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Akya FF ~Chupke se sun iss pal ki dhoon~ Last chapter page 22

Anzum505 Goldie
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Posted: 07 May 2015 at 2:12pm | IP Logged
>Hiii Friends... This is my first ever FF..

I don't how will I continue it.. u guys will like it or not... Plz let
me know... I've no experience or writing FF so let me know if u guys are
bored... Nd give ur suggesting to improve it... Specially Paulomi di... I need
ur suggestion the most...Smile



Chupke se Sun iss pal ki dhoon...


In this story akya
will be pilots... But there story will be different from the show... First some
chapters will be on present time.. later on we'll go to past... 


Index::

Chapter 1(present) : Page 1

Chapter 2(present) : Page 3

Chapter 3(Present & past) : Page 5

Chapter 4(Past): Page 8

Chapter 5 (Past) : page 12

Chapter 6(Past) : Page 12

Chapter 7(Past): Page 14

Chapter 8(Past): Page 15

Chapter 9 (Present): page 16

Chapter 10(Present): page 17

Chapter 11 : page 20





Chapter 1:


Ananya was standing near her window.. lost in her thought..
Remembering all happy and sad moment spent with him.. A drop of tears fall from
her eyes.. She wished life wouldn't be like this.. She wished if he was here..
But she knows very well that it's his duty.. Duty towards country.. Duty
towards thousands of people.. She knows very well that she has to be strong...
For him.. For their Family... But it has long time.. A very long time... It has
been 5 yrs Aakash is away from her.. She
doesn't even know where he is.. But yess she knows that he is alive.. He will
be back.. But when she doesn't know... She sighed... Sigh of pain... "Please come back
Aakash" she said looking towards the sky... Suddenly a voice interrupt her
thought...


Ananya wiped her tears and turned towards the voice...</font>


A cute little girl was standing holding a doll.. She is
Avni..Aakash Ananya's 5yrs old
daughter...


Ananya: Avni.. Aap abhi tak soyi nehi beta??</font>


Avni: Aap bhi to jag rehi ho..</font>


<font size="2">Ananya: (Came to her.. Sit on the bed and took her into her
lap) Haan.. Kiu ki mamma bari hai na.. To mamma ke raat jagne se kuch nehi
hoga.. par ki tabiyat kharab ho jayegi...</font>


<font size="2">Avni got up from ananya's lap.. She kept both of her hands
on her waist and made a angry face to Ananya..</font>


<font size="2">Avni: Mai bilkul bhi choti nehi hoon.. Mai bht baari ho gayi
hoon.. (Saying this she got up on the bed).. See... Mai aap se bhi baari hoon..
</font>


<font size="2">Ananya giggled and brought her back into her lap.. </font>


<font size="2">Ananya: Haan meri maa.. Tu mujhse bhi baari ho gayi hai...</font>


<font size="2">Avni: To bolo.. mai raat ko jag sakti hoon na??</font>


<font size="2">Ananya: mmm... Raat ko to ap jag sakti ho.. par kya hai
na... Agar ap raat ko jaage to mamma jab subhe flight pe jayengi to ap mamma
ko bye bolne ke liye nehi uth paogi aur school bhi miss ho jayega aap ka...
phir pur din ap bore hone wali ho... </font>


<font size="2">Avni: Nehi nehi... Mujhe aap ko bye bhi bolna hai aur school
bhi jana hai... </font>


<font size="2">Ananya: To chalo abhi aap so jao..</font>


<font size="2">Avni: Mamma mai aj ap ke paas so jau??</font>


<font size="2">Ananya: (Cupped her face, gave a kiss on her cheek ) Thik
hai.. Aaj mamma aur avni sath soyenge.. </font>


<font size="2">Ananya made her lay down on the bed and patted her...</font>


<font size="2">Avni: Mamma Lori sunao na..</font>


<font size="2">Ananya: Avnii... Kitni raat ho gayi hai.. so jao na baccha..</font>


<font size="2">Avni: No.. Jab tak aap lori nehi sunaogi mai nehi soungi...</font>


<font size="2">Ananya: Kitnni jiddi hai tu... Accha thik hai...</font>


<font size="2"></font>


<font size="2">"Aaja neendiya raani aaja dur sitaro se..</font>


<font size="2">Aaja neendiyan raani aaja dur sitaro se</font>


<font size="2">Nanhe nanhe sapne le aa dur nazaro se</font>


<font size="2">Aaa Bass ja meri gudiya ke nanhi si akhon mein...</font>


<font size="2">Aaja neendiyan raani aaj dur sitaro se..</font>


<font size="2">Pario ke duniya se aane wale who sapne Sulane liye..</font>


<font size="2">Nanhi si akhon mein chup jayenge wo to dhero khilone liye..</font>


<font size="2">Hotho ki yaadein mein wo gungunayegi..</font>


<font size="2">So ja.. So ja.. So jaa...</font>


<font size="2">Aaa Bass ja meri gudiya ke nanhi si akhon mein...</font>


<font size="2">Aaja neendiyan raani aaj dur sitaro se.." </font>


<font size="2"></font>


<font size="2"></font>


<font size="2">Finally Avni fall asleep... Ananya kissed on her forhead and
smile looking at her sleeping princess..
She is

Ananya's strength.. the most special gift from Aakash, the symbol of their love..
Ananya covered her with blanket, switch of the light and went out to have
water...</font>


<font size="2"></font>


<font size="2">When Ananya came out from her room she noticed that the
light of another room is still on.. She thought to her self.. "Abhi tak jag
rehi hai... Pata nehi kya karu mai iss ladki ka..!!" She went towards that room, opened the
door... "Tub hi itni raat ko jag rehi hai???!!"
Ananya was standing facing the back side of that girl... She noticed
that the girl wiped her tears and look towards Ananya... </font>


<font size="2">"Kreetika... Kya hua?? Ro kiu rehi hai??" Ananya came to
her and hold her shoulder with both of her hands...</font>


<font size="2">"K..Kuch nehi bhabi... Mai bass sone hi ja rehi thi...
Ap soye nehi abhi tak?? Subhe flight hai na??"(She went towards bed and started
to fix up pillows)</font>


<font size="2">She is Kreetika, Aakash's one and only little sister...</font>


<font size="2">Ananya: Tu mujh se jhut kab se bolne lagi?? Bol kya baat
hai??</font>


<font size="2">Kreetika: Kuch nehi bhabi... bass aise hii...</font>


<font size="2">Ananya: (sighed) Janti hoon mai... Aakash ki yaad aa rehi
hai na??</font>


<font size="2">Kreetika stopped what she was doing and sat on the bed...
Tears were about to fall...</font>


<font size="2">Ananya came to her and sat beside her...</font>


<font size="2">Ananya: Mai janti hoon kreeti.. tujhe Aakash ki bht yaad
aati hai.. But u have to be strong.. Humare paas aur koi rasta bhi to nehi
hai.. intezer ke siwa... Mujhe dekh... Mai thik hoon... </font>


<font size="2">Kreetika interrupt.. </font>


<font size="2">"Aap sach mein thik ho bhabi?? "</font>


<font size="2">Ananya looked at her with pain in her eyes..</font>


<font size="2">Kreetika: Abhi aap jhut mat bolo... Mai janti hoon kitni
takliv hoti hai aap ko... Roz raat ko
kaise roti ho aap.. taki hum thik rahe.. ap humesha apni dukh chupa ke rakhti
ho... par aur kitna bhabi?? Aur kitne din?? 5yrs ho chuke hai... Bhaiya ke koi
khabar nehi.. DIB wale hume kuch batate bhi nehi hai!!! </font>


<font size="2">Ananya: Kreeti.. Mai nehi janti ke yeh intezer kab khatam
hoga.. bass mujhe itna pata hai ke Aakash wapas ayenge... Tere liye, Dadi ke
liye, meri liye aur apni beti ke liye... usey aana parega.. Ab chahe kitni bhi
deir kiu na ho...</font>


<font size="2">Kreetika: Itni strong kaise ho sakti ho aap bhabi??</font>


<font size="2">Ananya: Pata hai Aakash ne jane se pehle mujhse kaha tha ke who
ayenge.. kuch bhi ho jaye.. usne kaha tha tabtak tum sab ka khayal mujhe rakhna
hai.. Avni ka khayal rakhna hai.. Mai uski baato ko kaise taal sakti hoon?? (Had
tears).. Aur mai janti hoon.. mera Aakash apna promise kabhi nehi todega... </font>


<font size="2">Kreetika hugs Ananya.. And they both cried.. Cried their
heart out... </font>


<font size="2">Kreetika: Bhai zarur ayenge bhabi... Kisi aur ke liye na
sahi.. par aap ke liye... </font>


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<font size="4" color="#ff0000">TBC...</font>





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Edited by Anzum505 - 18 August 2015 at 12:59pm

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Posted: 07 May 2015 at 4:02pm | IP Logged
Wow
Awesome update
Love it
Cont soon
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Posted: 07 May 2015 at 11:09pm | IP Logged
First of all you should always take are of the title and it should be catchy enough to depict the whole plot of your story.

Second I hope it won't be like ANANYA'S DIARIES.

Abhi kuch zyada nehi bolungi pehle story progress hone do.
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Posted: 07 May 2015 at 11:28pm | IP Logged
hello apuni
firstly i wanna tell you that i am very happy that you have started to write your first ff. I am a very big fan of your writing and i am looking forward to read all your updates :) i can't tell you the happiness i felt when i saw the link of this ff in our group. After so long time, you are writing something and this is so heart warming. I know you are nervous coz its your best ff but i am sure that u will do pretty well and will write a beautiful story coz i have full trust on my apuni & her writings
So i wanna wish you all the best Smile may you shine bright my dear Smile

I like the concept a lot. Its quite promising. but its kind of repetitive. many friends have already written stories based of  similar storyline. now its upon you to make your story original & interesting which i am sure you will surely do. I would also suggest you that in future updates, do not keep writing about the pasts only. From time to time, do write about the present condition too. I am expecting a brilliant story from you coz i know how good writer you r. 

please dont mind i am telling dear but the title is very confusing. Its not easy to understand. I do not know about others but at least for me, its tough. Title should be more eye catching and simple to understand. i understand it means' listen quietly to the tune of this moment 'but it could have been something more expressive towards this storyline

all the best dear for the story. Update soon
Wil be waiting for updates from you
U r the best apuni 
I love the name avni for akya 's daughter..very cute name
i am happy that aakash has a very cute sis and her bonding is so good with Ananya
And i really appreciate that aakash & ananya r pilots. Smile i always adore those stories where the writer keeps akya as pilots coz for me, its the aviation industry itself who made this serial close to my heart
Anzum505 Goldie
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Posted: 07 May 2015 at 11:38pm | IP Logged
Originally posted by -Paulomi-

First of all you should always take are of the title and it should be catchy enough to depict the whole plot of your story.

Second I hope it won't be like ANANYA'S DIARIES.

Abhi kuch zyada nehi bolungi pehle story progress hone do.



I know di the title is not good but I can't change it.. there is a reason. .

nd dii it will be different from ananya's diary. . don't worry. . . I promise you that. .

nd I will my best to make the past time different from the show...
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Posted: 07 May 2015 at 11:45pm | IP Logged
Congratulations on your first ff dearHugSmile
I've always loved all your stories and was jumping when I saw the author's nameBig smile...
Interesting plot!
love it.. I'm sure it's gonna be something really great to read...
Bichare akyaCryCry...
Akash has a daughter...
And a sister as well...hmmm...
Wo bhi apne bhaiyya ko miss kar rahi hai..
Awww!!!Cry
Mujhse anu ki ye haalat bardasht nahi hoti...plz jaldi much karoCry
And if possible please pm meBig smile

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Posted: 07 May 2015 at 11:51pm | IP Logged
Originally posted by Anzum505

Originally posted by -Paulomi-

First of all you should always take are of the title and it should be catchy enough to depict the whole plot of your story.

Second I hope it won't be like ANANYA'S DIARIES.

Abhi kuch zyada nehi bolungi pehle story progress hone do.



I know di the title is not good but I can't change it.. there is a reason. .

nd dii it will be different from ananya's diary. . don't worry. . . I promise you that. .

nd I will my best to make the past time different from the show...

no maine ye nehi kaha hai ke title is not so good of course agar tune diya hai to kuch soch kar hi diya hoga maine ek general suggestion di hai
...FRF... Goldie
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Posted: 08 May 2015 at 12:07am | IP Logged
Wow, Anzum di, the starting is amazing...Big smileBig smile..It was beautiful...And do continue soon...zyaada wait maat karwana...LOLLOL...And thnx for the pm...

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