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One Shot - The Final Call (Page 2)

ShonaSparkzz Senior Member

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Posted: 03 July 2014 at 9:57am | IP Logged
I am not very keen on calling it a beautiful os. Because both of us know it isn't. 
Sometimes words leave great impact and I'm proud to give you this complement that your words did.
Your description of the little boys interpretation for the scenario was so apt. He was scared but oblivious of the end this situation may lead to. Innocence is such a bliss. 
I must say the very course of your story made me skip a beat. I knew how it would end and yet I refused to believe and wished for a miracle so did you until the end and it showed in your writing. But well our wishes to live in delusion seizes the moment reality makes us face the harsh truth of life. How we wish this was all a story but yet be disappointed every time.  The best part well to be truthful the worst but still since I'm commenting on your writing skills I want to give you an applause for having faced reality and for not amending the story line in order to achieving a miraculous happily ever after ending. To write a death is as painful because you live the moment with your character. All in all this is a next step to your writing.  

Because few drops of water tell more than words and this is what my eyes said...

Edited by ShonaSparkzz - 03 July 2014 at 11:59am

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-shenz- IF-Sizzlerz

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Posted: 03 July 2014 at 10:11am | IP Logged
Aditi... what was this.. I mean I agree great minds do take up words and plot them up.. write a beautiful story and make hearts scream for the write up..
But this one was well painfully portrayed.. And I was lost in the depth of its words..

Amazingly portrayed.

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-PyaariBhootni- IF-Addictz

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Posted: 03 July 2014 at 9:44pm | IP Logged
so sadCry
poor boyCry
well-written aditiHug

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vinu127 IF-Rockerz

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Posted: 04 July 2014 at 1:23am | IP Logged
oh my god aditi!
this was so painful!
i read this yesterday but could reply coz i was crying!
personally i hate tragedies! and this one!!!!
i have no strength to type now!
i'm gonna cry again i fear
so sorry about being late and not replying properly

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tinatartari IF-Rockerz

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Posted: 04 July 2014 at 3:13am | IP Logged
So sad bt reality..
awesome written

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clockworknerd IF-Dazzler

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Posted: 05 July 2014 at 2:02am | IP Logged
Res res res res   LOL
Wow! Do you have any idea how good you are at penning down certain feelings and emotions? Big smileOmg..you described it so well Star And i love sad stories, so this one won my heart Heart 

Keep writing more sad stories. I'm probably the only person who wants to read sad stories Tongue But seriously you made me feel the pain. Above all this it was realistic, so i loved it moree Embarrassed 

Edited by -ZaYalicious- - 05 July 2014 at 2:38am

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anjoriii IF-Rockerz

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Posted: 06 July 2014 at 4:53am | IP Logged
heart touching but painful... :'( 

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Flame.Of.Rose IF-Sizzlerz

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Posted: 09 July 2014 at 7:44am | IP Logged
Originally posted by exhalelove.

You are a brilliant writer!
Who are you?Smile

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