Posted: 11 February 2015 at 12:29am | IP Logged
Hey there Page!
I see that there has been a LONG DRY SPELL here in my absence! now why would you want your patrons to go thirsty huh? Cmon give us a nice big shot of vodka soon!!
CH 5: There is an enticing quality in the description of Khushi from Arnav's eyes/POV. You can't help but be drawn into the magic that is taking place around these two. I read the first two paras again and again, so much did I love your writing. Also not to forget, he has noticed that she had made additions to his design and the fact that he likes them is a positive. I hope that somewhere down the line, he gives Khushi a chance to bring out her creative designing side and wow us all. I also admired the business aspect that you brought into this chapter with the poaching of a designer, it made Arnav more real in my eyes. I always wanted the serial to actually show him doing some business, realistically that is, but alas that remained a dream and I appreciate you portraying him to be the ruthless and tactical businessman that he is supposed to be.
Somehow I love the conversations between the Raizada siblings, even in the previous chapter comment I mentioned this about Anjali n Akash and now I would like to applaud you for the part between Anjali and Arnav. Hmmm, lot of information you have given us through that medium. There is a "Bored House Wives Club"?? LOL! And forgive me if I am being dense, but who or what is Snooki??? Aha the vodka makes an appearance! Ooo, And Khushi in her red saree is berries! Pathetic, I know but I have a very active imagination, as you may have figured out by now!! Anyway, I'm glad that there is no cheating husband involved at the moment in Anjali's life. All that has already happened so that particular clich won't be happening. I had a silly grin on my face when Arnav was making scandalous statements to his sister. And really he is Bachelor#2?? Who is #1??? Awww he is so sweet when he is ignorant of the fan following he has who actually spend hours voting for him!
He can't seem to stop looking for Khushi! That girl is gonna regret wearing red! And though a major part of me knows that Khushi is NOT the Ms. Gupta that Akash and Anjali are talking about but I would really relax if you clarify that in any upcoming chapter. Ooohh a jealous ASR is a treat to watch, please make ample use of him!! You know what, you make it clear to us that Khushi and Akash have nothing going on between them but let Arnav remain under that misconception! That way the jealousy track can be used to a greater extent!!
Khushi's musings about Arnav were no less captivating, brought a barrage full of memories about the shooting of the calendar and Diwali all mixed together and made me so nostalgic
! Well I'm glad that she decides to let her hair down and dances to her heart's content! But we all know that someone will be watching her whilst she dances with gay abandon and this is only going to heat things up more!!
After writing such a FABULOUS update, where have you disappeared huh?? Cmon bartender, your patrons are waiting with their glasses in hand for the next round.