I like the way you started chapter 2. Madhu's conversation with the kids about
their dad was nicely and sweetly done.
It was a good and kind way to tell them about their dad.
Yes I got the hint that the "only other person" that made
RK feel special before was Madhu.
The kids' confrontation was a good start for the father
& kids relationship. It perfectly
showed how things might end up being for the near future. And RK really can be a kid.
The above scene made their relationship (father &
children) stronger, gives RK a chance to step up as a dad, and shows that Madhu
is the odd one out right now. Also, as
right as Madhu is, there are times when you have to do what you have to
do. I cannot blame Ayush for wanting to
clear his name'
I did like how RK told the other kid's dad not to talk
rudely to Madhu. A small thing but it
shows it is not just the kids that RK cares for.
I also liked what you did during the confrontation
between the children. Instead of having RK act all high and mighty,
you gave him a clear picture of the life his children have had to live.
By RK having this thought, RK the character is moving
from a one dimensional jerk to a guy with many new emotions and thoughts. His character is getting built up again but
with some hope that he can reform.
"Your place is by my side" seriously RK is thinking like this! And he thinks Madhu will let him? OK that was my first reaction cause I do not
want Madhu to move too quickly.
But ...
But then I started thinking (I was thinking about your
story before bedtime, during breakfast, on the way home, in mosque (I know
shame on me!), etc)
Ok where was I?
Ok, I started thinking this is a story.
If Madhu does not make the move quickly then we are left with RK coming
back every day. Why delay the
story? And with that realization, I am good with Madhu saying yes.
I loved RK's dialogue and Madhu's thoughts. It was good and made sense.
Madhu's thoughts also reveal more about the past. And she owns up to her mistakes too.
The marriage idea took me by surprise but I did cheer
Madhu for saying no. That would be too
fast!
RK's epiphany: Brilliant writing! How it happens, makes sense. What RK is feeling and realizing, makes
sense. Too bad he could not realize it a
few years back, but that is the reality.
RK's continuous moments of realization are perfect. He is seeing the big picture and not just
what pertains to him. It is because of
these moments, that I can stop hating RK.
How can you hate a person who is realizing how his mistakes caused so
much pain while he was enjoying his life?
That was huge for me. RK admits
how well he has been living compared to what Madhu and his kids went through.
RK starts shedding the selfish and spoiled trait and
takes up some positive ones.
Added:
I went back to reread chapter 2 and the part where RK is
recollecting everything at night and it is still a fantastic part for me.
I am not sure why others are not seeing RK's
remorse. I thought that part was
fantastic actually.
I love how RK is thinking of his past mistakes and how
his life has been in these years compared to Madhu's. And him getting physically sick - of his
actions, of his mistakes - I thought that was brilliant.
I would have been more upset if RK would have been
passive and ignored all this.
Looking forward to more pls!
(my 3700 post!)
Edited by 4ever4love - 9 years ago
And let that be a warning for RK if he ever tries anything. 
