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Posted: 9 years ago
#51
first of all congrats for your 1st SS πŸ€—

fantastic prologue can't wait for the upcoming updates πŸ˜ƒ

but why are they going to marry just for one year??
maybe both ashlok cursing there father for fixing there marriage???anyways do update soon😳 can't wait anymore😳😳

thanx for the PMπŸ˜‰πŸ˜Š
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Posted: 9 years ago
#52
loved the prologue

so ashlok are gonna get married for a year?

well will wait for that answer

loved how ashlok were looking at the person who fixed their marraige, almost wanting to kill them 🀣'

will wait for further chapters on why they can't tolerate each other

dear you write so well, no worries

do update soon

 welcome to the writing clubπŸ€—
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Posted: 9 years ago
#53
thank u so much all for ur supportπŸ€—means a lot to me❀️

Ok guys let me introduce the two families in this story for u.

kindly ignore mistakes😊

                                                            Character Sketch

Agnihothri Family

Niranjan Agnihothri,one of the top business tycoon of Mumbai ,and CEO of Agnihothri Group of Institues.Anjali Agnihothri,Niranjan Agnihothri's wife,a simple and lovely house wife.They have two handsome sons,Varad Agnihothri elder one,completed his Ph.d in journalism and running his own  business in media field.he has got two precious stones in his life,his wife Sojal Varad Agnihothri and his little princess Kavya Varad Agnihothri and living a happy married life...

Shlok Agnihothri,the younger son of Mr&Mrs Agnihothri,completed his MBA graduation from London,currently joined his family business as MD of Agnihothri Group of Institues.he is a   full of life type guy always likes to live a modern life and loves to live in foreign countries.He doesn't like to live in India,especially he doesn't like the girls in India.According to him the girls in India are quite classy and nave type.he always says to his gang that he won't marry a typical Indian girl.Besides all he loves his family to core,specially baba,he is the ladla of baba.family is the only factor that hold back him to stay here.now also,for his baba's sake he has decided to join their business...

Kirlosker Family

A small and happy family including Avdoot Kirlosker,one of the top industrialist of Mumbai,CEO of Kirlosker Group of Industries and his better half Kalindi Kirlosker and their beloved daughter Astha Kirlosker,a lovely,cheerful and most importantly a short tempered girl,who just complete her MBA graduation.she is a simple girl.who doesn't give attention to the luxurious modern life and always loved to live a simple and happy life with her family... 

Edited by DEVU.NAIR - 9 years ago
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Posted: 9 years ago
#54


                                                                     
                                             Part One

Hotel  Marine Plaza in Mumbai

Two hansome guys sitting near the window,facing to the sea,"Arey yar Ram,where is she???it's getting late,I told you these girls have no standard,punctuality etc etc etc...how u guys fall in love with these crazy people...unbelievable!!!!!

Oho my angry young man,,the great Shlok Agnihothri,they will come,plz wait na,just 10 more minutes,for me...plzzz...once u fall in love u will understand my situation,buddy...

Shlok:ok,but only 10 more minutes...and what did u say,Me..In LOVE !! ha ha good jok..but highly impossible..

Ram:not impossible,it's possible..we will see(winked)

Shlok:ofcz,we will see...

After 5 minues,2 beautiful girls entered in to the hotel room,and walking towards the table occupied by our handsome's..

Shlok :What the???what she doing here???

Ram :who?

Shlok :Arey wo,that drama queen kirlosker.

Ram :(try to control laugh)wo,she is best friend of saya.

Shlok:What??but..

Ram :(cut of his words)cool buddy,she is a nice girl.plzz,don't embarrass me in front of them.

Shlok :(murmuring)nice girl,my foot...

At the same time in between those beautifuls...

Astha :Wait Saya

Saya :What happened Asthu??

Astha :look there,that arrogant agnihothri.what he doing here??

Saya :(not at all surprised)he is best friend of Ram,they are collagemates.

Astha :What??why didn't u tell me before,I...

Ram's words stoped Astha...

Ram :hi beautiful,why r u standing there,plz sit na..

Saya :asthu,don't get upset yar,plz for my sake,u don't mind him.now let's go..

Astha :(suppressing anger)mmm..let's go.

Saya :hello handsomes,what's up...

Ram :hi dear,nothing just waiting for you 2.

Astha and Shlok didn't look at each other.

Ram :hey astha,what happened to u?why r u so silent?

Astha :nothing yar,am ok.

Shlok :(completely ignoring astha)hi saya,how r u sweetie..

Astha :(in mind)sweetie!!!oh god,these firlty guys and their tantrums..

Saya :yaa shlok,am fine,way abt u..

Shlok :Me..what happened to me,always coool...(slightly pulling his collar)

Astha :(quite irritated)so ram,what's ur plan abt marriage???

Shlok : (in mind)ohh,this chatter box gonna open her bundle of enquiries..

Saya :asthu,marriage..

"whose marriage",suddenly somebody's voice stopped their convo.four of them looked at the figure just standing infront of them...

This is part one hope u like it..

 

 

Edited by DEVU.NAIR - 9 years ago
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Posted: 9 years ago
#55
Wanna give u a tight hug buds, ri8 nw πŸ€—
You are such a cute writer mahn!
Muaaahhh :*
U asked me b4 dat, whether u wl b able 2 grew upto my expectations n nw I hv d answer 😊 Ofcourse YOU DID!
I lovvveeed it yaar 😳
Both d cs n update!
In d cs, I felt like AaShlok having sm traces of resemblance with vijay simran of Priyamanavale πŸ˜‰
Bt d chapter was smthng different!
Arrogant Agnihotri n Drama Queen Kirlosker r frnds of two love birds 😲 πŸ˜†
Do work as cupids and eventually fall in love πŸ˜‰
Bt d prologue 😲
Let me Connect d dots
It wl take time n, n wl b more easier if u update soonish! πŸ˜‰ πŸ˜†
Ps: Last lathae ashareeri aara? 🀣

Edited by ..AngelicAnu.. - 9 years ago
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Posted: 9 years ago
#56
What an update devu my sweet girl! πŸ€— It had the right amount of wow factor! πŸ‘ 

Simply outstanding, believe me you are a very very good writer, infact you are loaded with the ammunition of writing! πŸ˜‰

I loved them both on first sight πŸ˜‰ and how could i not i love arrogant heroes and spirited heroines πŸ˜›. 
And Mr Shlok Agnihotri has no illusions about love  but he is gonna fall flat on his face, people like him do he won't be hit by love but would be bitten by love! πŸ˜ˆπŸ˜†

Loved that hotel scene to the core...

Both uncomfortable with each others presence, but still noting every point about each other's conversation πŸ˜‰πŸ˜† first sign of attraction is there! πŸ˜‰

Keep it up gal πŸ‘πŸΌ and stun us with your next update, i am immensely liking the storyline! πŸ˜‰
Edited by mahirmukhtar - 9 years ago
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Posted: 9 years ago
#57
Lovely start to a lovely story...with khati maathi nok jhok...😳😳😳😳
So thats clear that ashlok dont like each other...now it will be super duper treat to read the story that how the two of them will fall in love😳😳😳😳
And loved the character sketch sweety...πŸ‘πŸ‘πŸ‘πŸ‘
Continue the story soon...

Edited by meerab... - 9 years ago
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Posted: 9 years ago
#58
loved the first chap buddy .
so they both know each other..
but despise each other to the core.
how will they survive the marriage and the  rest..God only knows.

nicely written.
Edited by deepavasudev - 9 years ago
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Posted: 9 years ago
#59
Character Sketch is lovely dear..⭐️⭐️⭐️

I loved the way Shlok and Aastha were avoiding each other...πŸ˜›

Arrogant Agnihotry and chatterbox KirloskarπŸ˜‰πŸ˜†πŸ˜† Cute jodi they will make..πŸ˜ƒ

Lovely update Part one Devutty...I know its short becoz you are having fever..😲 Buts its ok dear..I know you will make the next part longer..πŸ˜ƒπŸ˜ƒ

Love you a looot DevuuuπŸ€—
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Posted: 9 years ago
#60
Beautiful devu...
After reading the prologue i thought the story is like priyamanavela film...
But it is not like that movie...
Loved the first part...
Shlok-Astha dont like each other...
Waiting fr second part...
Update soon...
Thanks for the PMEdited by charanyaaj - 9 years ago