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OS: if only you knew. (NeiRa & RaMan) (Page 3)

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Posted: 26 December 2014 at 12:57am | IP Logged
Originally posted by beautiful1

Originally posted by columbia

Ok I am going to be very honest

I LOVE LOVE your writing! especially the style and the flow it is really keeping me hooked! BUT I have a small problem with the characterization, I don't like how you have written them to be having a war with each other, like this is his win and that is her win, that part I thought doesn't fit in the characterization. 

But please please continue , I would love to see where you take it 

Thank you for being honest. Embarrassed

I honestly didn't think many people would enjoy this piece very much because personally it didn't see this "wow" factor in it. I don't know but this may have been one of my very bad OSs. And, regarding the characterisation, i think i may have gone overboard because i trying hard to portray them as hurt and pissed off at one and another. I wanted to show them as two very egotistical people. But i guess it didn't come across very well and i blame that on my poor writing in this OS. LOLLOL

I think i'll continue after the RaMan fake marriage track is finished. Smile 


No please dont wait. You must continue. I dont want to feel like I should not have been honest. I love your writing especially it has a certain gripping quality to it. You are right, when I went back and read it was that they are egostical and you gave a 'war' zone for that ego, which is fab in its own way. Please do continue, in fact, you have thought it through which in itself makes you a better writer than the show's writer Clap

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Posted: 26 December 2014 at 1:28am | IP Logged
It was awesome!!!!
Update soon
And do pm me if u can!

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Posted: 26 December 2014 at 10:49am | IP Logged
Originally posted by .pia_12.

Wow... That was superb !!!
Loved it!!!
Plzzz continue...
And plzz drop me a pm

Thank you :) 
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Posted: 26 December 2014 at 10:50am | IP Logged
Originally posted by .pia_12.

Wow... That was superb !!!
Loved it!!!
Plzzz continue...
And plzz drop me a pm
 
Thank you :) & i will try to pm you x
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Posted: 26 December 2014 at 10:51am | IP Logged
Originally posted by sudhajo

too good.. beautiful. pls continue... love to read further. 

Aww thanks ! Big smile
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Posted: 26 December 2014 at 10:52am | IP Logged
Originally posted by -Spriha-

Wow...that was really well written...please do continue. Want to know what happens next!

I am glad you liked it even though it sort of a rushed piece of work as i was just writing down some things that were coming to my head! LOLEmbarrassed
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Posted: 26 December 2014 at 10:53am | IP Logged
Originally posted by abcd89

lovelyDisapprove

Thanks Big smile
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Posted: 26 December 2014 at 10:57am | IP Logged
Originally posted by poetic

This is so warmly written. 
I am liking the characterisations a lot. Pl do write sooner Thumbs Up

Aww thank you, i didn't think you guys would like this Os this much after all it was kind of rushed as i was itching to pen down some of the things that were coming to me.  Big smile

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