I'm here :D
First of all Mais, I love the concept. Though I was never a typical RaHi fan, I loved their story as much as I loved KiSha's. It was heartbreaking to see the story turn into something else altogether so thank you for writing this!
Now, onto the story.
Such a simple beginning and it was pure RaHi! One thing I've always admired in you Mais is how you capture the basic essence of the character so effortlessly! The way only Moti can understand Nonu and also how only she can provide to him the comfort he requires is so heart-touching <3 Also, I love how you've shown Panchi's childishness the way it is supposed to be. It's not immature as many people tend to make it.
Then came Ranveer's thoughts. This is all I hoped he would be in S2. The 'man' who would give a tough fight to KD. Your spin on it is exactly what I hoped it would be. This was the Ranveer I came to love in S1, the one who gave a tough fight to who he hates without even touching him.
"Hum ne apni life mein bohat galtiyan ki hain, kya kya repeat nahin kar paoge?"- This line my friend, is perfect. Panchii :') Mature, understanding Panchi. The way she was meant to be as a fully developed character. She is right, mistakes are to be learned from but there comes a point when we stop learning because it's just too much to take in.
Finally, the beginning of the break. I guess they were far too broken by then. Their bond did change a lot didn't it.
Smooth, simply smooth transition. Also, YOU GAVE PANSH <33 And the dialogues are so RV :O I love how you prove me right har baar The exact point Panchi stopped reacting is so precise. 'Like everyone else'- She's not everyone else, she is Panchi, her Nonu's moti. This piece is so unique because Panchi doesn't dance to his tunes and doesn't forgive as easily.
The final two paras left me speechless. There's literally nothing I can say. It's so damn perfect Mais.
Hope you're satisfied with the comment! :)
I'll be reading Chap 3 later :D
~You Know Who ;)
Edited by ARandKJFan - 06 April 2014 at 9:28am