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Posted: 28 January 2014 at 8:43am | IP Logged

Part O

 

She was so close to him...

He could hear her heart beat...

 

Drumming...

Rhythmic...

 

Just like her voice...

When she sang...

 

He remembered the time when she asked him not to tell anyone about her singing...

And he didn't.

He wouldn't.

 

He would never do anything to hurt her.

That's how it was.

Always.

 

And then he asked himself why...

The same question she had always asked him...

 

 

How was it possible that she could control his feelings so much...

 

If she was upset, he was upset.

If she was happy, he was happy.

 

He could never see her sad...

Never in tears...

 

Since yesterday, he wasn't feeling well, because she was upset.

And now, everything felt right, because she was there to see him.

 

How his feelings didn't matter anymore.

What mattered was - her.

 

Only her.

This one girl, who was now within his arms.

So close, so real, so right.

 

This girl.

 

Who controlled his thoughts so much.

Who controlled his feelings so much.

Who controlled his actions so much.

 

He wanted to keep her there, in his arms...

Not knowing why...

 

But that felt right.

Her so close to him.

 

He didn't know when all this happened...

Her taking over his personal territory...

 

But it had happened.

 

She was there.

Reigning his mind.

His heart?

 

And he wasn't alarmed anymore.

He wasn't terrified with this awareness anymore.

He wasn't worried about releasing his long protected guards.

 

For her.

For Gloomy.

For this girl.

 

 

The girl who made him smile...

The girl who made him feel...

The girl who made him want...

 

The girl who made him...Him.

 

The girl who changed him.

For the better.

 

This girl.

Gloomy.

 

 

He held her closer, closed his eyes and couldn't help but think...

 

Is she the girl?

Maybe. What? No.

 

She couldn't be.

It wasn't possible.

 

Why not?

It could be possible.

 

No.

 

He couldn't...

He wouldn't...

 

NO.

Yes.

 

Yes?

YES.

 

Who was he fooling?

 

He had avoided it too long.

Refrained himself from getting close to her.

 

This close.

 

He didn't want to do it anymore.

He couldn't do it anymore...

 

He didn't want to run anymore...

No.

 

From his feelings...

From whatever that feeling was...

 

He wanted to welcome these new emotions...

 

He would.

He could.

 

He should.

Yes, he should.

 

He will.

 

As he realized...

Or admitted...

 

Seizing that moment...

 

 

Finally.

 

 

While holding her...

He smiled...

 

 

 

Yes, she was the girl...

 

 

 

 

 

Muskuraaye toh...Muskuraane Ke... Karz Utaarne Honge
Muskuraauun Kabhii...Toh Lagta Hai

Jaise Honthon Pe Karz Rakhaa Hai...

 

 

 

To be continued...

 

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Edited by karmachameleon - 28 January 2014 at 9:12am

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Girgit,

After 320 agonizing days - finally an update from you!
 
Six Thousand Two Hundred and Ninety Five words!
Thank you for putting in so much time & energy for your readers. In spite of having two children and an extremely hectic schedule, don't know how you did it! Thank you!
 
This reminds me of the time when you, karmachameleon, mentioned my name on your thread for the very first time and, that too, right before the update! I was absolutely thrilled!!! In retrospect, counting the words on that update of IASW300R has definitely done me a lot of good! LOL
 
Coming back to the update. I already know I won't end up telling you anything new. You know how much I love your stories and your writing abilities. And everything I feel has already been said. Nevertheless, here I am with my humble opinion.
 
Chapter 37 was beautifully crafted - starting with loneliness and alienation and beautifully transitioning to love and hope.
 
As I read through the update, I just couldn't help but think (like always LOL) about how talented a writer you are! You have conveyed each moment, feeling and emotion so flawlessly. Karma, you were able to make your readers feel the emotions - the heartfelt angst, the fear and above all, the love :)
 
"Am I going to lose him too?
Is this all my fault?
Is he going to leave me too?
Just like everyone else?"
 
Feelings so real... I felt them too!
 
"Yes, she was the girl..."
 
I loved the way you portrayed Arnav's realization. It took 37 chapters for Tsunami to realize his love for Gloomy and each of the previous chapters built on the next to get the story to this stage. It was all so real! Nothing happens magically - Everything happens in the due course of time.  Your stories are fresh and genuine, and so are the characters.
 
What I loved the most about the chapter was the conversation between Gloomy & Tsunami. I could read it again and again and again and not get tired of it. Karmachameleon, you make an addict out of your readers! Reading the entire conversation was a roller-coaster ride - from one emotion to the other, my heart was beating super fast in anticipation of what would come next! Thoroughly enjoyed it!
 
A superb update with a brilliant ending! I am SO glad he has realized that she is the one!

Please give the world a chance to experience this brilliant ride! About time you got published! Like you know already, the wings already exist all you need to do is fly!

Love,

 
 
PS: Can't wait until the day you transition from reading forum comments to reading Amazon reviews!



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waiting..waiting...

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wow wow wow...
seriously brilliant job...
after last chapter i was thinking how much tym arshi will take to sort out this blunder...
but finally ..it ws grate...
amazing chapter...
both arnav nd khushi did their best nd finally a hug...i loved this...nd here in this tym arnav finally know his feeling for her...what he feels for her ...this is pure love...brilliant...
but still khushi is confused...
this story is very different... getting this update after one year wait...but still this is like worth waiting...
kc awesome update...
nd sorry for late comment...i forget to unres it...sorry


Edited by chetna19 - 25 February 2014 at 9:40am

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Posted: 28 January 2014 at 8:52am | IP Logged
YAY !! :D
I feel overwhelmed after reading the update ...
Going for another read of the chapter !
Thank You so much for writing this story Smile 

Will edit in some time.


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Dear Fate-Mate,

I was/am super excited about this day. I had not seen you for more than a year now and I can't tell you how much I have been looking forward to this day! I wished for you in every prayer. I wished for you upon Birthday candles, shooting stars, four leaf clovers, stray eyelashes, pennies in the fountain, dandelion fluff and every other possible thing, truly and sincerely! A year passed by and even as all my fears rose to surface, there was something in me that really made me believe that I would see you yet again. I can't explain, I just knew it. Today as we meet again, the feeling I am going through right now is indescribable and something I'll never forget. I hope one day you realize how strongly you managed to wrap yourself around every detail of my existence. You are my most priceless possession! You mean everything to me! I'd like to thank your creator - KARMA CHAMELEON for attracting such a magical piece of brilliance into my life because it has truly changed my life. I mean it.  Meeting you again is the best feeling in the world and I definitely hope that it won't be another year before I see you again!

Happiest soul in this universe,
Akshu.

******************

Dear KC,

I must have done something really good in life that you came along one day to reorganize my life. I feel like a happier person today and there is no one else other than you who deserves the credit for that. I know it sounds so cliche but "Thank You" cannot express the depth of gratitude I feel for you. You will never know the impact you have made in my life. If Fate-Mate is my life, you are my inspiration to life.

THANK YOU...

for the most treasured gift of my life

for always bringing a smile on my face

for all the LOL's :)

for always being there for me

for guiding me in the right path when I lost my way

for your inspirational words

for treating me with such kindness and respect

and many more...

I cannot agree more on this saying "We don't meet people by accident. They are meant to cross our path for a reason". You definitely crossed mine for a big fat reason KC :-)

Your admirer for life,
Akshu.

*************************

R.E.S



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god...the update is awesome..the emotions are portrayed..very beautifully...

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OMG an update yayyy...wow...will bk bk after reading :D
Edited!
wow that was one long and an amazing update! the dream sequence was awesome... but y did arnav leave her? does it signify anything?
and she does not know ASR is Arnav Singh Raizada right?
the emotions and feelings were just perfect... i love when they talk to each other...
n im glad Arnav finally accepted she is his girl :D
eagerly waiting for the next :)

I got confused if you want us to leave the email id's on this thread or the other.
I already have mentioned my id in the other thread..
Just to be sure u add me here is my email id again: sweetmansi_2@yahoo.co.in



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