**RaBir FF**:I love you!!Chapter 9 Updated - Page 4

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Posted: 9 years ago

Originally posted by: parmarA

@Cuteangel i had wiull start to read this ff from first time.So will read it one by one and give review for sure.

Thank you so much dear

No prob alka
Take time...
Am so glad tht u liked it 
Thank u so much
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Posted: 9 years ago
Cast:
Your introduction of Kabir Rachana and Chhaya and Mayank is too cute and totally superb.

The character of Rachana is cute and she is like Zansi ki Rani.But Kabir is too rash [in goood way] and he is too dashing too.

At last Rachana aur Kabir ka aamna saamna.

Kuchh tum pathar fenko kuchh hum phenke.[just joke part]
 Cute start cute angelasya
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Posted: 9 years ago
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Originally posted by: parmarA

Cast:

Your introduction of Kabir Rachana and Chhaya and Mayank is too cute and totally superb.

The character of Rachana is cute and she is like Zansi ki Rani.But Kabir is too rash [in goood way] and he is too dashing too.

At last Rachana aur Kabir ka aamna saamna.

Kuchh tum pathar fenko kuchh hum phenke.[just joke part]
 Cute start cute angelasya

Thank u so much alka...
Am so happy tht u liked it😃
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Posted: 9 years ago
Het cutie yhanks forthe pm . I dont know how i didnt read this maybe bcause i joined late but read and love the latest part and it was awesome specially raj omg i am imagining who can play his role .its lovely and ya give me tym and i will definitely read all and i am sure it will all be very good 😳
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Posted: 9 years ago
Cutie.Read your chap 2 and and 3rd part.
What an update yaar.Sorry if i merge two parts.

I really enjoyed it.Mayank apne dosto ko ghar le aaya aur fir yeh sab shaitano ki toli mil gai.

Kabir in Rachana's room.And Golmaal returns.Confusionn creates.

But I think Kabir started liking her.And Raj notices that too.

Haldi ceremony beautifully written.You described their dress up very beautifully.

Haldi held and girls with their masti mood.Rachana unintentionally aplied Haldi on Kabir's chik.Loved that part.

So they all are ready for party.

Waiting for next in party.

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Posted: 9 years ago

Originally posted by: mkakkar93

Het cutie yhanks forthe pm . I dont know how i didnt read this maybe bcause i joined late but read and love the latest part and it was awesome specially raj omg i am imagining who can play his role .its lovely and ya give me tym and i will definitely read all and i am sure it will all be very good 😳

Thank u so much 4 liking it...
It means a lot 4 me...
N no problem mehek take your time😳
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Posted: 9 years ago

Originally posted by: parmarA

Cutie.Read your chap 2 and and 3rd part.

What an update yaar.Sorry if i merge two parts.

I really enjoyed it.Mayank apne dosto ko ghar le aaya aur fir yeh sab shaitano ki toli mil gai.

Kabir in Rachana's room.And Golmaal returns.Confusionn creates.

But I think Kabir started liking her.And Raj notices that too.

Haldi ceremony beautifully written.You described their dress up very beautifully.

Haldi held and girls with their masti mood.Rachana unintentionally aplied Haldi on Kabir's chik.Loved that part.

So they all are ready for party.

Waiting for next in party.

Thank u so much alka...
Thanks 4 noticing evrything
Yeah that room part golmaal...stuff ws just gud thanks 4 noticing that part😃
N no problem...
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Posted: 9 years ago
@cuteangelasya
This is for your ff.


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Posted: 9 years ago

Originally posted by: parmarA

@cuteangelasya

This is for your ff.


Oh my gosh!!!!
This is too cute...thanks a lot😳
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Posted: 9 years ago
***Chapter 8***

Mayan r in the passage.
Forwarding to kabir's room.Raj notices them.
Raj(to himself):god! why is mayank n gunjan coming at the wrong time?before they come n end kabir's love story before it starts need to do something.
Raj screams out:Happy Holi!!!! throwing the color up.

Rabir come out of their eyelock coz of that.kabir puts rachna down.As she is on the earth,Mayan enters.
Mayank:so u all r here n u both u aren't ready yet kabir?
Gunjan:wht were u both doing here? hun rachna?
Rachna:am...m...came to wake them up.
Chaya:ya...(Giggling alone)
Rachna n chaya leave the room n so does Mayan.The two(kabir n raj) gets ready n r leaving from the room.
Kabir:thanks man.
Raj:thanks?thanks 4 wht?
Kabir:by alerting me about mayank coming in the room.
Raj:I had to do that otherwise u would have beaten me(both laugh out)
Kabir: But need to do something otherwise I won't be able to say anything to rachna
Raj: You're right,if mayank n gunjan will keep on coming in between then...need to think of something.
Kabir:mmm...I have an idea.See here it is.
Kabir and Raj discuss something.
Kabir:you got.
Raj:Yes I've got 
Kabir: n ya remember...
Raj:ya I know don't worry



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They all r in the neighboors place.They all r welcomed by the lady. the lady applies color to all of them. they r busy applying color on each other n having fun.
The sky is full of colours.Water colour been splased around.The whole enviroment looks colourful n cheerful.
Rachna,Gunjan and chaya are standing by the side.Raj n mayank come there.
A couple goes on stage n they dance on "Balam pichkari".
As they are dancing meanwhile...
Raj comes with a tray of bhang n offers mayank n gunjan but they refuse.He persuades them n they drink it.Raj gets happy.
Gunjan offers chaya.She also drinks it.The duo(gunjan n chaya) offer rachna.
Rachna:no I don't want to have it.
Gunjan:No u have to drink this.
Raj(to himself):oh no...rachna shouldn't have the bhang.(Out):no 
Mayan:hunn...
Raj:I mean ya, u should also have it rachna.Take
He goes near rachna with the glass and purposely drops it.While dropping little spills on rachna.
Raj:Am so sorry rachna I've spoilt your dress...am very sorry.
Rachna:Its ok...I'll change  ome.
Racjna goes to change her clothes.
Raj also leaves from there.


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Raj goes to kabir:
Raj:its done kabir.Just the way we planned.
Kabir:Great! did rachna...
Raj:no she didn't drink.. don't worry. Now no problem.
Kabir:Thanks man.
Raj:n ya, just the way u told everything is done, remember Hotel Paradise.
Kabir:Ok thanks man I just hope everything goes fine.
Raj:Just chill man its not a meeting...you are gonna confess your love 
Kabir: Ya...thanks a lot raj.you are such a true friend, u doing so much for me.
Kabir n raj hug.
Raj:anyways, its my benefit also.
Kabir:your benefit? I didn't get u
Raj:see if rachna comes in your life, imean if she becomes my bhabhi then atleat I wouldn't have to tolerate u anymore(winks at kabir)
Kabir:Raj tu bhi na...


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Rachna changes her clothes.She also washes her face hence all the colour applied on her face is gone.

Gunjan n mayank(who r drunk) are talking. during this gunjan gets upset with mayank n walks away from him.Mayank doesn't knw hw to please her.Kabir comes by mayank.Gunjan n rachna are walking away from the boys.Kabir signals mayank n they start.
Music is played.Kabir n Mayank start to dance.
The song is "tune mari entriyan"
As they start their dance n according to the first lyrics the point toward the girls.
The girls turn around hearing the song facing the boys.
Kabir pulls rachna towards him n so does mayank to gunjan.
Gunjan cheers up n the four dance enjoyingly.

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After  the dance gunjan n chaya come to rachna with bhang.
Gunjan:Rachna take now u can drink...take.
Rachna:no gunjan I don't want to have.
Chaya:why?
Gunjan:rachna plz plz...its great to drink. when u will drink this u will feel that the whole world igoing round.
Rachna:no plz gunjan.
Chaya:ok...but u knw gunjan y rachna is not drinking 
Gunjan:y
Chaya:bcoz she is scared that she might tell smething that se doesn't want to tell.Right rachna?
Rachna:ummm...mmm no that's not true.
Gunjan:ok then drink this.
Gunjan n chaya force rachna to drink it.She drinks 2-3 glasses.She gets completely drunk.


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Rachna is completely drunk.She goes by kabir.
Rachna:hello mr.kabir(remember she is in drunk state)
Kabir:(turns to face her)rachna..
Rachna:no not mr.kabir mr.khadoos,akdo no.1
Kabir:hunn
Rachna:u knw kabir when u r quiet,u are too cute.
Kabir:why u saying me akdo?really u like me remaing quiet?
Rachna:yes because whenever u start talking u always shout me n fight with me.
Kabir:ohh
Rachna:u know am very sweet n adorable...
Kabir:really?
Rachna:am not praising myself.Everyone says that that's why no-one shouts me... but u r the first person...
Kabir:rachna... R u ok? I mean wht did u drink or eat?
Rachna:see again u started..shhh (puts her finger on kabir's lips)shhh let me talk.
u knw wht?i have so many complaints with you...they r too much to list so u stay uiet.
she then takes her finger off.
kabir:wht complaints...ok say
rachna:why r u always in bad mood...u rarely smile,
Kabir listening this starts smiling.
Rachna sees him smiling n admires him.
Rachna:see u look u sweet n again...u want everything perfect.
Kabir is busy admiring her.
Rachna:You want everything clean,clear n tidy...sometimes its fun to be dirty.
Kabir:but one should stay clean.
Rachna:ok n time! oh my god!!! time...u want everything to happen accordingly.
On this time this this time this...sometimes one should get suprizes...
Kabir:okkk now u will listen to me.I listend to u now yur turn.Wait here understand.
Kabir starts to go.
Rachna holds his hand.:where are u going? Don't leave me.
Kabir is just speechless to what he heard.
He comes to his senses.
Kabir:am going to get u lemonade, which will remove your booze.stay right here n don't eat anything sweet ok
Rachna:ok..



Precap:kabir rubbs his cheeks against rachna's cheeks , rachna is blusing n someone clicks their pic.

Sorry everyone 4 the late update😭