Akdha ss: It started with a friend request (closed) - Page 5

Posted: 8 years ago
Great Start! I like Jodha's carefree attitude 😛 and oooh Jalal's introduction through Flirting!!😉
I wonder what caused Jodha to accuse Jalal???
Update soon!!
Edited by RitikaGarg8 - 8 years ago
Posted: 8 years ago
Nice chapter continue soon pm me thanks for pm
Posted: 8 years ago
different concept... nice start... continue soon nd do pm 
Posted: 8 years ago
Originally posted by nhbr



He is the actor Suriya😃
thanks for telling
Posted: 8 years ago
Chapter 2
Jalal
Now that's what's called a perfect strike!'  jalal exclaimed jumping in the air as he took the lead in the game.
He needed to strike one more pin to win.  Jalal was a bowling expert in nine-pins. He had won many times before this and was con- fident that it would be no different that day.
 Jalal approached the lane taking a 15-pound bowling ball in his right hand. Focussed entirely at the pins in front of him, he released the ball carefully. As the ball touched the pins, he held his breath.
*Bang* All nine pins went down in one go!
He had won the game, which meant he had won two entry passes to a disc, and that too on a Saturday night.
It's time to check out some hot girls tonight at the disc. It's going to be one happening night, Aditya. Woohoo!'  Jalal's excitement was at its peak.
I was equally pepped up and pounced on him in excitement.
 Jalal was a Mumbaikar who lived for and with his family. He was working with the RS group, a company located near Oshiwara in Jogeshwari. He had a charming personality and his dimples would make the girls go crazy. His good sense of humour and style always made him a favourite among his friends. Girls especially liked him for he was a very good cook. He was very caring and possessive about his closed ones and extremely polite in nature. Everyone wondered how a guy like him was single. However, the truth was that after his break up six years ago, he had simply decided to concentrate on his career. I was probably his only best friend and he shared everything with me, including the girls whom he fantasized.  Jalal was a party freak and was all geared up for that night after winning passes to Thrive.
Aditya, let's go for a movie. We can go to the disc after 11 pm,'  Jalal suggested and I agreed. I got into the driving seat of my car and headed towards Infinity Mall.
We were going to catch the 7.30 pm show of the movie Pyaar Ka Punchnaama.
 Jalal took the last row tickets and I followed him inside the theatre. The hall had many vacant seats.  Jalal eyed the couple sitting in the corner row. The movie began and the opening scene itself was so funny that we were rolling in our seats with laughter.
Jalal, this guy Liquid is so much like you. The way he is cursing his manager is just how you do it,' I  teased and laughed loudly.
f**k you, asshole. I don't curse so much. That too right after drinking tea,' said  Jalal trying to defend himself.
As soon as we settled down in our seats,  Jalal noticed a young girl sitting cross-legged in the front row. He said, I wish I get a girl like her in real life. She is so hot.'
I punched him hard on his shoulders and said, Shut up, you asshole.'
I was kidding yaar. Chuck it. Look at that couple in the corner there. It's hardly been twenty minutes since the movie started and they can't get their hands off each other,'  Jalal said laughing.
Lagta hai poora paisa wasool karenge,' we screamed which made the couple more conscious. Realizing they were being watched, they broke their intimate stance and adjusted their clothes.
Everyone started making ooh' and aah' sounds. Poor couple! It looked like they had had enough of their Pyaar ka Punchnaama. After the movie ended, we decided to eat maska bhurji paav at Khurshid, a famous eatery in Vile Parle. We were regulars at that place during weekends. It was not exactly a restaurant, but more like a roadside stall which was open from late nights until early morning. We reached the place and as expected, it was buzzing with activity. The tables were set out in the open and there was a sizeable crowd in line to place an order. We decided to eat sitting on the bonnet of the car itself.
Salim bhai, do bhurji paav,' ordered  Jalal nd rested himself on the bonnet of the car.
It was then that I saw a girl with very loud make-up standing at some distance away from the road. Look at her. These call girls spoil this place...' I said.

Exactly. And don't call her a call girl. The high society call girls don't like to be called call girls'. They are Escorts.'  Jalal was completely against the concept of trading your body for money, though he knew very well that most call girls had a sad story that pushed them into the flesh trade.
Within a flash, a Mercedes C-class halted in front of her. The man in the back seat rolled down the window. After a little chat, she sat in the car and left. Eventually, I had to suffer and listen to  Jalal 's long speech on ethics, decency, and morality.
I agree that all item girls in Bollywood are responsible for girls being treated as sex objects, but aren't these escorts equally respons- ible for it too? They portray themselves as a sex symbol or a sex toy. You can pay and play with them. And they can roam freely on the roads trying to catch your attention. Because of this, even a well-educated girl, when roaming in shorts or skirts, is looked upon with scorn by our society. But girls need to draw a line somewhere and can't be so irresponsible. With freedom comes responsibility. Why is gold kept in lockers? Why do we have wrappers on candies? That's because every precious thing should be treasured. But why should I waste my time talking about this? As if things will change anytime soon. Forget it!'
Finally, we headed to Thrive, Colaba. It was a typical Thrive weekend night. Since  Jalal had won free passes, we didn't have to pay a single penny. The cover charges were covered in the pass.
One flame shot please,' he ordered at the bar counter. The bartender served it with his usual smile. I told the waiter to get me the same drink as  Jalal.
He lit a cigarette and started tapping his feet to the music. The crowd was going crazy dancing to the rock music being played by the DJ.  Jalal was losing control of himself due to the effect of alcohol. But he still ordered a pint of beer. Drink it on the rocks. Finish it in a go,' I teased  Jalal.
 Jalal took this challenge seriously and finished the entire pint in hardly a minute. He somehow tried to balance himself by holding on to my hands.
Don't challenge me. I can complete any task.'  Jalal gave a wicked smile.
As if you are a Roadie. If so, do you see that girl in the little black dress? I suppose she is alone and drunk too. Go ask her name and talk to her for five minutes,' I again challenged  Jalal. This time, it was serious.
 Jalal couldn't see her clearly due to the vast distance between them but he could tell she was extremely beautiful and capable of hitting him hard if he misbehaved with her.
Are you crazy? Just look at her. She is one of the prettiest girls I have ever laid eyes on and am sure everyone in this disc is also checking her out. Man! Just look at her. Isn't she perfect? I can't do this. I can't go up to her and talk. I want my body in one piece when I leave this place. If something happens, neither you nor she will save me. Moreover, I don't have any more paid holidays left,'   Jalal went on and on until I interrupted him.
Loser!' I said trying to end the long conversation in just one word.
 Jalal couldn't take it sitting down now. He took the challenge seriously and started walking towards the girl.
Though his nervousness escalated with each passing second, he approached her nevertheless. She was looking even more sexy up- close. He started dancing beside her. She was too busy dancing to bother about his close proximity to her. Looking at it as the right opportunity, he tried to break the ice. He was now grooving along with her. She didn't oppose, maybe because she was just as drunk as him.
Hi. My name is Jalal,' he said in a low tone. She missed hearing it due to the loud music being played. He started flirting with her by asking her for a drink.
For a moment, they both stared each other and didn't speak a word. He kept thinking what the girl would say. He didn't want to miss a chance to introduce himself to the most gorgeous girl in the disc. Her black dress was shining in the dim disco lights and her skin was glowing.
Only if you pay for my drink...which means I get to save on my pocket money. But don't try it on me, mister,' she said and they both started laughing.
I'm  Jalal' he said bringing his hand forward for a formal introduction. Jodha Thakur.'
 Jalal was mesmerized by her voice and the way she talked. He was lost in her eyes, which seduced him to an extent that if he had been one more pint down, he would have kissed her right there. Somehow, he controlled himself. Her touch was enough to floor him. I was watching the entire act from a corner, which by now had transformed from an act into an attempt to know her better.
You don't seem to be a Mumbaikar. Where are you from?'  Jalal enquired.




(Here sometimes jalal's friend aditiya tells the story as it is past)
Edited by paridhiloveu - 8 years ago
Posted: 8 years ago
Awesome chappy dear
do continue soon
thnks 4 the pm ðŸ˜›
Posted: 8 years ago
Nice update
Jalal is different in ur story..like it
Thnx for d pm.
Posted: 8 years ago
Nice chapter continue soon pm me thanks for pm
Posted: 8 years ago
wow first meet of jj... nice its past... interesting continue soon nd do pm

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