This content was originally posted by: sashashyam
My dear
Avantika,
This one has an odd, dreamy quality to it,
like the waters of that babbling brook by which Sakshi and Arjun have that vital
(though neither knows it as yet) conversation.
To be honest, I've realised writing melodramatic sequences is a lot more easier.. 😆 But yes, I'm glad you appreciate it, Aunty..
There is the same turbulence in the thoughts
of all your main characters - Professor Khanna, Sakshi, Arjun, and even the
guilt-ridden Shree - as there is in the rushing waters. And just as there are
sudden pools of stillness in the
flowing stream, as opposing
eddies and current cancel each other out, so is it with Sakshi and Arjun . The
one is now clear that she will not succumb to the hidden weakness in her psyche
that the events of the previous night
had laid bare, though the going will not
be easy. And the other is now relieved,
after a fashion, that she seems to have pulled back from emotional collapse, though he is unsure
if her new found strength will last.
Your Arjun is superb, Avantika. He is all
that the TV character was, and then some more. His acute sense of
responsibility for everything that was done under his aegis makes him apologise
to Professor Khanna with a degree of
humility and sincerity that is as impressive as it is rare. To right a wrong is easy, especially if
you are in a position of superior authority. But to acknowledge a failing that
is really not yours, and then to act on
that regret without any sense of ego is truly admirable.
Absolutely and that's exactly what I intended to portray. 😊
I am growing to like your Sakshi a lot too,
which, for me, with an aversion of any and all Sakshis of every shape, size and nature who
proliferate in this forum, is saying a
lot!
She is, at one level, a gentle girl and
a a loving niece, and the warmth of her affection for her Mamaji reaches out to the reader like the
warmth of a camp fire.
At another level, she is also a
would-be-tough professional, who discovers all of a sudden that undercover work
is far tougher and more dangerous that she had thought it to be. Luckily for her, she is your leading lady, and
nothing really bad ever happens to leading ladies, so her knight errant arrives (to justify your claim to being super filmy!) just in the nick of time to save her and beat up the
villain good and proper.
Wow! Now that's quite a feat, right? 😆 Jokes apart, this Sakshi has the heart of a child just like the one on the show was presumed to have, but that's all that's similar between the two of them. She's a character I've created myself, I'd like to believe and you're right.
She is a thorough professional and I am going to start showing that side of her pretty soonish. After all, I don't suffer from partial memory loss unlike our CV's.
Oh yes! The knight in shining armour here drives a police jeep instead..
As I had told you the last time, I enjoyed
Arjun playing Nemesis, and like Oliver Twist, almost said Please, Ma'am, may I have some more (bashing)?
I loved the fits and starts conversation, if
one can call it that, between Arjun and Sakshi besides the stream, at the end
of which, both of them seem to have found that "tiny window of hope", though
Arjun probably does not realise that as yet.
It was a surreal exercise by two people, almost strangers, but bound
by a shared experience courtesy the
slimy Trivedi. There was Sakshi, struggling to come to terms with what had
happened and what had, very luckily, not happened to her the night before, and there was Arjun, struggling to get
her back on her feet, literally and otherwise,
and hoping that he could do this without her shutting him out of her
life. It could not have been an easy one to write, my dear, but you
can rest content, for it has come out beautifully.
As for the cheeky chat between
sakshi_stargazer and Arjun_footballfanatic, that was as unexpected as it was a
sheer delight. You are a very clever girl, Avantika, to think of such an
unusual and cheerful twist to your tale. I am, as you know, not at all given to
fruitless speculation about the future of any FF, but here, even I cannot help
picturing the scene when the two find out about their (almost) past life bond.
So this was what you meant when you had
Sakshi look back with nostalgic regret:
But it hadn't always been the case. She did have
someone she could rant to, about practically everything under the sun, without
having to bother about being judged.
He wasn't exactly a friend; she'd rather
preferred to call him her enemy but he wasn't just that either. He was a
complete opposite of what she had been, composed and matured, a bit too much
for his age and he kept her grounded. But Sakshi had given up on him, on the
day she decided to step out of Mumbai. And since then, he had ceased to exist
for her..
Wow! Now that just made me super nervous, i have to admit..
The revelation will come soon, I'm planning one.. It might be filmy, so the disclaimer will have to stay..
Well, she
might have given up on him, but who can prevail against kismat?
Oh yes, how can
I forget your opening para, so redolent of the
cosy charms of Mussoorie? It took me back straightaway to the National
Academy of Administration, and the days
of my faroff youth!
Thank you so much, Aunty. Your reviews mean a lot and often offer me an insight into my own characters..
As for Mussoorie, I can't wait to get on the train with my grandmum. She is a native of Uttaranchal. And a lot of this description comes from stories she's told me in the past.. :)
Shyamala Aunty
PS: I have, as you might have noted, carefully refrained from quizzing you about your new, fancy moniker!😉
Err.. the lesser said, the better.. 😉
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