Jodha Akbar

Tujh Bin Jiya Jaye Kaise ss updated chappy 20 on pg 67 on 6/09/15 - Page 5

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Posted: 9 years ago
Lovely story with good turns especially now Jalaal gets to know that truth who killed their kids..Hope is seeing Jalaal realising his mistake & missing JO badly..
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Posted: 9 years ago
hey dear congrats for such a lovely story...
awesome concept...
please cont soon and pm me...
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Posted: 9 years ago
Nice story. starting chapter it self is promising.
SECOND one is very interesting.
please  do continue.

          
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plz update soon we waiting dear...😊
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Sorry for the late update. My net had some problem so i could not update . As an apology i'm updating two chapters.
Chapter- 3
Hakima  is confused- kya apko Jodha begum ne nahi batya shehanshah?
Jalal- kya nahi batya? (Millions of emotions were going on inside him he was anxious, scared, eager and surprised to know that his beloved was hiding something from him)
Hakima- Ki aaj se do hafte pehle Jodha begum behosh ho gayi . Moti bai ne humme unki janch karne ko bolaya tha. Unki janch karne ke bad  yeh pata chala ki unki halat bahut najok hai.  Aur agar unka ilaj nahi hua toh voh...(she was scared to speak further, as she did not want to face the wrath of the king)
Jalal(literally crying)- toh kya hakim sahiba
Hakima- Voh mar jayegi (Jalal's world came crashing down. He felt like somebody slapped right on his.  He know understood what he had done to her. That she was not only hurt because of him, but, she was ruined. He was the one who should be blamed for her condition. All he wanted to do know very badly was go hug her and love her till eternity. He wanted to win her back at any cost. Know he also knew that why after their fight she never came out of her room.)
Jalal(still in trance)-  Jankari ke liye shukriya Hakima  Sahiba.
He came out of his trance when he realized about the situation of his life, which was way more than serious. He ran like a cheetah to her room. As soon as he reaches her room he shouts- JODHA...
When he does not see her anywhere. He thinks she might be in the dressing room. He says-
 Jodha Begum kahan hain ap?  Hume apse bat karni hain. Hume samjhane ka ek muka toh dijiye. He waits for her answer. But when he gets no answer, he checks the dressing room, but he finds that she is not there. He begins to get worried. By this time both Moti and Zakira have come after doing their respective jobs. They both are shocked to see Jalal in Jodha's room.  Jalal(with hope) asks them- Kya ap dono ne Jodha Begum ko dekha hai? Both look at each other totally blank and confused. Jalal is getting angry and impatient. He says- Humne ap dono so kuch pucha javab dijiye. Both answer in unison- Nahi shehanshah
Jalal(angry)- Tum dono kar kya rahi thi . Tum Jodha Begum ki dassiyan ho na. Tumhe unke sath rehna chaiye tha.
Both of them give their justifications of not being there in the room.  Jalal's anger does subside, but not his worry and fear. He calls one of the soldiers and asks him to find Jodha in the palace. Jalal sends Zakira away and tells moti to stay. After some time of wait a solider comes and says-  Gustaki muaff ho shehanshah Jodha Begum mehel mai nahi. Jalal is shocked- Kya keh rahe ho? Solider- Shehanshah pure mehel ka chappa chappa dekh liye hai. Par unka  kuch pata nahi chal. Jalal is in shock he is worried like hell. He has no clue where his beloved is. He asks the solider to go away. Suddenly his eyes fall on the letter written by Jodha. He runs and picks up the letter and asks moti to read it.
Promo- Jalal is determined to find Jodha
Please do tell me how was it. Sorry for the errors.   Thank you for reading
Edited by anabella - 9 years ago
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                   Chapter -       4

Moti begins to read the letter. Prnam Shehansha, hum thak chuke hai apne jivan se. Jiye bhi toh kis ke liye jiye ab na Hussain aur nahi Hussan aur nahi aap. Maine mere bacho ka khoon nahi kiya hai shehanshah. Maine un dono ko apni kok mai noo mahine pala hai. Ek maa kabhi bhi apne bachon ka bura nahi sochti hai. Main unse bhaut  adhik prem karti hon aur karti rahongi .  Aap he bataye shehanshah ki kya aap apne he ansh ka khoon kar sakte hain? Nahi na. Vaise he hum bhi nahi kar sakte hain. Aur voh sandesh Mahamanga ji ne galat  padha tha. Humne yeh bat apko iss liye nahi batye kyonki hum apki mansha ko thes nahi ponchana  chate the.  Aur humne kabhi bhi apki bhavnaon ka mazak nahi udaya.  Kash hum us din mar jate jis din Khyber ne hume dosri bar agva kiya tha. Hum us din Khyber ko bachane ke liye nahi gaye the shehanshah . Hum us din apne jivan ka akhri bhla karye karne gaye the. Hum tab tut kar bikhar chuke hai  shehanshah. Kam se kam agar hum tab marjate toh humare bachon ki mirtyu ka dosh hum par na lagya jata aur nahi hume apka prem khona padta. Vaise bhi shehansha Jodha toh usi din mar gai thi jis din apne Jodha se prem karna chod diya. Bhaut kuch bol na chate the hum apko par apne kuch bolne ke layak he nahi choda apne. Aapne hume ek jivit lash  bana diya hai apne. Mai voh jivit lash hon jo apni kabar dund  rahi hai. Hum ap pe boj hai na? Apne kaha tha ki apko iss rishte se ajadi chaiye . Mai meri mirtyu ke sath apko iss rishte se sadve ke liye ajad karti hoon.  Humari mirtyu ke liye khud ko jimmewar mat samjhna. Hume shanty chaiye thi iss liye hum apne kanha aur apne  bachon ke pas ja rahe hain. Hum apko sadve samran rakhenge. Jodha. Jalal was tooo numb, her words kept ringing in his ears. Her words revealed a lot, her pain, her love for him and his kids. He felt that thousands of daggers were put straight into his heart. His heart was heavy with pain and guilt.  His soul was mourning for his beloved. He just wanted to embrace her tightly.  He knelt down crying. He spoke- Ya Allah yeh humne kya kar diya.  Humari mohabbat ka katal kar diya humne. Jodha Begum ne kabhi bhi humare jasbato ka mazak nahi udaya. Humne ek maa ke bejati ki hai. Humne  apni mohabbat ko humesha ke liye kho diya. Humne har bar unko galat samjaha. Aab hum kya kare Allah.  Hamida bano was trying to find Jalal as she had overheard Rukaiya speaking to Hoshiyar that Jalal is going to divorce Jodha. She wanted to tell that  he was doing injustice with her. Finally she found him in Jodha's room to her shock and in such a bad condition.  She rushed toward him and asked- Jalal kya hua aur Jodha kahan hai ? Jalal hugged his mother suprising her. He said in a very broken voice- Hum ne jodha ko humesha ke liye kho diya. Ammijan voh khudkushi karnee  gaye hai. Ab bahut der hogye hai. Hum  unke bina ji nahi paienge Ammijan. Hume bhi unke pas jana hai . He began sobbing like a little child. Hamida was shocked to hear this  she knew that what her son did was completly  wrong, but she could not see  him this condition.  She says - Jalal tum jodha ke pas nahi ja sakte Kyunki tum sirf jodha ke pati nahi mughal saltanat ke shehanshah bhi ho.  Jalal  jo tumne  kiya voh galat hai par abhi bhi der nahi hoi hai. Kya tumhare mohabbat itni kamjor hai kya ki jodha ko bina dundhe hi tumne har manli. Itne kamjor mohabbat hai kya tumhare jalal? Nahi  jalal tumhare  mohabbat majbot  hai toh abhi der nahi hoi hai. Mohabbat ne aj tak voh kar dikhaya hai jo nafrat na kar paye. Mohabbat is duniya ki sabse badi taktwar jasbato hai jalal. Apni mohabbat ki takat par aitbar karo. . Jao jalal use dund kar lao.  His mother's words made him determined to find and win back his love forever. Jalal- Ammijan hum jodha begum ko dhund kar rahenge. Hum unhe  khone nahi chate hai aur nahi khoenge. Humari allah tala se dua hai ki hum apko jaldi hi dund le aur ap hume maifos mile.  His mother smiled and said-  Humari beti ko lekar ana jalal  . He says -ji. He began  running his razor  sharp mind that she might have gone through the main door as she would have been caught through the secret door and surely she would have been dressed up as commoner for not getting caught. He orders the soldiers to find her in all directions and he also goes to find her. He makes his  horse faster than he could ever do.

Promo-  jalal talks to man who has baby she tells that a woman saved a child.

Please tell me how was it. Thank you for reading

Edited by anabella - 9 years ago
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Posted: 9 years ago
Awesome anaebella
Loved it
U describe their feeling
So beautifully
UPDATE fast and a longish chapter
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Posted: 9 years ago
awesome...mind blowing update dear... continue soon & do pm aswell
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Originally posted by: marshi

Awesome anaebella

Loved it
U describe their feeling
So beautifully
UPDATE fast and a longish chapter

I'll try to update long chapters
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wonderful anabella and now i cant wait for them to meet. pls make them meet in the next chapter. and thanx a lot for the pm.