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Posted: 10 years ago
EPISODE 2
 
Her entire world being shattered in seconds, Tara was staring at the Locket with bloodshot eyes full of revenge when her phone ringing broke her trance. It was Neel and he called her to the hospital immediately.

Reaching the hospital, the doctor informs everyone that Aradhana was in a critical state as she had suffered from a post-traumatic stroke and needed to be operated soon.
Already plied with debt because of home loan and wedding expenses, arranging finances was going to be a tedious task for Tara. The only priced possession she had was their house. But what'd happen to their state of accommodation if they sold it off as well.
 
"Tara, tumne kaise socha ki mere hote hue tumhe paison ki fikr karni hogi?" Neel said placing a comforting had on Tara's shoulder. She hugged him and broke down into incessant tears. This solace was very much needed for her.

The doctor arrives and asks them to arrange the money as says he'll begin the initial processes, but can't proceed without the payment. Suddenly priorities change and the focus of the duo is entirely on arranging finances.
"Par ghar bechne ke alawa koi aur rasta nahi hai Neel! Mujhe pata hai, Tumhari haalat bhi zyaada acchi nahi hai, gaon ki zameen ko lekar jo court mein case hai usme tumhare saare paise chale gaye, haan case jeet gaye ho par tumhari mehnat ko is operation ke liye main barbaad nahi hone de sakti "
Neel: "Par Tara, Dost kis din ke liye hote hain"
Tara: "Bas bahut ho gaya, ye ghar to abhi aaya hai, koi khaas lagaav nahi hai isse. Maa thik ho jaaye to doosra ban jayega"
 
She tried to fake a detached expression. Neel gave up before her and the decision's made. They proceed with the formalities of the sale. Tara takes one last stroll in the house reminiscing old memories and finally locks the door. After paying for the operation they're waiting eagerly for the outcomes.

The doctor comes out and declares, "I am sorry, case bahut critical tha, Aradhana ji coma mein chali gayi hain"

This enraged her further, adding fuel to the fire of revenge within her. Instead of breaking into tears, she wiped them off and made a determined expression to get back at every ill-treatment meted out to her. She moves to the pedestal at the end of the hospital corridor where an idol of goddess Durga was placed and she bursts out, "Kya galti thi meri? Jo itni saari sazaayein ek saath de di aapne? Un logon ko aise kaise jaane de sakti hain aap? Agar meri takleef mein zaraa si bhi sacchayi hai, to un sab se badla lene ka raasta aap hi mujhe dikhayengi"

The next morning comes and Neel and Tara prepare for their Aditya and Nandini's last rites. They visit the hospital where the doctor instructs that Aradhana should stay at the hospital only on life-support and not get discharged right now.
Neel gets a call from his village to reach there urgently. He asks Tara to come with him but she is the least interested and wants to stay back to look for those who were responsible for her misfortune.
While packing Tara chances upon the locket she had found beside Aditya's dead body. She lifts it up and stared at it and simultaneously at a Durga idol in her room which was right before her eyes.
Suddenly Neel notices her and calls out to her from behind asking "Are ye locket kahan se aaya tumhare paas? Kya tum Shekhawat parivar ko jaanti ho?"
Tara was stunned to hear that. She puts her hand down turns back towards Neel asking "Kaun Shekhawat?"
 
and then she stopped her words from revealing further and she awaited Neel's answer.
He narrates, "Humare gaon, ka sabse ameer aur izzatdar parivaar hai Shekhawat parivar. Kisi zamaane mein royal family hua karti thi. Ab to khair Bharat mein democracy hai, raaj-paat to raha nahi, par gaon waale ab bhi unki bahut izzat karte hai.
Tumhe pata hai, jo mere zameen ko lekar problem chal rahi thi, inhone hi to solve karaayi thi. Sabki madad karte hain wo.
Apne niyam aur usoolon ke ye itne pakke hain ki unke aage aur kisi cheez ya insaan ki koi keemat nahi inke liye. Koi bhi galat ho sakta hai par inke baare mein kabhi koi baat nahi galat ho sakti. Ghar ke har sadasya ke gale mein unke pushtaini (ancestral) nishaan ka locket hota hai. Jo locket abhi tumhare paas hai na, kuch waisa hi. Par tumhe ye kahan se mila?
"

The last question breaks Tara's trance, she decides to change the topic and not reveal her plan, "Are ye unka kaise ho sakta hai? Koi ittefaq hoga. Ye to hume humari ek dost ne gift diya tha ka..."
 
Even Neel continues, "Hoga ittefaq hi waisa hi, chodo na isko!"

He tries to keep it back but Tara stops him, "Nahi Neel, ye to kaafi interesting hai. Kitni mazedar baat hai na ki mera locket un logo ke pushtaini nishan jaisa hai, jinhone tumhari itni madad ki
 
Neel notices this is lightening  her mood, she isn't sad anymore and lets her keep it while Tara continues, "Unhi ki to wajah se meri zindagi badal gayi" satire creeps into her voice and Neel isn't able to understand why she said that. He queries, "Matlab" and Tara smartly covers-up, "Matlab, unki wajah se hi to tumari zindagi badal gayi, tumhari problem solve hui, tabhi to tumhare gaon rehne jaa rahe hain hum, nahi to bina ghar ke yahan Bhopal mein kahan jaate" her answer satisfies Neel and he leaves the room to resume the departure proceeding while Tara has a monologue "Keemat to ab main unhe bataungi, kisi ki zindagi ki, meri Nandu ki zindagi ki, un mein se jinhone Aditya ki jaan li hai, unhe to uska badla apni jaan se hi dena hoga"
 

They catch the train from Bhopal to Govindnagar, which was Neel's village. On their way Tara puts forward a seemingly innocent query, "Kuch aur batao na Shekhawats ke baare mein
Neel: "Kya batayein, itne acche log to humne aaj tak nahi dekhe, kitni madad karte hain sabki aur ..."

"Haan haan pata hai, Tumhari zameen dilane mein bhi unhone madad ki thi, pata hai" Tara interrupts in a disinterested tone "Ye batao ki unke pariwaar mein hai kaun kaun?"

Then Neel explains, "Ghar ke mukhiya Rudra Pratap Shekhawat aur unke do bete hain Ranvijay aur Mrityunjay.
Ghar ki saari zimmedari unki Daadi Kalavati Devi sambhalti hain. Badi sakht mizaaj ki hain wo, koi galti bardasht nahi hoti unse.
"

Tara's hunger for introspection isn't satisfied yet, "Par Neel ye to batao ki ye sab log kaise hain, matlab Daadi ka to samajh gaye aur baaki?"

Neel: "Ranvijay ka kya batayein, choti umar se apne pita ki kaam mein madad karta hai to uska bartav kaafi gusse waala hai ho gaya hai, saara gaon darta hai uske gusse se.
Aur haan, unke maali ki beti bhi rehti hai unke saath, naam hai Radha... Radha ka to kya batau tumhe Tara...
"
We see a sudden glee on Neel's face when he is about to describe but is stopped by Tara
Tara: "Aur???? Unke Pariwaar mein aur koi nahi hai?"
Neel: "Aur kaun? Mrityunjay? uske baare mein jaan kar kya karogi?"
Tara gets alert, seems like a mystery to unfold is awaiting her, and she's near to knowing all she wants as Neel continues, "Kabhi kabhi lagta hai, Bhagwan ne duniya kitni galat banayi hai, par Mrityunjay ko dekh kar ye khayal dimaag se nikal jaata hai. Dil uska jitna saaf hai utna masoom bhi. Har kisi ki madad karta hai,
sab use pyare hai,
muskurata hai to lagta hai din bhar ki thakan pal mein gayab ho gayi aur hazaaron phool khil gaye.
Par wo kehte hain na gulab ke phool ke saath kaante bhi hote hain,
jaane kya ho gaya ki uske gharwalon ne use band kar diya ghar ke ek kamre mein...
"

A calm listener Tara was surprised at the last statement, "Kyun?"
Neel: "Keh rahe the paagal ho gaya hai, usse milne nahi diya gaya kisi bahar waale ko mahino tak, ab to saara gaon taras gaya use dekhne ko..."

The train halts and who gets off the train is a more confused Tara, plied with more questions instead of answers. She spends a sleepless night recollecting what Neel had told her and trying to draw conclusions. The next morning she gets up and takes a walk in the village.
It was pretty early and Tara was strolling in Neel's apple-orchard and there weren't too many people around. Suddenly she heard a tree shake. Turning towards it she advances towards it trying to find out. She stood below the tree and tried to gaze through the branches to find the source of shaking. And then, she spotted that it was a human. A guy had climbed up the tree and was plucking apples. Realizing that, she got alarmed and screamed to raise alarm and call the guard of the orchard "Chor chor chor..."

The thief got scared and let go of the apples, all of which fell on Tara's head like rain. Infuriated she shouted, "kaun hai!!! Abhi ke abhi neeche utaro!!" The thief tried to pay heed, but a branch broke, and he suffered the same fate as the apples, and before they knew it, Tara was lying on the ground with apples all around the guy over her πŸ˜†

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Edited by nikkie - 10 years ago
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Posted: 10 years ago
Hai, Its fantastic update. Pls post character sketch. Continue soon..
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Posted: 10 years ago
Originally posted by: capriya

Hai, Its fantastic update. Pls post character sketch. Continue soon..

 
Actually this FF had some suspense in here, so I did not want to update a character sketch...
Would love it if you could continue to read it like a novel enjoying twists as they unfold!
 
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Posted: 10 years ago
Wowh that's an awesome update.. interesting story.

Thanks for the PM.
Edited by sankalp_prapti - 10 years ago
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Posted: 10 years ago
Originally posted by: capriya

Hai, Its fantastic update. Pls post character sketch. Continue soon..

 
 
Hey guys!!
As requested, have updated character sketches on page 1 as well.
Hoping you will like it
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Posted: 10 years ago
You're doing a much better job than the CVs.
Wish we could tweet it to them.πŸ˜‰
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Originally posted by: Bamonforever

You're doing a much better job than the CVs.

Wish we could tweet it to them.πŸ˜‰

 
You can try tweeting to Viraf or Saba 😊
I am not on twitter (too lazy to joinπŸ₯±) but my mail ID is [email protected]
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Posted: 10 years ago
Thank you posting CS. Very nice . It seems to be a lot of mysteries.
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Originally posted by: capriya

Thank you posting CS. Very nice . It seems to be a lot of mysteries.

Don't worry, the twist is just one, and I won't drag it much πŸ˜†
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Posted: 10 years ago
Episode 2 is even better ,upar wala jab deta his yo chappar phaad ke deta hai πŸ˜‰
Nice writing style niharika,it is like a scene actually playing in front of your eyes with dialogues and monologues .
Well done and keep it coming πŸ‘πŸΌ