Hello Stuti di! As I promised I am here with my comment. But read it at your own risk!! Kono guarantee dite parbo naa, tomar ghum peye jete pare π₯±, So shabdhan!! ππ
This story has come a long way.. certainly, it will travel longer still... So what I do is that a brief description of the journey of three main axes of the story... the grieving couple, the conspiracy and the authoress!!
The Grieving Couple
A lot of pain, love and affection... and you have imaged these two lovable soul mates. In sorrow and joy, all pains and turmoil, they sail along together. Sometimes the tide of Time pulls them apart. Sometimes, it's the same tide that unites them.
It was a tugging description that you have etched with your words. You do maintain your usual flair but this genre, brings out a slightly different you... and not a single description sounded unnatural, not an emotion out of place. The feeling of guilt and regret sweeping over these star crossed lovers, theses series of events, that leads them to the conclusion that, come what may, they are meant to be together as a soul are very well presented.
Jodha appears emotionally more strengthened at times, where Jalal breaks to pieces... is it just to convey that when one falls the other becomes the pillar of strength?
All in all, their emotions, blaming and grievances, and above all, the way they find strength in each other's company to fight this helplessness, was all so realistic. Take a bow!!
The Conspiracy
Ok, this part was too good I think... and your portrayal of realistic fervour is at its level best.
Take a bow, again!!
It isn't just the ruthless faces that you have etched, with ruthless sincerity, but the entire plot and ploy, the tactics, the messages, code language , the Amir Khasrau decoding method... By George!! Do I see that as another Lashy di in the making or what?π
Seriously, Stuti di, you've taken me by complete surprise with this hunar of yours. Kudos ππ
Trust me your version of Mahachuchak, Mali, Faisal Beg and the master player of all... Fakhr-un-nissa, were much more convincing than the screeching banshee and hairless Harry of Ekta!! Why even Jallu and Birbal were Chanakya reincarnated at your hands! π
You have all the calibre to become a diplomat, ditch, Computer science π. It's very difficult to come up with something like this and still sound convincing... but kiss to combat to tears to blood bath, you're comfortable with anything and everything . Wowπ
The Authoress!
Ab inki kya kehna!!
Whatever she writes, our Shinning_Stuti never fails to shine.
As I went through the chapters, a novice writer, who's unsure of the reader's reactions, gradually transformed into a sharp, and strong author, who can grip her readers with the story and yet is brazen enough to continue as she plans.
Why are you so hard working, dear? Same dialogues in a double version π. Anyways, thanks for the English version though, amar Hindi tomar thekeo beshi sanghatik kina πππ.
All that said, and all hence done, I hope you bear with this piece of write up. I suppose I have covered all the points...
Update soon.. eagerly waiting π³ and thanks for the patience you have with me π
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