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Posted: 17 August 2014 at 10:05pm | IP Logged

Sorry friends my first attempt to write an OS as I am so bored and always had my own version of how the track should have been.  Advance apologies for any spelling or grammatical error.  This is just a fiction of my own imagination.  If you all like it will continue with my Part II - feedback and criticism is very much appreciated, thank you all.  


PART I
Message from Shivani, Raghu puzzled as he read the text "I'm here at the terrace as you told me to wait, please come fast".  "Me? When did I send this text" said to himself while searching the sent item. Oh my god someone sent this to Shivani I better hurry, said Raghu.

Up at the terrace, Shi is waiting and smiling to herself while Sumi is just right behind her back. Raghu reached up and was shocked to see Sumi's hand reaching to Shi's shoulder and in an instance Raghu shouted "Shivani... but it was too late Sumi pushed Shivani.

Meanwhile Latha, Bela and Vivek heard Rag shouting and ran up and was shaken to see Raghu battling with Sumi trying to reach Shivani who is hanging at the tip of the wall.  Vivek quickly run to help Raghu while Bela grabbed a saree and threw it to Shi. Latha, Bela and Maya helped Shi up while Raghu in the avatar of Goddess of Anger punched Sumi as Vivek got hold of her and Sumi fell hard on the floor.

He quickly run for Shi and hugged her and told her "in a minute in my heart stopped seeing you like that".  "Na Raghu, I am fine don't worry".  "No, no Shivani, if I am your Zindagi remember you are my jaan and I told you once and now you listen carefully I will die 100 times if anything ever happens to you".  "Raghu..."Shivani closes his mouth and they share an intense eye-lock (do dil bandhe playing at BG). 

There was a loud siren outside and Vivek said "police came must be babuji who called them to arrest this culprit".  Sumi turned all white and was shaking, begging to Shivani not to do this.  Shivani was to say something, just then Rag stopped her and told "Sumithra (irked looked on his face) you have been so cruel to my family, you stole my house and humiliated all of us, yet I forgave you.  But today you crossed all the limits and went on the verge of killing, killing my Shivani...no if I forgive you then justice will die and God to will not spare me".  By then, police came with Baburam and took Sumi. "I will came back Shivani, I will came back all of you ... pray ... pray to your God that he spares you all from me ha ha ha...Sumi laughed as she was taken out of the house.

Just then Bela noticed blood in Shivani's saree and shouts...babyji blood, hearing that Raghu got tensed and noticed blood was dripping from where Shivani was standing.  He scoped her and hurried to the room.  While the rest followed.  Shi have hurt her knee when she fell and was in pain as Maya and Vivek helped to clean and dress her wound while Raghu watches tensely.  "Raghu bhaiya you stay here with babayji na she looks terrified" said Maya as she left with Vivek.

Raghu walked to Shi as Shivani sat on the bed trying to smile.  "Why, why must all this happen to you Shivani? (Raghu sat next to Shivani, looking sadly at her wound) All because of me, kash if only I knew about Sumithra..." Raghu trembled as he spoke. "Na Raghu na, why are you blaming yourself.  It's okay whatever happened God has always been kind with us and never let anything bad to happen right"?  "Now you don't worry everything will be fine and let us stop thinking about the past but start planning the future".  Chalo Raghu it has been a long day, go, go and sleep now and tomorrow morning you go and see your boss for the job". Raghu nodded and started walking but stopped half way and turned to see Shi and walked back to her.  Shi looked straight up to Raghu lovingly, just then Raghu bent cupped her face and kissed her forehead and said..." take care ... good night" and left her stunned.

As Raghu was walking (Banjaara song playing at BG) he sees flash back of the time he spent with her in Mumbai, the sightseeing, dance etc.  He asked himself "is this Love, my god I know I had feelings for her but never knew that this was love".  "It is true what Bela told me.  I have loved Shivani for very long time, it's just the status difference between us has stopped me for realising this".  No wonder I became so possessive of her each time something or someone tries to harm her".

"Malikssa I know now why you put the 3 months condition because that's the amount of time one need to know and realise their love".  "Shivani was bold to accept the fact, but I...I thought it was just an infatuation of hers". "But in this 8 months, Shivani showed and thought me that richness is not laid in wealth but in true love. Once you have love you can conquer the world".  "Thank you Malikssa for the gift of Shivani.  As I promised you, I will take care of Shivani forever, as a husband and a true lover". 

"I...I...I mean I am in love with my babyji, my Shivani (Raghu giggles and shy's in that thought); but how am I going to say this to her?  What if she starts laughing...not that she doesn't know but, God all of them will sure tease me especially Bela and Ginni". "Never mind maybe I will call her for a dinner date since I messed it up the other time".  "But she cannot walk na...oh...oh...come on Raghu think, think something". 

"Raghu you love me very much don't you" Shivani talking to herself as she touches her forehead, the place where Raghu laid his kiss.  "When Raghu, when will you admit it, you know there is no more barrier in between us...the wall you have built has melted back in Mumbai".  Now it is just you and me my love...how long more do I have to wait Raghu, how long?  "I love you Raghu, I love you very much...Shivani whispers to herself as she sleeps.

"It's okay Shivani you have waited for this long, just wait for another week my love and you see how your Jaadugar is going to make magic in your life" (Raghu with his mischievous smile). As he closes his eyes to sleep, he whispers in the air "I love you Shivani, I love you very much"!



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Posted: 17 August 2014 at 11:33pm | IP Logged
OMGGG wht a romntic OS excellent plss plsss contii wid 2nd part m waiting ;)

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Posted: 18 August 2014 at 1:10am | IP Logged
aww thank you very much dear. I have already started Part II.  will post it by tomorrow yaar.
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Posted: 18 August 2014 at 1:41am | IP Logged
wow agnes good haa ...very well written Clap and waiting for next part of os.Embarrassed

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Posted: 18 August 2014 at 8:20am | IP Logged
agnes, i love love it...suberb write up. waiting for next part...Smile

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Posted: 18 August 2014 at 8:38am | IP Logged
Wow..awesome OS Agnes!!!!Thumbs Up
Very well written!!!Clap
Please continue soon!!!Embarrassed

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Posted: 18 August 2014 at 9:04am | IP Logged
Really u all liked it...omg thank you very my dearie friends.Tongue
I hv jz completed Part 2 and wl post it tomorrow yaar. 

Ps. I hv added a little spice in part 2 and hope u all don't mind ya.Embarrassed
Muaks love u all.

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Posted: 18 August 2014 at 2:38pm | IP Logged
Awesome OS dear , plss plsss continue as I really want to see how Raghu confesses to Shivani now that he realised his love for her EmbarrassedEmbarrassed ..

Loved the part where Raghu punched Sumi and then she is sent to jail for murder attempt .. this is what should hv been shown in the show as well Thumbs Up

U got to continue this now so that we know how the confession finally happened Embarrassed

I always wanted to see Raghu's self-talk when he realises he is in love but we never got it in the show .. sighh Cry .. but now via your OS I can imagine the whole scenario of Raghu's self-realisation , giggling , blushing and all that Day DreamingDay Dreaming

Wonderful Write up dear ClapClapClapClap

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