you as well!) but then I decided to skim through it quickly. And once I started there was no stopping me. Read all the 9 chapters in one sitting.
With 9 chapters done I see the "over enthusiastic" you is winning
but I dont mind at all. The recipe for "sweet deals" seems very well balanced & I am sure that the ultimate dish is gonna be lip smacking good
I like the way you write. Simple & to the point. Even when you go into descriptions your language isnt too very flowery which to me makes it all the more interesting. I love quotes & all the ones you have used are beautiful & well fitting & most of the times keeping up with the theme of cooking/ baking/ confectionery, etc
Although you have said that Mrs. Das's shop is at Vashi in my mind's eye I pictured it somewhere in South Bombay & I imagined it like an Iranian coffeehouse!
Quaint, always filled with the aromas of all the goodies they make there, enticing passers by's with the gorgeous smells coming out of them
By the end of chapter 1 I was quite curious to know what had made the girls leave their home & why could they never return. The Ragini here is a lot different from the one we have in the show, and I like her all the more for it
Dragon Daadi is same though, and a lot worse maybe, though at least she loves Swara equally...in her own way that is. The first meeting between SwaSan was all
(yes I could make out it was Sanskaar. Who else but he could be so charming!
) I loved the exchange of notes between them. There is something very appealing about a man who can write so well, expressing a lot through the simplest of words. Not cheesy, not lewd, just the right words which express genuine liking but a the same time are respectful & decent
God! But where did such men go?! And yes, that use of a fountain pen...
Only a girl who loves to read like the Swara here would understand why its so special. It just is! Lovely quote there btw about the fountain pen
I am so happy that after Swara accepted his friendship it was she who took the initiative to go to his table to sit with him & get to know him better. Men who are 100% sure about themselves are ofc nice, who doesnt like the self assured men, but even the most assured of men being a little unsure about what to speak around that one special girl...that is cute
IMO it also says a lot about the girl. The man would think before speaking because she isn't the sort who would be impressed by "hey sweetie or hey baby"
She will make him work...HARD!
I liked Swara's BG story. So she was first impressed by Anjan Gupta then?
Why settle for second best then girl! Daadi
God knows what could have happened had she not turned up
Anyways, I always knew in my heart of hearts that yes, this callous guy will eventually turn out to be Lucky
That role in every SwaSan story is reserved for Laksh Durgaprasad Maheshwari
Though I must say one thing, I do understand what he must have felt too. At such a young age, it can be a tad bit overwhelming for a guy to take over the responsibility of a girl & a home. Some men cannot even do that at 50
So Laksh does have the excuse of age. He started off on a path & just couldn't turn back. Ofc he could have done the decent thing, gone to the station & told her a clear NO I am not coming with you! But then it is so much easy to just shirk responsibility.
Correlating Swara with Kintsugi was a mind blowing touch
I just cannot explain why...but even as a reader I could feel how special Swara was to Sanskaar to be using such a comparison, so I can well imagine what Swara must have felt
Ragini is such a well etched character here
So she ran away with Swara because she too wanted to be free. Such an honest girl
I totally get where she is coming from. Daadi does love her grand - daughters but her love is the sort that stifles, not the sort that allows them to grow into their own
So yeah I can understand why she felt betrayed that Swara would leave her alone with Daadi & Ma Baba. You cannot control that first reaction which you feel when you hear or experience such a thing. That first instant reaction is the most human part of all of us not guided by the rational mind but just something that is felt
And now I am so proud of her for rejecting Laksh. Though I do feel a little bit sorry for Laksh I think from Ragini's POV she is 100% right in rejecting him. One question: Ragini was determined to never marry a Marwadi. She knows Laksh is a Marwadi since his name is Laksh Maheshwari...so IDK has she finally got over her caste bias or is it something else? Did Laksh maybe lie to her about his name & then when she did get to know he was a Marwadi it was too late since she was already in love?
Mrs Das is yet another compelling character. I loved the lady & had tears in my eyes when we got to her back story
And while I am all for 'family se kuch nahi chupana chahiye" but I did not understand why Sanskaar needed to tell AP about Laksh & his history with Swara. Sometimes it is better to let the past rest. Since Sanskaar did not know that the Gadodia's thought their girls were dead I think that was a little unnecessary for him to do. Sanskaar could have just talked about Swara being the girl he met in Mumbai & whom he wants to marry (WHY WOULD YOU LEAVE OUT SUCH AN IMPORTANT DETAIL YOU MORON! MEN!!!
) I fear in the next chapter that mad cap Daadi is going to insist Laksh marry Swara since it is because of him that all this has happened
Can we not have that please
Or maybe Swara can just refuse point blank to have anything to do with Laksh
samaaj & daadi be damned
I loved how immediately after the Laksh fiasco we got such a cute SwaSan moment
Sanskaar doesn't leave her alone, she doesn't drive him away wanting to be alone. They want to be together at that time
and not just together together
Btw that conversation just before RagLak came in was all
For some reason throughout this SS I kept hearing "kuch toh hua hai, kuch ho gaya hai" in my mind
1) When I read that Ragini's bf was a reader...especially the sort who reads in book stores, loses track of his surroundings while reading, has his nose in the book always...that was one time I was confused about if it is going to be Laksh or not. I just do not imagine Laksh that way
In my mind Laksh will always be the one with a chain round his neck, a stud in his ear sporting cheap sunglasses & watches
Sab show ki kripa hai
2) How often do you update?
Once a week?
And how many more chapters left?
3) Light reading is good but it can be made better when you mix in trivia. I loved reading about all the references to poems, food, sugar glass, Kintsugi. It just proves that you are not only a good writer but an avid reader too. Only then can you be so knowledgeable about so many diverse things
The amount of effort & research you have put into such a simple story is worthy of an applause
Edited by The.Lannister - 03 July 2016 at 12:59pm