RES!
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PHEW!
That was INTENSE.
And honestly I kind of need a box of tissues..
so we have our very first Kyun Dard Hai Itna moment.
This chapter was so well written, especially in its portrayal of arnav singh raizada.
I am still reeling from the fact that you revealed all his secrets in ONE GO!
We found out what actually happens in the "closed" room...and I honestly have two words...SPOT ON.
You did justice to the past, of slowly loosing people..so much pain and suffering.
As if that wasn't enough Kay comes and says she would hold on to him if she could. And now I want to scream! Why cant she?! Why does she have to leave also?
And it is so unfair that a chapter titled "letter" only has an incomplete letter. EXPEL. This is the worst cliff than those that we encountered during spelunking.
How can you sleep at night, leaving us all like this?
I guess probably patting yourself after reading this tiny comment on a job very very very very well done!
(still res)
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OH ooops forgot to say DOCTOR ASR?!
Mind = blown.
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Dearest J,
Hello Hi! Yes yes, 3 days later, as always following the clock on indian railway stations..
J this was a brilliant chapter, it was like taking a walk inside A's heart and mind..something one rarely gets a chance to do (unless u are reading sins, than u want to Staaaph that walk asap!). It was a dose of thanda pani on the smooth sailing SKD, and yet it gave me hope like none other..that whatever is happening, its for the long haul, and I am kind of not surprised that SAX be da sexcerpt for the next part (also cause u take immense pleasure in our suffering, u shyamio u!).
In the midst of everything that happened, all the chaos of her running away, I forgot that I didnt expect her to inform anyone and leave (much like arnav)! So I cant help be SUPER RELIEVED that it was a temporary informed thing, even if it was good old "personal emergency". What is with your Kays and those two words?! Always leaving the As in a state of perplexity and contemplating the words: iss pyaar ko kya naam doon?
I feel like I have NE'ER met this man before, and I have read countless stories with him as the lead. You have used the classic traits anger, solitude, heavy past, smart and rich beyond measure, passionate, and putting your fresh perspective into it. I effing LOVE him. He is much much more real and perceivable. May it be his outburst in front of everyone when Kay goes missing, or his confining himself in a room to grieve her loss (of sorts).
Oh the melancholy we associated with him, finally makes sense. The guilt, the solitude..everything does. I loved your depiction of him being stuck in that room for 48hours. People have different ways of coping with things, and ASR well we always knew for him it was immersing into work, or shutting himself off from the world. This just took the latter to another level and justifiably so. What I loved was how he talked himself into changing it all around, for his family's sake, for his sake but not without Kay in it. Brilliant. Brilliant writing.
Oh and Raizada keep them "the mystery of KKG (not sure if she is a kumari heer, literally and figuratively too)" kostins coming! I want to add a few of mine own to that list:
1. Why was she in solitary confinement before?
2. What does she mean by time to take up another job?
3. Is she a chor of some capacity, the thing with paintings was really shifty!
4. Why, how does she know SO much about sheesh mahal, especially when its been closed for 20 years? Or its just her keen eye for things, and that is how she really got to know it better?
5. What triggered her coming out of the solitary confinement? Arnav or Mahal?
6. Oh and why is she so fazed by the mention of Akash, is her loss to do with a sibling as well?
Please to get your investigators to look into this?
Or just get the woman writing your story, to hurry the bleep up and UPDEX! Oh and while we are at it, can you please tell her to stop leaving us with half written letters? TFS.
Than came that scene the one I loved SO SO SO MUCH. When she finally comes back after two days and how it all plays out. Reminds me of the time when Kay says she is leaving and going back to Lucknow but turns up for Anjali's wedding anniversary with sweets and hides in the closet. I absolutely LOVED the way you wrote this one, gave me the pheelz. Especially with him walking through the north wing, just to get to her and she acts the way she does. At this point I am ready to burst into backstreet boys (for A's sake only) and start singing "quit playing games with my heart". But I cut the melodrama because I know bad things come to those who wait on the edge of cliffs, and we will know all about Kays pheelz soonish after a longish wait.
And than part 2. Words really dont do justice to how freaking perfectly you wrote his side of the story! I think I have told you everything already, right from handling him being an orphan, to his bromance with akash, to his love for being a doctor, to giving it all up and starting to live Akash's life. All because of the actions behind those words, his movements, his breathlessness, his anguish, Kay's emotions..J, I think this was one of the most well written confessions evaaa. And you have written quite a few of those in the recent times!
I love that as always you played on the similarity of their situations. Maybe this is why they always ask each other the right questions, that no one else can. Or the way he opened up to her like he has to no one else. Or why they feel this connection, that cant be named. The way Kay summed up A's guilt was like she is a psychiatrist or something?! Kidding. But seriously thats what he needed to hear, see what I mean about hope despite all the KDHI. Just like I know Arnav is going to make this work, no matter what, he is in this for the long haul..this chapter just proved it. And if not that, at least we know she is not going to run away after he finishes reading the letter!
J. As always as I did ZERO justice to this chapter, and my pheelz. Stop being so freaking brilliant, its hard to matchup, dammit!
L
ps. If I havent stressed enough, I am so so glad u are back and writing this, even if it means I have been on a cliff for 4 days and turned into a insomniac!
pps. I miss S, dammit!
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