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Culaccino ~ An ArHi SS | Ch 3 Pg 45 Note Pg 58 (4/4/14) (Page 43)

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Posted: 07 February 2014 at 10:46pm | IP Logged
I'm so sorry for the late reply!!!

But first of all- cliffhanger??? Whyyy?????

Now...I'm glad I didn't just jump to conclusions with these two characters and just label one wrong and one right, one a victim and the other the perpetrator. And why didn't I do that? Because you, my friend, wrote it in such a skillful, brilliant way that one could tell there's more than meets the eye. A person's actions, their mistakes, can never be pinned down to a single, clear, easy to understand reason, and Khushi's reasons for what she did are complex and confusing, even to herself. This is what makes Khushi, and even Arnav, as he struggles with his anger and his love for her, struggles to remove himself and yet unable to hurt, more human, relatable and realistic. This chapter was so powerful and emotionally gripping, and most of all because we are seeing Arnav's pain here through Khushi's eyes, magnified by her own pain, and it just proves that she would never ever hurt him willingly, that he means so much to her.

I love the role reversal- there are umpteen FFs of how Arnav redeems himself, but this is the first where Khushi is playing that role. Giving him the decision, giving him the choice as she does in the end even though she craves another chance- which she wouldn't waste, her determination and desperation shines through in your writing- I can feel how much is banking on her request and his decision and I can't help but feel that it'll be in both their favours. Just two chapters in, I'm genuinely invested in both their happiness, and as you wrote, I hope Khushi gets the chance to fix what she had broken, maybe more for Arnav's sake than her own.

Amazing, amazing, beautiful, deep and poignant. Lovin' it!

Again, so sorry for the late reply!

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Posted: 07 February 2014 at 11:30pm | IP Logged
Originally posted by -doe-eyes-

I'm so sorry for the late reply!!!

But first of all- cliffhanger??? Whyyy?????

Now...I'm glad I didn't just jump to conclusions with these two characters and just label one wrong and one right, one a victim and the other the perpetrator. And why didn't I do that? Because you, my friend, wrote it in such a skillful, brilliant way that one could tell there's more than meets the eye. A person's actions, their mistakes, can never be pinned down to a single, clear, easy to understand reason, and Khushi's reasons for what she did are complex and confusing, even to herself. This is what makes Khushi, and even Arnav, as he struggles with his anger and his love for her, struggles to remove himself and yet unable to hurt, more human, relatable and realistic. This chapter was so powerful and emotionally gripping, and most of all because we are seeing Arnav's pain here through Khushi's eyes, magnified by her own pain, and it just proves that she would never ever hurt him willingly, that he means so much to her.

I love the role reversal- there are umpteen FFs of how Arnav redeems himself, but this is the first where Khushi is playing that role. Giving him the decision, giving him the choice as she does in the end even though she craves another chance- which she wouldn't waste, her determination and desperation shines through in your writing- I can feel how much is banking on her request and his decision and I can't help but feel that it'll be in both their favours. Just two chapters in, I'm genuinely invested in both their happiness, and as you wrote, I hope Khushi gets the chance to fix what she had broken, maybe more for Arnav's sake than her own.

Amazing, amazing, beautiful, deep and poignant. Lovin' it!

Again, so sorry for the late reply!

Thanks so much for the feedback and am so relieved that what I was trying to say was comprehensible to you...and you have put the same across so beautifully. :)

The character description you have given of Arnav and Khushi makes me feel as if what I am writing is coming across to my readers as I wish it to and thats just such a huge relief, man! More so because I am extremely worried about this story as it does not take the conventional route that we all think of whenever we think of such a situation and to make that convincing is one of the biggest challenges here so readers like you saying what you did make me feel so much better! Thanks! :)
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Posted: 08 February 2014 at 11:30am | IP Logged
This chapter had me sighing! Wistfully, probably a little sadly.
The flashback has this dreamlike, surreal aura to it. Arnav's proposal, Khushi's reaction -- I could play out the whole scene in front of me, and maybe even list down the emotions surging through Khushi's mind then. So I'd say that the relief, joy and hope Khushi felt couldn't have been conveyed better. I could feel myself smiling upon hearing Arnav's willingness to try. Though what made me wonder later was the fact the Khushi had felt those butterflies the last time when they had been at the beach. Then what went amiss in the years spanning in-between these two very significant events? Was this that led Khushi to be in bed with another? Or maybe I'm just reading too much into this and if so, just ignore it!

Then Arnav's father, I've adored this man right from the first time you introduced him in the story. There's this umpteen amount of respect, love and understanding emanating from this man, every time I think of his character for some inexplicable reason. And this interaction between him and his son was touching, heartening to the core.

Then the last part - I was left a little speechless. Even though we have seen a glimpse or two of something similar in the show, but this part was just wonderful! His affection and his constant need to see that Khushi doesn't be privy to this part of him - there's something so Arnav about it - what I mean to say its so essential to his nature, so conflicted , one can easily imagine Sobti exuding those every expressions. Then Khushi's tears, they made me teary eyed too. Because I think other than the realisation that she still had another chance with this man, it also might have made her wonder as to how she could have done what she did when she had all of him for her, his love, his trust, his everything. Which leads to another question, that why she did what she did? Then again I may be reading too much into it.

But as always, amazing work! <3


Edited by mistyrains - 10 February 2014 at 2:52am

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Posted: 08 February 2014 at 12:01pm | IP Logged

"I will try...but I can't promise anything."

That right there sounded more like a promise to me. Sometimes love doesn't need big promises, simple words such as "try" and simple gestures such as a "smile" mean more than million promises.

We always get hurt by the one we love the most and we are hurt the most when the one we love is hurt. I know, it's tricky!! When two people are in love it doesn't matter who hurt or who is hurt, both feel the pain. So, right now, Arnav is in pain for hurting, Khushi and part of his pain is also ebbed from the fact that he can see the anguish that, Khushi is going through and yet there is cannot do anything about it. Khushi is no different than Arnav in this situation, she is going through the same turmoil and hers is topped with guilt for ruining their relationship.

Arnav is a reflection of his father. I have so much respect for this man and no wonder Arnav looks up to him. Devendra didn't let his disastrous marriage taint his own beliefs or faith in relationships/people and above all Arnav's life. This man's wisdom and upbringing reflects in Arnav's sensitivity, care, concern and love for, Khushi.

The last scene torn my heart!! These are two people who has so much love for each other and its heart wrenching to see them going through all this pain. And makes me ask the same question, why made Khushi do what she did? As I get more insight into her character and her love for Arnav it's hard to believe she will give into the moment in haste. 


I had this song on mind for this story, by Timbaland:

"Apologize"

I'm holding on your rope
Got me ten feet off the ground
And I'm hearing what you say
But I just can't make a sound
You tell me that you need me
Then you go and cut me down
But wait...
You tell me that you're sorry
Didn't think I'd turn around and say..

That it's too late to apologize, it's too late
I said it's too late to apologize, it's too late

I'd take another chance, take a fall, take a shot for you
And I need you like a heart needs a beat
(But that's nothing new)
Yeah yeah

I loved you with a fire red, now it's turning blue
And you say
Sorry like the Angel Heaven let me think was you,
But I'm afraid

It's too late to apologize, it's too late
I said it's too late to apologize, it's too late
Woahooo woah

It's too late to apologize, it's too late
I said it's too late to apologize, it's too late
I said it's too late to apologize, yeah
I said it's too late to apologize, yeah

I'm holding on your rope
Got me ten feet off the ground...



Edited by Crazy4Sobti - 14 February 2014 at 12:09am

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Posted: 08 February 2014 at 12:04pm | IP Logged
I'm really glad I came across this one! And I was so engrossed that I didn't even realise that its the latest chapter I'm reading.. Bravo!! You writing is vivid and I love the way it's going, intense and poignant. Looking forward :)

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Posted: 08 February 2014 at 12:08pm | IP Logged

Excellent Update...

 
I can see how much Arnav loves Kushi and glad that he wanted to give a chance to set the things right between ARshi...
 
 
I must Say Aranv's father is a key player in ARshi's life and he is a god father for both of them...

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Posted: 08 February 2014 at 12:14pm | IP Logged
Arnav's caring was so sweet and tender...especially given what they're going through. 

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