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Posted: 14 May 2015 at 12:35pm | IP Logged
Hi friends
My first OS on Kabir Criticism is welcome kyuki I am not a gud writer isse pehle sirf ek hi os likha hai. Do comment.
KN House 
Kabir's Diary
Aaj Nisha hospital se ghar vaapis aa rahi hai but main usse nahi mil paunga. Ek baar bhi use dekh nahi paunga. Shayad main yeh saza deserve karta hun Nisha ke sath jo bhi hua woh meri vajah se hua agar main waqt par uska haath pakad leta toh use itni takleef na uthani padti. Par main khush hun ki aaj woh bilkul thik hoke gangwal house vaapis ja rahi hai apne ghar woh ghar jo woh deserve karti hai. I am sorry Nisha main jaanta hun tu shayad mujhe dhundhne ki koshish karegi ghar vaapis aane ke baad but main tujhe nahi milunga kyuki mujhe Dadaji ki di hui saza ko toh pura karna hi hoga. Unhone mujhe contract marriage karne ki saza di hai. Dadaji ne kaha agar main tujhe hamesha ke liye chodkar nahi gaya toh woh hum dono ko apne ghar se bedakhal kar denge. Main jaanta hun Nisha tu apni family ke bina nai reh sakti isliye maine socha ki teen mahine baad bhi toh humein alag hona hi tha toh aaj kyu nai. I hope Nisha tu mujhe maaf kar sake aise beech raaste mein chhodke jane ke liye mujhse nafrat mat karna.Nishu tu samjh jana ki main tujhe teri bhalai ke liye hi chod kar ja raha hun. Main Bhagwaan se humesha prathna karunga ki tujhe aur teri family khush rakhe. Teri vajah se mujhe itni pyari family mili ab main inka dil aur nahi dukha sakta yahan rehkar. Nisha I know tujhe shayad zyada meri yaad na aaye kyuki yahan tere sare cousins hai jo tujhse pyaar karte hai. tere liye kuch bhi kar sakte hai Dolly ne toh apni married life ki parvah na karte huye tujhe hospital mein apne jaan ke liye ladta dekh itni himmat karke sach bataya aur tere baki cousine ne ro ro kar itna bura haal kar diya tha. Pata nahi kyu aaj tujhe chhodkar jate huye mujhe itni takleef ho rai hai main kuch samjh nai pa raha. I wish main tujhe yeh sab samjha pata.  I am sorry Nisha.

Hospital
Nisha's Diary
Kabir aaj hum jeet gaye. Dolly Di ki vajah se unhone mere liye humare liye sabko us sumit ki sachai bata di. Par tum yaha kyu nai ho mere sath? Jwala ne mujhe kaha ki tum ghar par ho. I know tum ghar par mera intezaar kar rahe ho. Main toh khud ko rok bhi nahi pa rahi. Maine apna vaada pura jo karna hai ki jab tum vaapis aaoge tab tumhein bata dungi ki main tumse kitna pyaar karti hun. Ab toh is hospital mein ek ek pal bitana itna mushkil ho raha hai. I hope main jaldi se tumhar baahon mein hun aur tumhein apne dil ki baat keh dun.
Ramesh: Nishu kaun se khyalon mein khoyi hun chalo ghar chalein dr ne tumhein discharge kar diya hai.
Nisha: Ji Papa

Outside Gangwal House
Nisha: Papa hum yahan kyu aaye hai mere ghar kyu nahi gaye?? Kabir kahan hai yahan hai ya humare ghar?
Silence
Nisha: Koi kuch bol kyu nahi raha? Jwala tu bol na tune kaha tha ki Kabir ghar pe mera intezaar kar raha hai.
Lakshmi: Nishu tu chal apne kamre mein jaake aaraam kar le. Dr ne tujhe stress lene se mana kiya hai.
Nisha: Par maa
Lakshmi: Nishu kabhi toh meri baat mana kar tujhe meri kasam chup chap jake rest kar.

Nisha's Room
Itni der ho gayi abhi tak na toh Kabir aaya na hi mera phn utha raha hai woh aur koi mujhe kuch bata bhi nahi raha. Pata nahi mujhe ajeeb si ghabrahat ho rahi hai.
Saurav: Nisha mujhe tujhse ek bahut zaruri baat kehni hai. I know dr ne tujhe stress dene ke liye mana kiya hai par tera sach janana bahut zaruri hai. Kabir chala gaya Nisha. Dadaji ne use tujhse dur chale jane ki saza de di.
Nisha: What Saurav yeh tu kya keh raha hai. Mujhe Kabir ko yeh Kehna tha how much I love him. Main Kabir ke bina kaise jiyungi Saurav. Main jaanti hun woh teen mahine baad toh chala jata par kam se kam yeh teen mahine toh uski yaadein banke humesha mere sath rehte puri umar ke liye yeh kafi hote. 
Saurav: Nisha abhi bhi der nai hui hai tu usey shayad rok sakti hai woh 2 hrs pehle hi yaha se gaya hai. Maine pata kiya hai ki London ki flight 20 mint baad hai. Utni der mein hum airport pahunch sakte hai.
Nisha: Main airport par jakar use rokungi.
Saurav: Nisha main bhi tere sath chalta hu
Lakshmi enters: Nisha tu kaha ja rai hai apni haalat toh dekh.
Nisha: Maa plz aap mujhe mat rokiye mujhe jane dijiye main Kabir ko batana chahti hun ki I love him. Taki puri life mujhe guilt mein na rehna pade phir rukna ya na rukna Kabir ka faisala hoga.

At Airport
Announcement: Jaipur to London flight took off from the airport as per schedule.
Nisha: Kabir main tumhe rok nahi payi tum chale gaye. Aaj se kuch time pehle main tumhe jaanti tak nahi thi aur aaj main apni life tumhare bina imagine bhi nahi kar sakti. Main humesha Bhagwaan se pray karungi ki tumhare sare sapne sach ho. Aur tumhein life ki sari khushiyaan mile.
Saurav: Chal Nishu ghar chalein.
Nisha: Tu ja mujhe apne ghar jana hai apne aur Kabir ke ghar us ghar ko dekhna chahti hun aur un yaadon mein jeena chahti hun. Ja Saurav plz.

At KN House
Nisha: Yeh itni sari candles kyu jal rahi hai yaha aur yeh sab flowers decoration.
Someone covers Nisha's eyes from behind.
Nisha: Kabir. (shocked)
Kabir: Nisha tune mujhe pehchaan liya itni jaldi.
Nisha: Ofcourse main tujhe kahi bhi pehchaan sakti hun. Par teri flight toh take off ho gai thi phir tu gaya kyu nahi?
Kabir: Nishu main airport tak gaya toh tha par main flight mein chad nahi paya. Main tujhe akela chodke jate huye apne aap ko dekh hi nahi paya. I don't know main kuch samjh nahi pa raha tha ki yeh kya ho raha hai main apne dream sirf kuch hi hours ki duri par tha par phir bhi mujhe koi khushi nahi thi balki dukh tha tujhse dur jane ka dukh tha. Phir maine aankhein band karke apne dil ki awaaz suni Aur jaanti ho mere dil ne kya kaha usne bas tumhara hi naam liya Nisha bas tumhara. And then everything just fell into place. Tumhari humesha fikar karna, Viraj ke ghar mein tumhari photo dekhkar gussa aana aur tumhein danger mein dekhkar apni life ko bhi tumhari life ke aage worthless samjhna. Pata hai jab maine tumhein us building se neeche girte dekha toh yehi socha ki kash main tumhari jagah pe hota kash mujhe yeh saza mili hoti. Yeh koi mamooli dosti nahi Nisha Yeh pyaar hai. Tumse hi mera din hai Nisha Tumse hi meri saasein tumse hi mere jeene ka maksad. Yes Miss Nisha Gangwal I love You. I love you so much.
Nisha: Kabir I love you too. Par Kabir tumhare dreams?
Kabir: Jab tum sath ho toh I know ki hum milke apne har sapne pure kar lenge. Tumse hi toh mera har sapna hai. Kabir (on his knees): So Miss Nisha Gangwal mujhse teesri baar shadi karogi but is baar humesha ke liye Mrs. Nisha Kabir Kumar banne ke liye?
Nisha: Ofcourse Mr. Kabir Kumar.


This is it. I hope zyada boring na hua ho.


Edited by -Abhiya- - 14 May 2015 at 12:35pm

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Posted: 14 May 2015 at 1:15pm | IP Logged
Cute and romantic story Embarrassed
You were able to pen down Nisha and Kabir's thoughts so well Clap Clap
Loved the last dialogue of Kabir LOL
Also loved the fact that Saurav played cupid

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Posted: 14 May 2015 at 2:25pm | IP Logged
Loved Nibir's thoughts in the diary..!!!
Do write more. Tongue

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Posted: 14 May 2015 at 3:21pm | IP Logged
Cute os yarThumbs Up keep writting more like this..

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Posted: 14 May 2015 at 4:43pm | IP Logged
they got married twice already? very interesting, nice os!

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Posted: 14 May 2015 at 8:40pm | IP Logged
such a cute os... keep writing

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Posted: 14 May 2015 at 10:55pm | IP Logged
nice... loved it... keep writing...
last line was... 3rd time marriage.. wa wa.. I think we will see that in show as well... Party

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Posted: 15 May 2015 at 5:28am | IP Logged
AmazingThumbs Up... NiBir ki teesri shaadiBig smile... do write more on NiBirSmile 

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