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oshinchaudhary

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Posted: 08 April 2014 at 1:13am | IP Logged
HI GUYS I HV BEEN ON IF FOR SMTYM NW N READ MANY STORYS N NW I MYSELF IS TRYNG MY HAND IN WRITTING ...I M NT A WRITTER N THIS IS D FIRST TYM M WRITTING A STORY SO PLZ BEAR WID ME N LET ME KNW DAT IF I SHOULD CONTINUE IT OR NOT..
               PROLOUGE
What will u do when u come to kn dat d guy u love more then ur life never loved u??? That he played with ur heart ...that he betrayed u??? will u be abl to forgive him ever or will u make him regrate his deed?? Join this journey of luv, trust , frndship, hatered, revenge n BETRAYEL...

so , wat u think should i write it or stop it Ouch???? i'm waiting for ur commentsEmbarrassed

INDEX

PROLOUGE - page 
CHARACTER SKETCH - page 1
CHAPTER 1 - page 1
CHAPTER 2 - page 4
CHAPTER 3 - page 7
CHAPTER 4 - page 11
CHAPTER 5 - page 14
CHAPTER 6 - page 18
CHAPTER 7 - page 26
CHAPTER 8 - page 33
CHAPTER 9 - page 37
CHAPTER 10 - page 47
CHAPTER 11-15 - page 51
CHAPTER 16 - page 56
CHAPTER 17 - page 80
CHAPTER 18 - page 93
CHAPTER 19 - page 109




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nice concept 
please start

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Continue soon and Pm me plzz Wink
aal d besht! LOL

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Posted: 08 April 2014 at 1:42am | IP Logged
Originally posted by rima4ever

nice concept 
please start
thnk u i will post chapter soon

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Posted: 08 April 2014 at 1:46am | IP Logged
Awesome concept dear...
U should definitely give it a try...
Well may i know your name... ???ErmmLOL

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CHARACTER SKETCH

JALAL:  19 yrs old handsome n rich guy main lead of aur story. he doesnt believe in luv for him its a waste of tym bt possesive n caring abt him closeones, wnt to own everythng which cums his way for him winning is everythng  its his passion cumng 2 is nt n option for him...
heartthrob of collage wid a secret deep inside his heart...


hamida banu: jalal's mom n only family (same as serial)

JODHA: 19 yrs old  carefree, beautiful main lead of our story live lyf at her own rules do not like to lie bt somtym she hs to lie her dream is her passion n cn do anythng for her dream n her loved ones

mr sameer ahuja:  jodha's uncle

mrs usha ahuja:  jodha's aunt n she hates her


ruqu;  jalal's close frnd , rich ,beautiful n hv a secret crush on jalal

salima:  jalals cousin sis n jodha's bst frnd

moti; simple middle class girl frnd of  jodha 

abdul   jalal's bst frnd he's d only person who cn handle jalal n knws everythng abt him n likes jodha

maan singh; frnd of jalal

javeda: bst frnd of ruqu
 



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Posted: 08 April 2014 at 6:27am | IP Logged
Originally posted by PupCat

Continue soon and Pm me plzz Wink
aal d besht! LOL
thnk u 

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chapter 1
she was all shattered  standing der all numb she jst cnt believe wat she heard!
"no...no..no u cnt do this to me...t..tum..tum mazak kar rhe ho na jalal" she asked him stammmering tears were constantly flowing down her cheeks.." he laughed wickedly n said" mazak...ha ha ha mazak!! haan jodha yeh sab ek mazak hi toh hai hamara relation mera tumse pyaar karna yeh sab ek mazak hi tha" she ws hell shocked n asked him "no jalal don..dont say dat i..i..knw dat u luv me i hv seen it  in ur eyes( nw she cupped his face wid her hand) y r u doing dis to me jalal" she started crying loudly . he freed his face from her grip n phushed her " luv?? wat luv? ohh u mean jo humare beech  mein ha..ha..ha..ha tumhe..tumhe laga ki mein TUMSE pyaar karunga ?? jalaluddin mohammad tumse se pyaar kareya?? kitni bewakoof ho tum( he held her tightly from her shoulder so dat it pains) " jalal u r hurting me" she cried
jalal " tum ladkiya kitni bewakoof hoti ho meine pyaar se baat kya ki tumhe laga ki mein JALAL tumse pyaar karne laga hun?? meine kabhi tumse pyaar nhi kiya jodha mein infact i nvr luved u it ws jst a game i wnted to show u dat jalal gets watever he wnts" n he pushes jodha so hard dat she hit d wall n her head start bleeding..
she cry loudly in pain"ahhh...(sob...snif...sob) den he turns n start moving out of d room whn he feels a soft hand on hiss wrist he turns n see dat jodha is holding his wrist  she says" plz jalal dont dont do dis wid me...dont..(sob..snif) leave me alon...i cnt live widout u jalal...cries...i luv u jalal i luv..!! " he shout" i dont care wat u feel n wat u think!" saying dis he releases his wrist frm her hand rudely n moves out!! leaving jodha all alone hurt n shattered
she ws nt able to stand anymore n fall wid a cry n she shouts loudly as if wnted her all pain to get over"JALAL!!!! ahhh..."!!
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Jalals POV

jalal moves out of d building leaving his jodha all alone der.
"wait a min...did I jst said MY jodha?? no she means nthng to me...NOTHING!!" he shouts n bangs on his car loudly
aftr some tym he gets in his car n starts driving wid high speed...thinking  jst abt one thing JODHA !!! her tears ...were tearing him apart...her beautiful doe shaped eyes in wch he cn clearly see the pain wch he himself hv given her...his heart broke in million of pieces he wnted wipe her tears take all her pain away bt he cnt no he wont becoz she deserve all dis pain n tears...
suddenly he stops his car..n cums out of it goes to d side of road tear were flowing down his eye he tightly hold his hair n shout wid all his pain n anger " WHY!!! WHY!!!"n sits wid a thud again says "why jodha why did u do dis?" bt this tym it was jst a whisper as he ws cryng vry badly " if u hv nt done dat sin den we would hv been together today happy n i wouldnt hv to do dis jodha!!!"n he cries more...

precap:- flashback

so hwz dis guys??? i knw i suck at it so plz baacha samjh ke maaf kar denaLOL... n let me knw if i should continue or ntOuch...
n if u like it den plz hit like n commentSmile
n if u think i cn improve it den plz do let me know ur suggestions r welcum n criticism also... thnk u for bearing this wid me!!!


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