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Posted: 24 January 2015 at 5:17am | IP Logged
90% of the OS is done. I assure you you'll roll on the floor after reading..

Ravi bhaiya, truly I felt for DS LOL . Brilliantly executed the plot.. FW writers must learn from you how to handle love tracks maturly..

BT, great going boss..


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Posted: 24 January 2015 at 6:12am | IP Logged
Here's the OS. Please review and throw tomatoes instead of bricks and eggs.


The qualis came to rest with a screetching sound of applying break and jerk, but he didn't get out of trance. He was busy staring outside the window atleast pretended to do so. The person on the driving seat softly called 'boss' .. Getting no reply from the other side he placed a hand on the former's shoulder and said a bit more loudly 'Abhijeet, ghar aa gaya hai tumhara'.

Atlast he turned back and came to reality 'haan Daya? Kuch kahe rahe the?' .

Daya replied 'boss, ghar aa gaya hai tumhara.. Utarne ka irada hai ya nahi? Bohot thak gaya hun. Mujhe bhi toh ghar jake rest karna hai' .

A small smile came across Abhijeet's face 'haan yaar bye, good night' and he turned towards the gate.

Daya looked at his retreating figure..letting out a sigh he ignited the Qualis and drove off. Abhijeet ringed the doorbell after nodding at the watchman.

An old lady opened the door and said 'are Abhijeet beta, tum agaye. Jaldi se fresh ho ke aao, mai dinner laga deti hun'.

'Nahi Kaki, mujhe bhookh nahi hai, aap kha lo' replied Abhijeet slowly and moved upstairs without giving a chance to her to drag the conversation further.

He went straight to the balcony. Cool sea breeze was playing on his face. His mind drifted back to the bureau scenes when Survi went out with her daughter Pari..

ACP sir and Daya exchanged a glance and the former put his hand on Abhijeet's shoulder consolingly. 'Abhijeet, Daya, case toh aab khatam ho chuka hai, toh sab ghar jao. Parson aa kar filework complete karke headquarters bhejna hai'. All nodded and moved to get out of the bureau.

After ACP sir left, Daya approached Abhijeet 'boss, chale?' The latter nodded silently.

'Kya soch rahe ho?'

'Bas yehi ki 8 saal pahele ke uss hadse ne mujh se kafi kuch chin liya hai. Pata nahi aur bhi kya kya khoya hai maine' Abhijeet sighed while walking through the parking lot of bureau.

'I understand Abhijeet magar aab jo ho gaya so ho gaya haina, beeti baaton khaskar jo sirf takleef hi badhati hai use yaad karke kya faida?'

'Haan sahi kahe rahe ho Daya, chalo' Abhijeet said.

Duo board into the qualis and set out for home.
*flashback ends*

He couldn't help smiling in an unexplicable agony ; 'wakehi me maine kafi kuch kho diya hai' he mumbled.

* * * *

The doorbell ringed in the sunday morning and Kaki finds a person standing at the doorstep.

'Are Daya beta, aao aao..bohot din ho gaye aaye nahi' she warmly welcomed him.

'Wo kya hai na Kaki, Mohan kaka ne aaj chutti li hai, toh socha isi bahane aaj aap ke hath ke parathe se breakfast kar lun' Daya replied with a smile. 'Waise Abhijeet kahan hai?'

'Upar aapne kamre me hi hai.. Pata nahi kya hua hai use beta, kal raat se bohot udaas hai.'

'Haan, mai baat karta hun'.

'Good morning Abhijeet.' Daya greeted.

Abhijeet, who was enjoying morning breeze at balcony turned round 'Are Daya tum, subah subah?'

'Haan bas aise hi, waise tumse kuch baat karni thi.'

'Haan bolo, kya baat hai?'

Daya asked 'Yehi sawal toh mujhe tumse karni chahiye ke baat kya hai, kaal Survi ke jane ke baad se dekh raha hun tumhara mood off hai, aur Kaki bhi yehi bata rahi thi'.

Abhijeet averted his gaze 'kuch khas nahi, bas aisehi'

'Aise hi, haan? Dekho boss tum mujhse jhoot nahi bol sakte. Survi ke baare me soch rahe ho na?'

'Sach kahun toh haan, meri wajah se hi shayed use itni takleef sehni padi.. Aaj agar main sab kuch bhool nahi gaya hota toh shayed wo meri jindagi me hoti.. Mera bhi ek parivaar hota.. Is yaddasht ne mujhse bohot kuch chin liya hai Daya.. Pahele Maa, phir...' he paused abruptly.

'Sahi hai, lekin iss sab me tumhara kya kasoor hai? Tumhari wajah se kuch nahi hua. Uss waqt bas halat hi aisi thi ke sab kuch..' Daya stopped to take a breath.

'bikhar gaya' Abhijeet completed Daya's words.

'Roka kyun nahi Survi ko phir?' Daya questioned.

'Kis hak se ya phir kis liye rokta yaar? Mujhe aaj bhi kuch yaad nahi uske bare me' he banged his fist on the centre table.

'Phir aise muh latka ke baithe rehene se bhi kya hasil ho raha hai?' Daya asked softly. Abhijeet's eyebrows screwed in confusion. 'Kuch bhi nahi, haina? Toh phir inn sab ko bhi bhool ne ki koshish karo Abhijeet. Past is past afterall. If you think your and Survi's path can't meet now, then forget her and stop regretting.'

Abhijeet remained silent for few moments and nodded 'You're right Daya. Main hi kuch jyada sentimental ho gaya tha' he smiled. Daya gave a broad smile.

Kaki's voice came from kitchen. 'Paratha ready hai. Abhijeet tum aur Daya niche aa rahe ho ya nahi nashte ke liye?'

Abhijeet glared at Daya naughtily 'oh toh breakfast ke liye hi subah subah mere ghar aye ho Daya.'

'Kya karun yaar? Khud toast banane se Kaki ke hath ka garmagaram paratha better hai' Daya winked.

Abhijeet laughed loudly 'chal niche, Kaki bula rahi hai'.

Edited by ANGELICEYES - 24 January 2015 at 6:35am

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anjali_mahajan IF-Rockerz

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Posted: 24 January 2015 at 11:04am | IP Logged
I posted my individual challenge...have a lookTongue n tell me hows it??
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Posted: 24 January 2015 at 1:30pm | IP Logged
Angel I love that story. It is so duo like that I could see it happening! I'm adding it in.

Anjali yours was hilarious. I liked it! Big smile
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Posted: 25 January 2015 at 2:09am | IP Logged
Angel.. Love it!!short and sweet..!!Big smileClap
anjali_mahajan IF-Rockerz

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Posted: 25 January 2015 at 3:07am | IP Logged
Angel i liked this short n sweet story..
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Posted: 25 January 2015 at 10:13am | IP Logged
Angel cute and sweet one Big smile

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Posted: 25 January 2015 at 10:39am | IP Logged
Shreya di, Anji di, Resh, BT - thank you so so much for reading. I've never written story stuffs. Thanks a lot Embarrassed .

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