Reserved.
Nishi, this was yet another a brilliant piece of writeup. The way you kept the initial essence of this scene intact was beautiful.
Yes, while reading the oneshoot, i could clearly see images & motion in my head. Swayam in blue checkes shirt (not forgetting that scar on his cheebone) adoring sharon while she danced around in black, beautifully throughout the canteen. The hurt, the pain, the longing in his heart. "I love you so much that it hurts" Oh, Swayam. Sharon on the other hand, doing just similar thing for Swayam had swelled up all our hearts. They are beautiful :')
You wrote those emotions with such ease man! Depicting both of their POVs with such subtle use of words and emotions. This is phenomenal.
I have a complaint- after reading your works, I am always at loss of all damn words & adjectives. You deserve a hug for this oneshoot.
Keep writing.
-Ayushi
Edited by -.wanderlust.- - 8 years ago
