Satam Sir's Birthday Poetry Contest- Result on Pg 4

Posted: 10 years ago





Thanks All for the entries,it was lovelyπŸ˜›

Entry 1:

ACP Pradyuman-The Multifaceted


Though a stony fellow he may seem,
So profound is his love for the team.
A team, born and nurtured to glory.
There is not an end to his story.

True and pure at heart, still
A deep seated guilt, it does kill
Yet the place of a son by two men fulfilled 
Making his pain purely distilled.

The angry man makes the miscreants quiver
Eyes blazing with fire making even his team shiver
Not so easy to calm him down though,
A best choice of Him, for this post to bestow.

Form of an adult, yet sometimes the heart of a child.
Seeing one, his rage reduced to one so mild.
A man so strong yet tender,
Everyone including his fans, to him, they surrender.

A man born to live as a model cop so inspiring
And an exemplary human being so admiring,
With heart, purer than the purest gold,
ACP Pradyuman is a role model. So behold!



Entry 2:


ACP the multifaceted

A book gets fatter when you read it several times

Diversity becomes a crown that freezes lifetimes

Gardner was seen with binoculars beside Acp's fence

Just then he gave a theory; Emotional Intelligence

 

In an about face he alters his mental makeup

Wild cat howls but ends up in a hang-up

 Brochures can be printed on his various notions

Shakespeare breaks down writing quarter portions

 

Acp Pradhyuman's medley encompasses unlike attitudes

Love, Acrimony, bound & determined knows their schedules!!!

God knows his brain chemistry that comprises chemical x

It reacts with philosophy and ends with bliss/complex

 

His affiliation with his officers bears out the word 'Love''

'Acrimony'' unveils when offenders offence over and above

''Bound & Determined''; that's what he is literally christened

My Dual core with duplet processors i.e Tropical and softened


Entry 3


ACP, The Multifaceted

 

A BOSS comes ahead, taking the Charge at the moment

Making alert His Sub Ordinates as He doesn't like any Fault in that

He investigates every Detail with Counter Checks and Verification

He interrogates the Case with Multiple Queries which moved Him in Right direction

He loves to dig out the Minute Clue which help to catch the Culprit

He always tried to put every Criminal behind Bar and make Fearless environment.!



After the Success He gives all Credit to His Officers Hardwork

Praise them with Heart and encourage them with Passion and Luck

He gives Lesson of Duty with Determination and Dedication

He is the Example for Supportive COLLEAGUE either coming out from any Difficult Situation

He always Trust on them and shares His Experience and Expertise

He gives them Courage to Fight with Evil till the end of Criminal activities.!

 


At last He enjoying with exchanging laughing and Spent some Casual time

His Presence Shines the Surrounding, as nobody feels any Hard signs   

He gave Youngers Comfortability with arranging Lunches and Dinners

While pulling leg of Some Specific who are calling His Mates and Friendly Sitters

He turned to be a Protecting Sheild or a FRIENDLY Figure in seconds

He covers them in Bad and wraps them in His Iron Hands.!

 


Now He come back and laid over His Soft Bed

Some tears escaped from His Eyes when remember a Painful Dead

A Shell of Bullet still Enclosed Him inside that Regret

He still feels the Teary Drops while His Ears echoing DAD

He is trying to Sooth His Heart but still it Crying a lot

How does a FATHER Forgets that lonely Dark Night and Pinching Thought.!

 


The Sun rose from East and Vanish the Horriable Darkest Hours

He changed His Attire, Tone and Position and bring Back in Power

Every Climate of Weather or changing in Cycle of Solar and Lunar

 Cant find any change the Man spending through 17 years from Head to a Father

       He is a Perfect Head, Teammate, Buddy, Dad, Irrespective of any Doubt

He is none other than Our Deary character ACP PRADYUMAN, any Doubt...!!!


Entry 4:


Some people shed tears that bear no effect,

But when he sheds it , all does it affect.

His anger, silent, powerful, and just

Like the golden nail that never did rust

Beneath the hard steely exterior does a velvet heart rest

That is sensitive to injustice and crime , but loves all the fest

To people around a father , protector indeed precious

But to those villians he stands stable and ferocious

His heart as fatherly to the duo , stern sometimes,yet yielding

From every test he passes them instead of shielding

And yet a fatherly love burns to a lost soul

Maybe now to the game he would have cried foul

But he never steps back , and is reserved for the world

But yet of the character a lot to be unfurled

More to be unveiled of the golden Statuette

And only things I have to say- Perfect, Respect and Introspect

Edited by nsapo - 10 years ago
Posted: 10 years ago
Voting is not choosing but marking because they are less entries.Mark each entry on 5 and post it in the voting entry thread and if possible post your reviews :) Edited by nsapo - 10 years ago
Posted: 10 years ago
I'm not that good at reviews for poems so I'll post my ratings instead. Hopefully those will tell you what I thought of the poems.

Poem 1 - 5
Poem 2 - 4.5
Poem 3 - 5
Poem 4 - 4

Please don't feel bad writers.
Posted: 10 years ago
All poems are really good. Surprised that there's nothing in Hindi.


Marks..
1. 4.5/5
2. 4.2/5
3. 4.9/5
4. 4.2/5.



They are that close.
Posted: 10 years ago
All the poems are nice.Well written.  πŸ‘ β­οΈ

Marks:
Poem 1- 5/5
Poem 2- 4.5/5
Poem 3- 5/5
Poem 4- 4.8/5

Edited by beena.thomas - 10 years ago
Posted: 10 years ago
I m very poor in making poems,can't think even two lines.πŸ˜”
Anyway,i am really impressed by all the writers for making such a beautiful poems.πŸ˜›

Marks.
1. 4.5/5
2. 4.5/5
3. 5/5
4. 4.5/5.
I liked poem 3 very muchπŸ˜›
Posted: 10 years ago
NICE!

Don't feel bad writers if you think your poem deserve more!


1.  5/5

2. 3.5/5
3. 5/5
4. 4/5

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Posted: 10 years ago
Lovely poemsπŸ‘
Good job poets!πŸ˜ƒ
1-4.5
2-4
3-4
4-4.5
Dont feel bad writers😊
Posted: 10 years ago
Amazing poems everyone.πŸ‘
My reviews: 

Entry 1: A very simple and nice poem with the meaning reaching everyone. But somewhere I felt that you just wanted to portray some qualities when the Man has so much admirable principles. Anyway great job! πŸ˜ƒπŸ‘

4.4/5

Entry 2: A very mature poem but at some places few people are bound to get stuck. You have written awesome poems before. Nevertheless, Your metaphors were really cool though.πŸ˜ƒ Great job!πŸ‘

4.4/5

Entry 3: That was cool dude. I really liked the way you expressed the poem. In other words, the poem was meticulously written and the flow was maintained. Loved the way you expressed everything.πŸ˜ƒ Great job!πŸ‘


But here and there you failed to maintain the tenses and the agreements with the subject. Make sure you use the correct number of the verb. Most importantly capital letters. They can't be used anywhere you like. Only exceptional situations and certain things carry capital letters.
Hope you take this in the right spirit.😊

4.6/5

Entry 4: A short sweet poem with immense flow. Your brevity and the metaphors are excellent πŸ‘. Great job πŸ˜ƒ

4.5/5


I hope that all of you writers take my reviews in the right spirit. I didn't read the poems with the sole aim of critisicing. I'm not an expert but I still can give my reviews according to what my heart feels. All these lines are a brain child of your imagination. So an applause to that. I didn't mean to hurt anyone with the reviews. 

All the best to everyone. May the most deserving one win πŸ˜ƒ


Edited by Reshma. - 10 years ago
Posted: 10 years ago
wonderful poems !!! πŸ‘

Entry 1 - 4.5
Entry 2 - 4
Entry 3 - 5
Entry 4 - 4

All the best participants πŸ‘πŸΌ

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