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Posted: 9 years ago

Originally posted by: veeba4eva

You never updated I waited whole day.plz update quick cuz I just love this!!!


I'm really sorry I wanted to update but my mood was totally off πŸ˜”

Will try to update today πŸ˜³
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Posted: 9 years ago

Originally posted by: MaaneetDeewangi


I'm really sorry I wanted to update but my mood was totally off πŸ˜”

Will try to update today πŸ˜³

and do pm me πŸ˜ŠπŸ˜‰
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Posted: 9 years ago
The battle between heart and mind - Part 1




Aisi Chup Tu Laga Ke Gayi.
Sari Khushiyan Kha Ke Gayi.
Haye Andar Andar Se Toota Main..
Tere Ishq Mein Khud Hi Se Rootha Main..




Two weeks ago:

Baldev was sitting in his room lost in deep thoughts. Veera's harsh words kept ringing in his head. "Veerji sahi kehte hain tu ek gunda hai. Tu mere layak hi nahi".
Baldev was in so much pain. Her words pierced his heart, he was extremely hurt. He got shocked when Veera slapped him but the slap didn't hurt as much as her words hurt him. He just couldn't believe that the girl he worshipped didn't trust him at all. He was feeling so heartbroken. He wanted to cry but held back his tears
.


Baldev:
Nai Baldev ab tu ek vi aansoo nai bahaye ga Veera ke liye. Tu to pind da sher hai na, tu kaise ro sakta hai?


Baldev looked in the mirror and kept looking at his own reflection. Suddenly a voice from within spoke.



Voice:
Dekh liya Baldev tainu Veera ne kaisa sila diya tere pyar ka. Bhool gya ke us ne pehle bhi tera dil toda tha!


Baldev:
Mainu sab yaad hai par tab woh mainu bilkul bhi pyar nai karti thi.


Voice:
Wah Baldev tainu abhi bhi uss ki padi hai. Teri mohabbat nu salam!
Tainu waqe hi lagta hai ke Veera tainu sach mein pyar karti hai? Agar woh teri zara si bhi izzat karti to tujh pe kabhi bhi hath na uthati. Jis kudi ko tujh pe bharosa aur yaqeen hi nai woh tujh se pyar kaise kar sakti hai?


Baldev:
Jin buri yaadon ko main bhula chuka tha, Veera ne phir se woh yaadein taza kar di. Lekin pehle wala dard iss dard ke aage kuch bhi nai.

There was so much pain in baldev's voice.


Voice:
Veera ko Ranvi ke aage kuch dikhta hi nai aur na hi kabhi dikhe ga.


Baldev was really mad at Ranvi. He had done so much for Ranvi but Ranvi had built an image of Baldev just because of one incident.


Voice:
Baldev tainu Veera ko bhulana hi ho ga! 


Baldev:
Aise kaise bhula doon main use? Kehna bohat aasaan hai par karna namumkin hai kyoun ke main Veera ko hadd se zyada chah baitha hoon. Meri har saans pe sirf Veera ka naam likha hai. Usi mein meri jaan basti hai. Main ki karaan? Apna badkismat dil use de baitha hoon. Veera ko bhulana mere bas ki baat nai. 


Voice:
 Baldev tainu Veera se bepanah ishq hai par use teri parwa hi nai. Us ki jaan sirf apne Veerji mein basti hai aur ay sach tu chah ke bhi nai jhutla sakta!
Sach to yeh hai ke Veera tere layak hi nai. Sab ko us Rajveer pe yaqeen hai par jise bachpan se jaante hain aur jis ne ki kuch nai kitta Veera, Ranvi aur un ke parivaar de waaste, us pe zara sa bhi yaqeen nai.

Even the mention of Rajveer's name made Baldev's blood boil. Rajveer made him sick. On top of that, Veera was still meeting him and sharing her problems with him. This made Baldev angry.

Baldev was fuming with anger. He screamed and smashed the mirror with his hand.

Baldev's hand got soaked with blood. He flinched in pain but the pain Veera and his own people gave him, was nothing in front of this.

Balwant and Bansuri came running. Bansuri got worried seeing her son in such a state. She got shocked seeing Baldev's injured hand.


Bansuri:
Hayo Rabba ay ki hoya Baldev puttar? Tu abhi chal mere naal haspataal. Ay ki haalat bana rakhi hai main tainu aise nai wekh sakti. Uss Veera ne changa nai kitta.


Baldev:
Beeji aap jao yahan se mainu aap ki jhooti tasalli aur jhoota pyar nai chahiye.


Bansuri:
Baldev puttar ay tu ki keh rya hain. Main teri maa hoon aur apni aulaad da dard sirf ek maa hi samajh sakti hai.


Baldev:
Wah beeji wah aur kitna natak karen gi aap. Mainu mere haal pe chadd do!


Even though Bansuri was selfish and wanted Baldev to get rid of Veera, she couldn't see him in such a state. Bansuri got tears in her eyes. She cupped Baldev's face.


Bansuri:
Aap wahan khade ho ke ki wekh rahe ho ay aap ka hi puttar hai.
Aap ko to sirf Ranvi di padi rehndi ey.

Baldev: Rehne do beeji mainu muft ke taane nahi sunene. Papaji ko us mahan parivaar ke aage kuch nahi dikhta aur na hi kabhi dikhe ga.


Balwant was feeling helpless. He wanted to trust his son but he was too blinded by his love for Ranvi and his family.


Baldev angrily left from there. Bansuri ran after him.


Bansuri:
Puttar meri baat to sun tera zakhm bohat gehra hai tujhe abhi ke abhi patti karwani ho gi.


Baldev:
Beeji ay zakhm inna gehra ho chuka hai ke is pe ab marham lagana namumkin hai.


Oblivious to Baldev and Bansuri, Nihal was standing there and he had listened to their conversation.


Baldev was taken aback by seeing him in their house. Balwant and Bansuri were surprised as well.

Nihal was really worried for Baldev. He wanted to take him to a doctor.


Baldev:
Chachu aap yahan? Kya aap bhi mainu sunane aaye hain?


Nihal:
Baldev tu pagal hai kya. Tu abhi isi waqt mere sath chal aur mujhe koi behas nahi karni.


Nihal held Baldev's arm, assured Balwant Bansuri that Baldev would be fine and went out of their house with Baldev. Nihal took Baldev to a doctor. There was a deep cut in Baldev's hand so the doctor had to stitch it. After getting his hand bandaged, Nihal took Baldev to a place where they could talk in peace.


Nihal:
Baldev mujhe pata hai tu yehi soch raha hai ke main tujhe yahan kyoun laya hoon. Ratan ji ne mujhe bataya ke tera aur Veera ka break up hua hai.


As soon as Nihal said Veera, Baldev's expressions changed.


Nihal understood what Baldev must be thinking.


Nihal:
Baldev mujhe tujhpe pura bharosa aur yaqeen hai. Mujhe pata hai tune Ranvi ko nahi phasaya. Main janta hoon tu aisa kabhi soch bhi nahi sakta. Mujhe teri aankhon mein sachai nazar aati hai aur apno ke liye beshumaar pyar. Sab tujhe ghalat samajh rahe hain lekin main janta hoon ke tera dil saaf hai.


Baldev surprisingly stared at Nihal. He couldn't believe that there was finally someone who trusted and understood him so well. He kinda felt happy inside but didn't show it.


Baldev:
Koun se apne chachu? Mera koi apna nai. Jinhe main apna samajhta tha unho ne hi mera sath chadd ditta. Mera apna parivaar tak mere pe yaqeen nai kar raha. Unhe mere pe zara sa bhi bharosa nai. Mainu laga sirf chai wale nu mere pe bharosa hai par aap ko bhi mere pe bharosa aur yaqeen hai, ay jaan ke bada acha laga.


Nihal: Baldev yeh tu kya keh raha hai? Yeh sab ek bohat badi ghalat fehmi hai jise hamein mil ke suljhana ho ga.


Baldev:
Huh chachu ay koi misunderstanding nai. Jis kudi ko maine apni jaan se zyada chaha, wohi kudi mere pyar pe tamacha maar ke chali gayi. Thappad to maine hazaar khaye hain par inni gehri chot kabhi nai khayi aur woh bhi uss insaan se jise maine apna sab kuch maana.


Nihal looked at Baldev with a confused look.

Nihal: Baldev main samjha nahi tu mujhe sab kuch khul ke bata. Hua kya tha?


Baldev:
Mainu laga aap ko sab pata ho ga. Ab samjha. Veera ne aap sab ko kuch nai bataya.


Then Baldev explained Nihal everything that had happened. How Veera doubted on him and then slapped him and called him a gunda etc.

Nihal couldn't believe his ears. He was extremely disappointed with Veera.


Nihal: Veera ne bohat ghalat kiya hai. Maine kabhi socha bhi nahi tha ke woh tere sath aisa kare gi. Us ne jaldbazi mein tere sath aisa kiya aur who bhi Rajveer ki baaton mein aa ke. Ranvi ke dil mein tere liye itni nafrat pata nahi kyoun bhar gayi hai. Unhe tujh pe yaqeen karna chahiye tha! Par Baldev mujhe lagta hai tujhe aur Veera ko eik baar baat kar leni chahiye. Woh abhi bhi tujh se pyar karti hai bas Ranvi ki waja se pareshaan hai.


Baldev:
Kamaal hai chachu aap ko sab janene ke baad bhi lagta hai ke Veera mujh se sacha pyar karti hai?

Baldev:
Jahan yaqeen aur bharosa hi na ho us rishte ka ki faida aur main bhi insaan hoon koi khilona nai jise jab chaha istemaal kar liya aur jab chaha istemaal kar ke phaink diya. Kinni baar tode gi woh mera dil. Mere mein inni himmat nai ke main phir se kisi ko apna dil todne di ijazat doon.


Nihal: Kitni baar, matlab?


Baldev:
Dusri baar toda hai Veera ne mera dil par iss baar dard mitne ka naam hi nai le raha.


Baldev narrated the whole story to Nihal. From the time where Baldev didn't even know that he loved Veera for real. Baldev told him every single detail. Baldev told him how Veera got to know the truth about being Ranvi's half sister and how he supported her. He told her about Veera's heartbreak because of Karan. Then he told Nihal about his wooing Veera days and how Veera had played with his feelings. He told him about the sarpanch chunao and how Veera had accused him for beating Ranvi. Then rest of the story, that Baldev eventually forgave her and how they became friends. 


Nihal could see how much Baldev loved her. He was feeling extremely bad for Baldev. Nihal got teary eyed. He could literally feel Baldev's pain because he himself had longed for love all his life and especially after he left Pritampura.


Baldev:
Baki to aap jaante hain. Main use Poland akele kaise jaane deta, pyar...


Baldev didn't complete his sentence. He stopped talking.


Nihal had seen how much Baldev cared for Veera and during Poland he realized that both loved eachother. Nihal knew that Baldev always felt something special for Veera but he didn't know that Baldev loved her to such an extent. Nihal could tell from Baldev's words that he always stood by Veera's side, especially during her hard times.


Nihal: Mujhe Veera se bilkul bhi yeh umeed nahi thi. Tune hamesha Veera ka sath diya hai us pe bharosa kiya. Maine dekha hai tu us se kitna pyar karta hai par mujhe nahi pata tha ke tera pyar ibadat mein badal jaye ga. Veera ne waqe hi tere pyar ka bohat bada apmaan kiya hai.


Baldev:
Chachu main aur nai seh sakta. Main thak chuka hoon. Veera ne mainu andar se tod ditta hai.

Baldev broke down. He fell on his knees. Tears started flowing out of his eyes.
He couldn't hold them back anymore, no matter how hard he tried. 


Nihal had never seen Baldev in such a vulnerable state. It pierced his heart seeing him like that. Nihal held Baldev and did his best to console him.


Nihal: Baldev tu iss Pind ka Sher hai. Tu himmat rakh upar wala sab theek kar de ga.


Baldev:
Ay pind hi to mera apna nai. Main ab kisi bhi aire ghaire ko apna dil todne nai doon ga! Nai todne doon ga! Suna tune Veera!! Suna!!


Nihal tried to calm him down. Baldev couldn't stop crying. Nihal was feeling very sad for Baldev so he hugged him.


Baldev:
Billa aur Jaggi ke ilawa mera iss dunya mein koi nai. Sirf wohi mere apne hain!


Nihal: Baldev main hoon na tere sath. Maine hamesha sach ka sath diya hai aur aaj bhi wahi kar raha hoon. Main har sachai ke mod pe tera sath doon ga, tera apna ban ke!


Baldev always had this special respect for Nihal but today his respect for him grew 10 times more. Baldev was left speechless he didn't know what to say. He was feeling a bit relieved after pouring his heart out to Nihal. It was like a heavy burden was taken off from Baldev's shoulders but that didn't mean Baldev had forgotten everything and was ready to move on. 


Nihal was so angry with Veera and he didn't even know how to put some sense into Ranvi's head.

 
Nihal: Veerakhdi yeh tune kya kar diya...




Yeh Ishq Nahi Aasaan. Bas Itna Samajh Lijiye

Ek Aag Ka Dariya Hai Aur Doob Ke Jana Hai.

Edited by MaaneetDeewangi - 9 years ago
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Posted: 9 years ago
Jaldi se Ballu ki feelings dikha,,tadap rahi hoon,sunne aur dekhneke liye...<3
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Posted: 9 years ago
Arre how did i miss this??😲
Hmmm...interesting intro😈
Now update soon😳
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Posted: 9 years ago
Loved the intro...waiting impatiently for the rest! Jaldi update😳
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Posted: 9 years ago
Where's the update?

Need something to do as there is no baldev today
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Posted: 9 years ago
When's the update coming yaar? I'm growing impatient...πŸ˜’
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Posted: 9 years ago
Pls continue soon.!!πŸ˜ƒ
Loved the intro.!!😳 ❀️
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Posted: 9 years ago
Finally updated the first part    πŸ˜†

Gosh it took so long to edit it on IF I hate to write/post stories on IF and the font was messing with me so much πŸ€¬

Anyways hope you like the first part, personally I got very emotional writing it πŸ˜­

Feel free to throw tomatoes and chappals πŸ˜›

Please press the like button if you want me to write the next part πŸ˜ˆ

Your valuable comments and feedback mean a lot to me so do comment πŸ˜³

Feel free to criticize and give your suggestions πŸ˜ƒ
Edited by MaaneetDeewangi - 9 years ago