An update that starts with her savouring the word they' and ends with her tearing herself away from the they'. That feeling of bursting with happiness transmuted into painful reality in a poignantly written update. Your use of language and manner in which you've put forth the emotions of each one of your characters is superb. The subtle play of emotions, the delicate subtext in their actions very well portrayed.
The ambience you created for their conversation was superlative. Teetering at the edge, pulling back after the most tentative of attempts to jump. Choosing to follow the dream that has consumed him ever since he can remember. But won't success be hollow if he can't share it with her? A her, in whom a shadow of pain causes him to want to soothe it away instantly. Begs the question, can just love ever be enough?
And I'm calling you back right now to tell me what happens next!
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