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Flame.Of.Rose

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Posted: 24 May 2014 at 12:41am | IP Logged

"The moment you think that you have controlled your life, life plays its turn and proves you wrong."

- Aditi Agrawal ( Me)

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Laughing along, she wiped her tears of glee. It's been a while since she laughed like that.

 

Ring. Ring. Ring.

 

She picked up the call on her cell phone thinking as to who the person might be, only to have colour drained off her face. He called again, after months, to ruin her hard earned smile. To accuse her of wronging her best friend. Of cheating her. Of being a fool to let her go. Of being an idiot to not converse with her. Of being blind to not realize her worth. He blamed her of being the wrong one, being the one to hurt the other comrade. She kept down the phone, somehow controlling her tears, threatening to cascade down, to swallow the lump forming, big enough to suffocate her.

 

He didn't think about her once. He didn't see things from her tangent. He forgot that she too was a human after all. Wouldn't it be fair enough to consider her feelings in this too? Why couldn't people realize that she wasn't at fault here? Why is it that the one mourning is considered as the sufferer rather than the one with calm composure? She wasn't the one of those to let the world see her vulnerable side. She couldn't afford people getting hold of her weakness. She had been hurt too, very badly at that. She felt cheated, used, abused - both emotionally and mentally. She found it hard to let the feeling of being unimportant to the one meaning world to you, sink in her system. She too had those sleepless nights of crying her heart out in deafening silence of darkness, of hollowness. She too felt her heart shatter into pieces seeing the bond she treasured the most, slipping away like sand in fist. She too felt alone even in the crowd.

 

The feeling of drowning down in the sea despite of being a swimmer engulfed her. Hollowness finally managed to control her emotions. Numbness was all that remained with her. She thought that she, now, had control over her emotions for she felt none. She felt confident enough to be happy again. She thought she had let bygones be bygones only to discover that she still was being controlled - by her.


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Hola people! This is my second OS  in the forum, hopefully doesn't deserve rotten eggs and tomatoesLOL I am probably gonna continue updating at least till June.  So you all have to bear with me until thenLOL


P.S. Loved it, Liked it, Hated it? Do drop in your reviews and let me know what you think about it.Smile


P.P.S. For Pms in future please buddy me.


PLEASE DO NOT COPY UPDATES TO OTHER SITES, THIS UPDATE IS MEANT EXCLUSIVELY FOR INDIA FORUMS MEMBERS

Edited by Flame.Of.Rose - 26 May 2014 at 7:13am

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Posted: 24 May 2014 at 1:07am | IP Logged
Res :3
Oh, I didn't unres. LOL


I actually even read it only now. LOL It is brilliant maasi, it really is. The emotions are expressed beautifully. And the girl, reminds me of myself to some extent. Also, I love how you've added a tinge of reality, how the society always favors the one who seems broken. But this was amazing maasi. You have a way with words. Humari family mein sab itna accha likthe hai, Naani, you, Adii, Maa, Maasis, Bhabhi, cousins, sab ke sab. LOL Yahan tak ke step mom aur pati bhi LOL Seriously, talented family hai xD
But seriously, I loved it <3 And I love you maasii :')

Love,
your favorite niece Hug


Edited by ARandKJFan - 15 June 2014 at 7:44am

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Posted: 24 May 2014 at 3:01am | IP Logged
nd this was beautiful adi...
i cant believe u r saying u lost the touch..when u havent...
short yet long meaning...deep painful bt serene..
loved it

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Posted: 24 May 2014 at 3:46am | IP Logged
Originally posted by akankshaArsha

nd this was beautiful adi...
i cant believe u r saying u lost the touch..when u havent...
short yet long meaning...deep painful bt serene..
loved it

Thanks Akku! Girl, guess what? I have actually lost my touch. It isn't how I used to write back when I updated few OSes regularly. Need to put on few more works to get back at writing.LOL

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Posted: 24 May 2014 at 4:05am | IP Logged
Originally posted by Flame.Of.Rose

Originally posted by akankshaArsha

nd this was beautiful adi...
i cant believe u r saying u lost the touch..when u havent...
short yet long meaning...deep painful bt serene..
loved it


<font face="Georgia, Times New Roman, Times, serif" color="#333333">Thanks Akku! Girl, guess what? I have actually lost my touch. It isn't how I used to write back when I updated few OSes regularly. Need to put on few more works to get back at writing.LOL</font>

that u hv to do for sure..coz u write really beautiful...buck up nd drop few more...

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Posted: 24 May 2014 at 4:11am | IP Logged
Originally posted by akankshaArsha

Originally posted by Flame.Of.Rose

Originally posted by akankshaArsha

nd this was beautiful adi...
i cant believe u r saying u lost the touch..when u havent...
short yet long meaning...deep painful bt serene..
loved it


<font face="Georgia, Times New Roman, Times, serif" color="#333333">Thanks Akku! Girl, guess what? I have actually lost my touch. It isn't how I used to write back when I updated few OSes regularly. Need to put on few more works to get back at writing.LOL</font>

that u hv to do for sure..coz u write really beautiful...buck up nd drop few more...

Don't go on day dreaming about hot mess from me. I am very acchi bacchi who doesn't write mature stuffs. ROFL Mai tragedy queen hoon. And where are your comments on my other works?Angry

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Posted: 24 May 2014 at 5:15am | IP Logged

I really enjoyed.. It was short but beautiful.
Really well written.
Superb emotions. You wrote it really well in just 2 paras. Clap
Thanks for the PM


Edited by -spongy- - 24 May 2014 at 5:23am

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Posted: 24 May 2014 at 8:24am | IP Logged
it is superb aditi..

short hai.. but it is awsome..

loved the way you have potrayed the emotions..



with love 
moumita

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