Originally posted by: anuramesh26Hi sanju, sorry dear had been away from the forum for a while. Got to read ur ff today. Read all at once. Great writing. Can i make a small suggesstion? It seems like ur typing in super lightning speed, there are some typo errors so kind of makes it a lil hard to read in flow. Pls take a lil time and check them out. Pls do continue. And have a doubt - do anirudh and baldev know each other or have i missed something? Btw anirudh character reminds of rajveer
part 4
baldev left an astonished veera at the road all alone.
veera:isse kya hogaya?(what happened to him)
she placed her hand on her cheeks where baldev placed a kiss upon and suddenly for the first time pind di sherni blushed...
she spoke in her mind which were wandering,"muje kya ho rahi hai?bahut ajeeba sa mehsoos ho raha hai dil mai.."
(what is happening to me?iam feeling something unusual in my heart)
she brushed her thoughts aside and left for her house.
baldev stormed into his room without even talking to anybody.
baldev felt anger towards himself for kissing veera like that in mid road.
"woh kya soch rahi hogi?mai bhi na..kitna bada kotha hun.lekin maine kyun kiya aise,mai apne man ko ruk nahi paya jab veera meri paas aayi us waqt pe".
(what might be she thinking of me now?oh..iam such a big idiot.but,why did i do like that,i was not able to stop myself when i came near veera)
baldev was disturbed and thought about what he said to her.
does he really have feelings for veera?
he thought all night .he was very confused but became sure that now veera was not just his friend alone...pind da sherni has become baldev's singhs first love and first girl to be kissed by the sher.
baldev spoke"dushmani mai bhi tuje sabak sikhaya bina nahi chadtha tha mai veera...aur ab pyaar mai tho kabhi nahi chadunga.pyaar ka sabak sikhaunga tuje yeh baldev singh kal hi"
(even in enemity i did not leave you without teaching a lesson...and now in love,i will never ever leave.baldev singh will teach you now..the lesson of love tomorrrow itself)
it was the next day and whole pritampura was awake and everybody became busy.
veera just came to her room after taking a bath and got a note in her room which said 'jaldi taiyaar ho ja,humem kahi jaana hai-baldev'
veera began to become nervous right after she saw the name baldev.she remembered last evening's incident.she turned to sit on her bed when she saw anirudh coming to her house.
veera quickly stood up and came to her hall way
'tu itthe?itni subah...kuch kaam hai kya?'(ur here? that to in the early morning...do u have some important work with me?)
anirudh spoke,"kyun,mai sirf kaam vaaste aa sakta hun apni veera se milne.."he strode next to veera right when a hand came and stopped him by holding his shoulder.
anirudh turned to see baldev at veera's house
baldev: tu yaham kya kar raha hai?
(what are you doing here)
anirudh:mai veera se milne aaya hun.lekin tuje kya kaam hai.woh bhi veera ke ghar pe.
(i came to meet veera.but what work do you have in veera's house)
veera saw their eyes burning which was filled with hatred for each other.
baldev:woh tuje jaanne ki zaroorat nahi hai.
anirudh went angry hearing baldev.
he was about to say more when baldev holded on to veera's hand and said 'maine bhola tha na,humem kahi jaana hai.tu taiyaar ho gayi na?'(i told you that we have to go somewhere.your ready right?)
veera nodded as baldev pulled veera out of the house when veera stopped and asked baldev for 1 minute to speak to anirudh
veera:mai tuje baad mai call karungi.ab muje jaana hai.kuch kaam hai..bye.
that was the last of it anirudh could take.he realised that something was not right.baldev's behaviour towards veera had changed .he vowed to make his second move successful and left.
veeba reached a forest when baldev stopped his jeep helped veera to get down.
baldev took her to the edge of a cliff and holded her hand.
veera:baldev,tu muje yaham kyom laya hai?tera dimaag tho teek haina?(why did you bring me here?your in your senses right?
but veera did not get the chance to speak when baldev stepped forward and roarded to the whole forest "i love you sherni...i love you my veera,mai tujse pyaar karne laga hun"
veera was awestruck by this sudden proposal from her childhood enemy.she too was attracted to him and developed feelings for him.but her ego wont accept this.
veera:kya?baldev tu kya bol raha hai?
mai tuje pyaar vyaar nahi karthi naahi kabhi karegi.
(what?what are you saying baldev?
i dont love you nor will i ever love you)
baldev's eyes began to water.he stepped backwards saying "jisse muje pyaar hua,agar muje woh mil nahi sakta tho muje jeena hi nahi hai"(if i dont get the person i fell in love with i dont want to live)
veera was not able to understand anything.deep inside she know she also has some thing for baldev...
but it was too late for veera to think as baldev made his decision quickly and stepped backwards...to the end of the cliff..and fell...
will baldev live?what will be anirudh's next plan?will baldev die ?
will veera realise her feelings for baldev?
stay tuned to get all these answers
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p.s. sorry for the late update.was not well.but this was the compensation.i maked it a long update than usual.so enjoy!
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