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Posted: 30 June 2016 at 6:58am | IP Logged
Originally posted by CogitoErgoSum

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Res Smile
Shall un res tomorrow, Nynu Hug

Nynu...please bear with my tardiness. Confused I was planning to un res today, but then got caught up with unexpected work.  I will do this tomorrow, pakka. 

Loads of Love 

Viji 

Nynu...please excuse typos,  I am typing this from my mobile, not an endeavour which I am comfortable with, for making detailed comments. LOL

Why were you nervous about the back stories my dear...it was all so well described and knit together. I just LOVED the Dragon's Smile back story, the tale of her daughter Ranjini and her marriage with David, against her parents' wishes. That agony of a parent losing her child, of losing that last change she had of a reconciliation...that was so very emotional and hard hitting. I was crying, really crying when I read that. So achingly poignant. 

So the Maheshwaris and the Gadodias are social acquaintances. Interesting. And Annapurna really has karma coming back to bite her, after speculating that he girls who disappeared weren't exactly blameless, and that Sanskaar had gone a bit "wayward" in his presumed love for Kavita, choosing his affection for her over his family, which, in Annapurna's opinion, Lakshya would never have done. Confused Well no, he didn't.  He just did something far more despicable, spineless and gutless. LOLWink

I just loved the family dynamics you showed for the Maheshwaris and the Gadodias. The reactions of Annapurna, Durga Prasad, Ram Prasad and Sujata; Adarsh, Parineeta and Uttara even, to Lakshya's callous mistake. 

Parvati and Shomi's reactions to the girls' disappearance was also so well etched. Love the fact that Shomi always believed her daughters would return one day. 

That scene between Dragon Das and SwaRagini Smile was beautiful. Just beautiful.  The way she talked about why she took the girls in, how she started thinking of them as her granddaughters...amazingly lovely.

Can't wait for the next chapter. And do bear with the fact that I unres'd so late on this one. Confused Will do my best to be more prompt for the next ones. Hug

Loads of Love 

Viji 


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Posted: 01 July 2016 at 11:08am | IP Logged
Originally posted by bennetlizzy

Hello Nyna

I'm res-ing here due to the absolute loss of words

Would come back soon with a coherent and befitting reply

Love
N

P.S. Had 9 chapters to in a row and irony is it ends with a perfect cliffhanger. 

It is a cliffhanger??? Is it mean being pleasedEvil Smile, maybe, but I am

Un-res


Hello Nyna

Firstly I feel like an idiot for missing this out all along. I can't even start to explain what a treat it has been from the start. 

You know the best thing about reading things is? Living them. Being able to watch the scene unfurl around as you sit with a book in your hand. The stage sets up by itself, the curtains raise and then your senses kick in. You smell the aroma of freshly baked goods, the richness of chocolate, a hint of vanilla and the best of all the steamy rich coffee blended with the smell of warm summer and cedar...and then the characters walk in. One after the other...they move around you, they talk, they laugh , they, they play around, they hug and kiss.

I don't know why but it felt like one of those times when and where I felt transported to an altogether different place the moment I started reading. 

One of the things that really appealed to me was that all those conversations and feelings, those emotions were dealt within just those four walls. Gives the feel of a show. 

****sigh*** you know what is even better than writing and fanstasing about an OTP you adore, reading comments like this. Which should in part explain why I take so long, at times,  to respond to comments I adore. I read the comment, am completely overwhelmed and at times wonder in slight disbelief, is it my story they are talking about? And then I think, let me read it one more time and I am lost...to form a reply.HugHug

Nyna I won't dwell into how well you portrayed the characters and try to analyse them. I would just say that they were perfect as they were made. Be it sanskar's unconditional love, swara's obstinacy, ragini's exuberant attitude or lakshya's utter lack of humane feelings they were perfect as they were. 

You really picked the key characteristics Clap- Sanskaar's unconditional love (I am sure he exists only in the fantasy world we createDay Dreaming), Swara's stubborn to accept that she could be forgiven and does deserve a second chance.Ouch And Ragini - yes she is exuberant, even though she is almost as guilty as Swara for having left their home, she still has a "Go for it, Girl" Smileand Lakshya - well it is mostly cowardice, an ostrich type reaction, bury the problem or your head in the sand rather than face the issue on had.Shocked

But I would love to quote some instances I loved. Like when ragini went all protective over sanskar when she first met him. And when she just took him to the side and explained to him why Swara went so pale suddenly on seeing those regular. How she said " you Both are family"
And sanskar, how he treats Ragini as friend/sister/family/ partner in crime. And his no-nonsense- you-suck-bro attitude with lakshya. His reaction when Swara told him Ragini considers him as her big brother and seeks his approval.
Those were just some of the best moments from me. Not to mention the incident with the pastry knife. And rag-lak's conversation that followed.

Ragini going all protective - my favourite scene as well (It is okay, right if I have my favouritesD'oh) Though what I did love writing was about the Ragini and Sanskaar friendship, something we could have been so beautiful but was so butchered by the show.Cry Though I am absolutely thrilled that loved so many instances.Blushing

I'm totally in love with story. Just have then doing what they are doing  and keep writing what you. Right now I feel like I could eat the whole morning batch of cupcakes and cookies reading this again. But more pressing things to deal with right now. 

Those cupcakes, all actual recipes which my friend bakes on a regular basis. An ocean and a few continents separate us, else I would truly be eating those goodies quite often.Wink

Hoping to get back soon.(that's asking for an update)

Update - soon enough - now that the ML madness is finally doneSmile

Lots of love
N



Dear Nalini,

Finally replied above, in blue

love,
Nyna

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Posted: 01 July 2016 at 11:12am | IP Logged
Originally posted by iam_aheli_98

Hi Nyna,Smile
Such a beautiful update.Clap Finally the Maheshwaris got to know about Lakshya's truth. Mrs. Das is so good and kind lady.Big smile Felt sad for her past.Cry Poor Swara and Ragini, they were totally confused about returning to their home until Mrs. Das made them agree and went to their baadi along with them.Big smile But OMG! What scene is awaiting for our SwaRagini at their baadi??Confused Update soon.Embarrassed And thanks for the pm.Big smile
With love,
Aheli.

Dear Aheli,

Seeing your reply makes me so happy. Yes finally everyone came to know about Lakshya. Mrs Das, yes had a painful past and yet when she finally asks for forgiveness from her daughter, she gets a chance to make a difference. It was a blessing for both her and the sisters. And because of her story they were convinced enough to go home.

Awaiting at the Baadi - a nice surprise and a very simple one. Do not worry too much.Wink

Will update soon. 

love,
Nyna

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hi nyna ,
part 8 and 9 both were awesome reads dear ...

 so lakshya truth is finally out ! and i loved the way you described of annapurna being happy that it is sanskaar who has loved kavita and Lakshya not even started to walk that way .. awesome depiction dear ... I love these depictions in all the stories i have read of yours till today ... it is a kind of magic in your writing even though you mostly make your stories to the simplest plot .

annapurna remainding herself of "Karma" hitting her and also her belief towards Lakshya being broken .. it is a sad moment for her indeed.. 

she knowing the effect on Swara and ragini's family after they go missing was little surprising for me . I also feel sad for the gadodia family especially their dadi .. she putting blame on herself for their dissaperence and scolding her for her rude behavior towards them which made them take this drastic step was very sad . But , i appreciate Sharmista's belief that her daughter's are alive 

but the highlight of this part was the DRAGON'S story i was actually numb after reading it . It took some time for me to come back . I was literally feeling to cry ..

her daughter marrying a christian and they being angry on her and her subsequent death . she being guilty for her deed and then finding solace in her daughter's grave was really something too emotional . I liked David's personality actually he living with his and ranjana's memories .. not getting married again .. these people are actually hard to find 

I got too attached to the Ranjana song previously itself but after it's connection with Mrs. das's life .. it has actually made me more attached it it . I hum it when i want to get refreshed i remember your story while i hum it . i have given it my own tune ... even though i know only one line of it ..

you  have shaped in a very beautiful way Nyna ! it was like a topsy- turvy roller coaster ride .. i am really enjoying it.

I am eagerly waiting to see what is Waiting for swara and ragini in Baadi .. update soon dear 

Love 

Soundharya..

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Posted: 02 July 2016 at 8:51am | IP Logged
Originally posted by CogitoErgoSum


Nynu...please excuse typos,  I am typing this from my mobile, not an endeavour which I am comfortable with, for making detailed comments. LOL

Viji, No issues, your comments are always treasured, (typing from mobiles is quite tough, I find the ipad itself a tad difficult - the touch screen responds that way it wants to my touch, rarely does what I want it to do.Wink)

Why were you nervous about the back stories my dear...it was all so well described and knit together. I just LOVED the Dragon's Smile back story, the tale of her daughter Ranjini and her marriage with David, against her parents' wishes. That agony of a parent losing her child, of losing that last change she had of a reconciliation...that was so very emotional and hard hitting. I was crying, really crying when I read that. So achingly poignant. 

Mrs Das - I read somewhere " Death is not the greatest loss in life. The greatest loss is what dies inside us while we live" - Norman Cousins. I am sure that is what Mrs Das must have been feeling, her daughter's death was painful, but I am sure the greater agony would the loss of a chance to make amends, to forgive her daughter. There must have been no greater pain than not having had a chance to reconcile and to seek forgiveness. 

So the Maheshwaris and the Gadodias are social acquaintances. Interesting. And Annapurna really has karma coming back to bite her, after speculating that he girls who disappeared weren't exactly blameless, and that Sanskaar had gone a bit "wayward" in his presumed love for Kavita, choosing his affection for her over his family, which, in Annapurna's opinion, Lakshya would never have done. Confused Well no, he didn't.  He just did something far more despicable, spineless and gutless. LOLWink

Yes, since both were Marwadis, it made sense that they would be social acquaintances (I am familiar with this sort of acquaintance, where you have people of one state staying in city which is not their home state). Oh yes, Karma is really going to give it to Annapurna, she simply could not help thinking that the girls were slightly at fault as was Sanskaar. Lakshya...well he did not do anything, which was the problemWink

I just loved the family dynamics you showed for the Maheshwaris and the Gadodias. The reactions of Annapurna, Durga Prasad, Ram Prasad and Sujata; Adarsh, Parineeta and Uttara even, to Lakshya's callous mistake. 

***sigh***even Annapurna, who loved her son the most, did admit that what he did an "omission of character" and well, everyone in the family knew how the reactions had been when Sanskaar had openly confessed his feeling for Kavita. Lakshya furtive actions were quite surprising to say the least.

Parvati and Shomi's reactions to the girls' disappearance was also so well etched. Love the fact that Shomi always believed her daughters would return one day. 

Parvati did have a role to play, if only she had not been so draconian, maybe Swara would not have been so carried away. So when she was convinced that her grand daughters were dead, she could help but feel responsible. Shomi, was always the sensible firm person, so I just had to make her be the only one who refused to believe her daughters were dead.

That scene between Dragon Das and SwaRagini Smile was beautiful. Just beautiful.  The way she talked about why she took the girls in, how she started thinking of them as her granddaughters...amazingly lovely.

Dragon Das - she met the girls when she had finally made peace with herself and had asked forgiveness from her daughter. So the fates did give her a chance to help someone else, and at that time the sisters needed it the most. And if all had been well, I am sure she would have had granddaughters who would be of the similar age. So it was just a simple hop skip jumping to actually treating them like her granddaughters, she did try to be aloof but did not succeed. Lucky for the girlsSmile

Can't wait for the next chapter. And do bear with the fact that I unres'd so late on this one. Confused Will do my best to be more prompt for the next ones. Hug

Sweetheart, delays in res - please do not dwell on it, it is perfectly acceptable among us, especially with me, I hold the record for the longest time taken to unresWink

Loads of Love 

Viji 

Dear Viji,HugHug

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Posted: 02 July 2016 at 9:18am | IP Logged
Originally posted by Soundharya_01

hi nyna ,
part 8 and 9 both were awesome reads dear ...

 so lakshya truth is finally out ! and i loved the way you described of annapurna being happy that it is sanskaar who has loved kavita and Lakshya not even started to walk that way .. awesome depiction dear ... I love these depictions in all the stories i have read of yours till today ... it is a kind of magic in your writing even though you mostly make your stories to the simplest plot .

Yes, finally Lakshya's truth is out and everyone knows about him. You did like Annapurna, she is a mother, and however much she loves Sanskaar I have always felt that she does love Lakshya a little bit more, so when the whole family was upset with Sanskaar, she must have been a little happy and relieved that her son was not like Sanskaar - she is quite right, her son is not at all like Sanskaar.LOL

And you love my writing - that is such a great compliment,I am Blushing

annapurna remainding herself of "Karma" hitting her and also her belief towards Lakshya being broken .. it is a sad moment for her indeed.. 

Oh yes, Karma has really got it for Annapurna, he is not so good as she thought and now he is being firm in marrying Ragini

she knowing the effect on Swara and ragini's family after they go missing was little surprising for me . I also feel sad for the gadodia family especially their dadi .. she putting blame on herself for their dissaperence and scolding her for her rude behavior towards them which made them take this drastic step was very sad . But , i appreciate Sharmista's belief that her daughter's are alive 

Dadi! As the girls did admit, she did love them but was strict, maybe a little more than warranted, so in retrospective, she did hold herself responsible for the girls leaving home. Shomi, a strong woman with a lot of faith in herself so she refused to believe her daughters being dead. She was right, her daughters are alive, indeed.

but the highlight of this part was the DRAGON'S story i was actually numb after reading it . It took some time for me to come back . I was literally feeling to cry .. 
her daughter marrying a christian and they being angry on her and her subsequent death . she being guilty for her deed and then finding solace in her daughter's grave was really something too emotional . I liked David's personality actually he living with his and ranjana's memories .. not getting married again .. these people are actually hard to find 

True, most of us carry unnecessary grudges, and when we want to make amends it is too late, life does not give us a chance. Mrs Das carried her guilt for so many years and it was a single chance she took, to meet David that changed all their lives, she found peace and forgiveness, and the chance to make a difference to Swara and Ragini, who needed it at that time. She took them into her home and they in turn became the granddaughters she had never had. A classic example of chance, choice and consequence.

I got too attached to the Ranjana song previously itself but after it's connection with Mrs. das's life .. it has actually made me more attached it it . I hum it when i want to get refreshed i remember your story while i hum it . i have given it my own tune ... even though i know only one line of it ..

The Ranjana song is truly a beautiful one, right. I love the song, I do not understand bengali very well, and one of friends translated it for me, I heard it on quite a loop when I wrote some chapters.

you  have shaped in a very beautiful way Nyna ! it was like a topsy- turvy roller coaster ride .. i am really enjoying it.

I am so glad you enjoy reading this tale, this is what I enjoy, apart from being able to write on our golden couple, is reading such wonderful comments.

I am eagerly waiting to see what is Waiting for swara and ragini in Baadi .. update soon dear 

Will update soon.

Love 

Soundharya..

Dear Soundharya,

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love,
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Yesterday it was raining cats & dogs here and I was stuck at home. My laptop was kaputt, there were no new books with me, Mom was watching some Stern Smile show on the TV & I was going crazy. I was in desperate need of something to read or I would have gone crazy. That is when I remembered your SS. Now, I usually never read a story till its complete (you have to complete this one or I will go crazy & will keep pestering you as well!) but then I decided to skim through it quickly. And once I started there was no stopping me. Read all the 9 chapters in one sitting.

With 9 chapters done I see the "over enthusiastic" you is winningLOL but I dont mind at all. The recipe for "sweet deals" seems very well balanced & I am sure that the ultimate dish is gonna be lip smacking goodEmbarrassed I like the way you write. Simple & to the point. Even when you go into descriptions your language isnt too very flowery which to me makes it all the more interesting. I love quotes & all the ones you have used are beautiful & well fitting & most of the times keeping up with the theme of cooking/ baking/ confectionery, etc 


Although you have said that Mrs. Das's shop is at Vashi in my mind's eye I pictured it somewhere in South Bombay & I imagined it like an Iranian coffeehouse! Day Dreaming  Quaint, always filled with the aromas of all the goodies they make there, enticing passers by's with the gorgeous smells coming out of themEmbarrassed By the end of chapter 1 I was quite curious to know what had made the girls leave their home & why could they never return. The Ragini here is a lot different from the one we have in the show, and I like her all the more for itEmbarrassed Dragon Daadi is same though, and a lot worse maybe, though at least she loves Swara equally...in her own way that is. The first meeting between SwaSan was all Embarrassed Embarrassed Embarrassed (yes I could make out it was Sanskaar. Who else but he could be so charming!Day Dreaming) I loved the exchange of notes between them. There is something very appealing about a man who can write so well, expressing a lot through the simplest of words. Not cheesy, not lewd, just the right words which express genuine liking but a the same time are respectful & decentEmbarrassed God! But where did such men go?! And yes, that use of a fountain pen...Embarrassed Only a girl who loves to read like the Swara here would understand why its so special. It just is! Lovely quote there btw about the fountain penEmbarrassed

I am so happy that after Swara accepted his friendship it was she who took the initiative to go to his table to sit with him & get to know him better. Men who are 100% sure about themselves are ofc nice, who doesnt like the self assured men, but even the most assured of men being a little unsure about what to speak around that one special girl...that is cuteEmbarrassed IMO it also says a lot about the girl. The man would think before speaking because she isn't the sort who would be impressed by "hey sweetie or hey baby"LOL She will make him work...HARD!


I liked Swara's BG story. So she was first impressed by Anjan Gupta then?LOL Why settle for second best then girl! DaadiAngry God knows what could have happened had she not turned upOuch Anyways, I always knew in my heart of hearts that yes, this callous guy will eventually turn out to be Lucky ROFL That role in every SwaSan story is reserved for Laksh Durgaprasad Maheshwari ROFL Though I must say one thing, I do understand what he must have felt too. At such a young age, it can be a tad bit overwhelming for a guy to take over the responsibility of a girl & a home. Some men cannot even do that at 50 Ermm So Laksh does have the excuse of age. He started off on a path & just couldn't turn back. Ofc he could have done the decent thing, gone to the station & told her a clear NO I am not coming with you! But then it is so much easy to just shirk responsibility. 


Correlating Swara with Kintsugi was a mind blowing touchClap I just cannot explain why...but even as a reader I could feel how special Swara was to Sanskaar to be using such a comparison, so I can well imagine what Swara must have feltEmbarrassed

Ragini is such a well etched character hereClap So she ran away with Swara because she too wanted to be free. Such an honest girlClap I totally get where she is coming from. Daadi does love her grand - daughters but her love is the sort that stifles, not the sort that allows them to grow into their ownOuch So yeah I can understand why she felt betrayed that Swara would leave her alone with Daadi & Ma Baba. You cannot control that first reaction which you feel when you hear or experience such a thing. That first instant reaction is the most human part of all of us not guided by the rational mind but just something that is feltOuch And now I am so proud of her for rejecting Laksh. Though I do feel a little bit sorry for Laksh I think from Ragini's POV she is 100% right in rejecting him. One question: Ragini was determined to never marry a Marwadi. She knows Laksh is a Marwadi since his name is Laksh Maheshwari...so IDK has she finally got over her caste bias or is it something else? Did Laksh maybe lie to her about his name & then when she did get to know he was a Marwadi it was too late since she was already in love?Confused 


Mrs Das is yet another compelling character.  I loved the lady & had tears in my eyes when we got to her back storyCry 

Though really how stupid are SwaRagini to actually go to a completely new city with a perfect stranger. That part is a horror to even read  because that is exactly how many girls land up at the wrong placeDead Dead Dead Surely someone was watching over them that Mrs. Das was a decent woman! I shudder to think of the alternativeDead 


And while I am all for 'family se kuch nahi chupana chahiye" but I did not understand why Sanskaar needed to tell AP about Laksh & his history with Swara. Sometimes it is better to let the past rest. Since Sanskaar did not know that the Gadodia's thought their girls were dead I think that was a little unnecessary for him to do. Sanskaar could have just talked about Swara being the girl he met in Mumbai & whom he wants to marry (WHY WOULD YOU LEAVE OUT SUCH AN IMPORTANT DETAIL YOU MORON! MEN!!!Angry) I fear in the next chapter that mad cap Daadi is going to insist Laksh marry Swara since it is because of him that all this has happenedDead Can we not have that pleaseDead Or maybe Swara can just refuse point blank to have anything to do with LakshEvil Smile samaaj & daadi be damnedSleepy


I loved how immediately after the Laksh fiasco we got such a cute SwaSan momentEmbarrassed Sanskaar doesn't leave her alone, she doesn't drive him away wanting to be alone. They want to be together at that timeEmbarrassed and not just together together LOL 


Btw that conversation just before RagLak came in was all ROFL


For some reason throughout this SS I kept hearing "kuch toh hua hai, kuch ho gaya hai" in my mindLOL 


Lastly kudos to you for writing RagLak in such a manner that the reader doesnt dismiss them with a WackoErmm You have made them both very human! Some really good writing thereClap so good that you can in fact rename your SS as SwaSan/ RagLak SSWinkLOL


P.S.: 

1) When I read that Ragini's bf was a reader...especially the sort who reads in book stores, loses track of his surroundings while reading, has his nose in the book always...that was one time I was confused about if it is going to be Laksh or not. I just do not imagine Laksh that way ROFL In my mind Laksh will always be the one with a chain round his neck, a stud in his ear sporting cheap sunglasses & watches ROFL Sab show ki kripa haiLOL


2) How often do you update?Embarrassed Once a week?Embarrassed And how many more chapters left?Embarrassed

3) Light reading is good but it can be made better when you mix in trivia. I loved reading about all the references to poems, food, sugar glass, Kintsugi. It just proves that you are not only a good writer but an avid reader too. Only then can you be so knowledgeable about so many diverse thingsClap The amount of effort & research you have put into such a simple story is worthy of an applauseClap





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Originally posted by The.Lannister

Yesterday it was raining cats & dogs here and I was stuck at home. My laptop was kaputt, there were no new books with me, Mom was watching some Stern Smile show on the TV & I was going crazy. I was in desperate need of something to read or I would have gone crazy. That is when I remembered your SS. Now, I usually never read a story till its complete (you have to complete this one or I will go crazy & will keep pestering you as well!) but then I decided to skim through it quickly. And once I started there was no stopping me. Read all the 9 chapters in one sitting.

I can so relate to that point, I am actually a step more than you, I am one of those truly eccentric readers who judge a book by its ending, even the mystery / suspense books - for these I actually read enough to identify who the murderer isLOL I never start a book where the ending does not appeal to me - and believe me, strange looks are the least I garner when I confess to this. Digressing a  bit, this is one point that makes me wary of starting to read book series especially after the WoT series debacle and with what might now happen to ASOFAIOuch. I would rarely read a SS till it was completed till Shru's DK happened, and here am I writing oneSmile And yes,  I will complete it.
 
With 9 chapters done I see the "over enthusiastic" you is winningLOL but I dont mind at all. The recipe for "sweet deals" seems very well balanced & I am sure that the ultimate dish is gonna be lip smacking goodEmbarrassed I like the way you write. Simple & to the point. Even when you go into descriptions your language isn't too very flowery which to me makes it all the more interesting. I love quotes & all the ones you have used are beautiful & well fitting & most of the times keeping up with the theme of cooking/ baking/ confectionery, etc 

I am allEmbarrassedEmbarrassedEmbarrassed for those lines

Although you have said that Mrs. Das's shop is at Vashi in my mind's eye I pictured it somewhere in South Bombay & I imagined it like an Iranian coffeehouse! Day Dreaming  Quaint, always filled with the aromas of all the goodies they make there, enticing passers by's with the gorgeous smells coming out of themEmbarrassed By the end of chapter 1 I was quite curious to know what had made the girls leave their home & why could they never return. 

Iraniani coffee housesLOL we have Irani Cafes here in Hyderabad, which serve a very typical irani chai, creamy and sweet and which has a sort of cult following (I do not drink tea but I am told the irani chai is out of this world). And the biscuits / cookies are to die for, especially the Karachi Bakery ones. And yes, the smells are truly enticing.Smile

The Ragini here is a lot different from the one we have in the show, and I like her all the more for itEmbarrassed Dragon Daadi is same though, and a lot worse maybe, though at least she loves Swara equally...in her own way that is. The first meeting between SwaSan was all Embarrassed Embarrassed Embarrassed (yes I could make out it was Sanskaar. Who else but he could be so charming!Day Dreaming) I loved the exchange of notes between them. There is something very appealing about a man who can write so well, expressing a lot through the simplest of words. Not cheesy, not lewd, just the right words which express genuine liking but a the same time are respectful & decentEmbarrassed God! But where did such men go?! And yes, that use of a fountain pen...Embarrassed Only a girl who loves to read like the Swara here would understand why its so special. It just is! Lovely quote there btw about the fountain penEmbarrassed

Ragini - the serial one drove me nuts - especially when she seemed to change shades faster than a Libran changes her moods (trust me, I am one, so I know how quickly we can change our moods) - good to grey to black to brown to whitewashed whiteConfused. Daadi is the same - draconian and yes she loves both equally or not. Sanskaar and his charm - quite difficult to disguise that irresistible charm of his. I do agree that there is something very appealing about a man who can write well and is able to express himself in simple words and short sentences and they certainly are a rare minority in the real world. And as you rightly said, Swara with her love for reading would understand why using a fountain pen is still special.

I am so happy that after Swara accepted his friendship it was she who took the initiative to go to his table to sit with him & get to know him better. Men who are 100% sure about themselves are ofc nice, who doesn't like the self assured men, but even the most assured of men being a little unsure about what to speak around that one special girl...that is cuteEmbarrassed IMO it also says a lot about the girl. The man would think before speaking because she isn't the sort who would be impressed by "hey sweetie or hey baby"LOL She will make him work...HARD!

Self assured men being sure of themselves as far as they are concerned have an allure, but when they are hesitant about that one girl, it sends a strong signal that they care too much to be casual and take the girl for granted. It is nice, is it not, that despite their confidence, they are diffident around that one girl for they do not want to make any mistakes? After all the girl is indeed very very special. But then the special girl also has to show some interest, how long can the confident yet diffident man go ahead alone, so Swara had to take a step too.  A hot cup shared, tales exchanged and there you have it, their ended up writing their own love story.


I liked Swara's BG story. So she was first impressed by Anjan Gupta then?LOL Why settle for second best then girl! DaadiAngry God knows what could have happened had she not turned upOuch Anyways, I always knew in my heart of hearts that yes, this callous guy will eventually turn out to be Lucky ROFL That role in every SwaSan story is reserved for Laksh Durgaprasad Maheshwari ROFL Though I must say one thing, I do understand what he must have felt too. At such a young age, it can be a tad bit overwhelming for a guy to take over the responsibility of a girl & a home. Some men cannot even do that at 50 Ermm So Laksh does have the excuse of age. He started off on a path & just couldn't turn back. Ofc he could have done the decent thing, gone to the station & told her a clear NO I am not coming with you! But then it is so much easy to just shirk responsibility. 

Swara and Anjan Gupta - she was impressed more by the music, she never even had a good glimpse of him, which is why she never felt Sanskaar was familiar. @bold above, the question is a good one - anything but what actually happened, though this question will be raised in the future chapters too. 
And Lakshya, sad but true - there is no way it could be anyone else in a SwaSan story.Wink 
Lakshya admits as much that he is not prepared, he is surprised that Swara is sure of him when he himself is not sure of anything. But then, he did lack the courage to tell her that he was not into the whole marriage thing and adopted an ostrich approach. And Karma bites him in the butt.

Correlating Swara with Kintsugi was a mind blowing touchClap I just cannot explain why...but even as a reader I could feel how special Swara was to Sanskaar to be using such a comparison, so I can well imagine what Swara must have feltEmbarrassed

To tell the truth, I had always been in love with that word and the underlying philosophy - so when Swara kept saying she was too broken to be beautiful, it some seemed fitting that she be made to understand that she could be beautiful because she was broken rather than convince her that she was not. It worked, did it not, after all which girl could resist such a comparison, that we are broken is true but being beautiful in spite of our cracks - a love that makes us realise this must indeed be very special.

Ragini is such a well etched character hereClap So she ran away with Swara because she too wanted to be free. Such an honest girlClap I totally get where she is coming from. Daadi does love her grand - daughters but her love is the sort that stifles, not the sort that allows them to grow into their ownOuch So yeah I can understand why she felt betrayed that Swara would leave her alone with Daadi & Ma Baba. You cannot control that first reaction which you feel when you hear or experience such a thing. That first instant reaction is the most human part of all of us not guided by the rational mind but just something that is feltOuch And now I am so proud of her for rejecting Laksh. Though I do feel a little bit sorry for Laksh I think from Ragini's POV she is 100% right in rejecting him. One question: Ragini was determined to never marry a Marwadi. She knows Laksh is a Marwadi since his name is Laksh Maheshwari...so IDK has she finally got over her caste bias or is it something else? Did Laksh maybe lie to her about his name & then when she did get to know he was a Marwadi it was too late since she was already in love?Confused 

Ragini - I have always been fascinated by the potential the character had (till the serial gave her a chameleon like ability to change from good, to bad, to evil, to victim and back to goodOuch). A normal girl with normal emotions, and who did love her sister. 

So even though she does love Lakshya, she cannot but hold him responsible for everything that happened to them and to the pain her sister went through. And now, Lakshya has to convince Ragini more that anyone else if he wants to succeed this time round.

Ragini not wanting to marry a marwardi - her decision was a little silly, based on two men -(though for her that was the entire population she knewLOL and so her sample was 100% of the population), she almost fell for Lakshya at first sight - or rather the first time they spoke so by the time she learnt of his name she had already fallen for him. And by then she had grown to adore Sanskaar, who is yet another Marwardi, so she was already letting go of her anti marwardi prejudices.Smile 


Mrs Das is yet another compelling character.  I loved the lady & had tears in my eyes when we got to her back storyCry 

Though really how stupid are SwaRagini to actually go to a completely new city with a perfect stranger. That part is a horror to even read  because that is exactly how many girls land up at the wrong placeDead Dead Dead Surely someone was watching over them that Mrs. Das was a decent woman! I shudder to think of the alternativeDead 

That is true - it was stupid of them to go with her, and Ragini acknowledges as much when she confesses to Lakshya that their guardian angels must have been extra vigilant that night. In the end, it did work out well, Mrs Das got a chance to make peace with herself, a chance to bond with girls who became her surrogate granddaughters. 

And while I am all for 'family se kuch nahi chupana chahiye" but I did not understand why Sanskaar needed to tell AP about Laksh & his history with Swara. Sometimes it is better to let the past rest. Since Sanskaar did not know that the Gadodia's thought their girls were dead I think that was a little unnecessary for him to do. Sanskaar could have just talked about Swara being the girl he met in Mumbai & whom he wants to marry (WHY WOULD YOU LEAVE OUT SUCH AN IMPORTANT DETAIL YOU MORON! MEN!!!Angry) I fear in the next chapter that mad cap Daadi is going to insist Laksh marry Swara since it is because of him that all this has happenedDead Can we not have that pleaseDead Or maybe Swara can just refuse point blank to have anything to do with LakshEvil Smile samaaj & daadi be damnedSleepy

Sanskaar telling about Lakshya was his way of telling his family that one of them has made a grave error (more on the lines of a minor crime) and some amends would need to be made. He being cautious, wanted to tell about himself and Swara a little later. (he was under the impression that discretion was the better part of valourWink). Unfortunately, Lakshya believes in acting in the heat of the moment so he confessed that he loves Ragini and wants to marry her. LOL
Daadi could be a shrew but she is not going to do that - Neither Lakshya nor Swara are interested, and neither Sanskaar nor Ragini would agree to it. And Dragon Das is there too, do not worry, nothing of that sort is going to happen, not in my story - I promised there would be no major twists or angst.

I loved how immediately after the Laksh fiasco we got such a cute SwaSan momentEmbarrassed Sanskaar doesn't leave her alone, she doesn't drive him away wanting to be alone. They want to be together at that timeEmbarrassed and not just together together LOL 

As I said above, no twists in my story - after the Lakshya fiasco that is the exact time they need each other so they better be together togetherWink - no unnecessary drama and MU - they know they love each other, they know that they had some one else in their past whom they thought they loved and are now sure they do not - so why should they be alone now- they belong to each other, she in his arms, he holding her and that is how they should be.Smile

Btw that conversation just before RagLak came in was all ROFL

That was good, right? Am I being vain if I give myself a couple of self pats (especially when Sanskaar says he could prove Swara wrong on so many levelsBig smile

For some reason throughout this SS I kept hearing "kuch toh hua hai, kuch ho gaya hai" in my mindLOL 
love that songSmile

Lastly kudos to you for writing RagLak in such a manner that the reader doesnt dismiss them with a WackoErmm You have made them both very human! Some really good writing thereClap so good that you can in fact rename your SS as SwaSan/ RagLak SSWinkLOL

SwaSan / RagLak SS - sounds good. RagLak -  that was my attempt to see if SwaSan could emerge as the golden couple without having RagLak as a cardboard coupleWink - they do, right?


P.S.: 

1) When I read that Ragini's bf was a reader...especially the sort who reads in book stores, loses track of his surroundings while reading, has his nose in the book always...that was one time I was confused about if it is going to be Laksh or not. I just do not imagine Laksh that way ROFL In my mind Laksh will always be the one with a chain round his neck, a stud in his ear sporting cheap sunglasses & watches ROFL Sab show ki kripa haiLOL


@bold above - quite true, it is indeed difficult to imagine him otherwiseLOLLOL

2) How often do you update?Embarrassed Once a week?Embarrassed And how many more chapters left?Embarrassed

I usually update once a week to once in 10 days (if office is hectic then it is 10 days). Not many, a couple more - we are nearing the endSmile

3) Light reading is good but it can be made better when you mix in trivia. I loved reading about all the references to poems, food, sugar glass, Kintsugi. It just proves that you are not only a good writer but an avid reader too. Only then can you be so knowledgeable about so many diverse thingsClap The amount of effort & research you have put into such a simple story is worthy of an applauseClap

And this is why I write - apart from the basic fact that I seemed to have been bitten by a bug for writing and that it is great to write about a couple I love and adore, the main reason is the knowing that there are readers out there who read and write such lovely comments. EmbarrassedEmbarrassedEmbarrassedComments that make me happy and humbled at the same time.

As I mentioned a couple of times to others, these comments are treasured and adored, I spend hours reading them, convincing myself that my stories must be okay if they elicit such wonderful comments and which is also why I take so long to revert. BlushingBlushingBlushingBlushing




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