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visrom

@visrom

IF-Stunnerz

+ 4

Posted: 10 years ago

Hi,

Welcome to WAS (Write a scene) contest - after a long time.

Rules:

1. You have to write a short story (scene) connecting the 3 given pictures

2. The scene has to be continuous

3. You may rearrange the pictures as you wish

4. It can be written in Hindi/English/Hinglish

5. Entries are to be submitted before : 13th Oct 2013 5PM.

6. Entries are to be posted on this thread as replies with ENTRY NO : x (x- is yor entry no) mentioned at the top.

7. https://www.indiaforums.com/forum/topic/3435662 is a previous contest. You may check this for the format and how to create a scene etc.

8. No replies on this thread, except your entries. All discussions are to be held in the General Discussions thread or you may PM any of the previous participants for doubt clarification.

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Shreya

@Minionite

Channel Moderator

+ 24

Posted: 10 years ago

Entry 1:

Don't ask me what I was doing here. I have no idea. 😆 But hope you guys like it.

Daya sir and Freddy are eating dinner at Daya sir's house when Daya sir gets a call. He picks up.

Daya sir: Hello? *listening* Lekin abhi? *listening* Acha thik hai. *listening*

Freddy's face is getting worried as he hears this. Daya hangs up.

Freddy: Kya huya sir?

Daya sir: Pata nahi. Abhijeet ka phone tha.

Freddy: Kya kaha Abhijeet sir ne?

Daya: Hume phauran bureau bulaya hai. ACP sir ko kuch baat karni hai.

Freddy: Toh chalo sir.

The 2 leave Daya sir's house.

In the bureau, Abhijeet sir, Daya sir, and Freddy are looking worried as ACP sir is pacing without saying anything.

Daya sir: Kya huya sir?

ACP sir: Daya tumhe nahi pata ke kya huya hai?

Daya sir: Nahi sir. Huya kya hai?

ACP sir: Kuch aisa huya hai jo nahi hona chahiye tha.

Abhijeet sir: Lekin kya sir?

Freddy: Sir kuch toh bataya. Main pareshan ho raha hoon.

ACP sir: Freddy pareshan toh main bhi hoon. Yeh kaise ho sakta hai?

Abhijeet sir: Lekin kya sir?

Daya sir: Kuch toh bataye.

ACP sir: Main kuch nahi kahonga. Tum log phauran jao aur khud pata karo ke kya huya. Shodin Hall. Main, Freddy, aur Salunkhe peeche aate hain.

The duo leave.

At Shodin Hall, the duo are getting out of the car and discussing what could have happened.

Daya sir: Kya lagta hai Abhijeet?

Abhijeet sir: Dekhte hain. Agar sir itne pareshan the toh zaroor koi baari baat hi hogi.

Daya sir: Chalo dekhte hain.

The duo close their doors and walk into Shodin Hall. The hall is dark.

Abhijeet sir (calling out): Koi hai? Koi hai?

Daya sir feels around for a switch and finding one turns it on. The lights turn on and a whole group of dedicated CIDians yell out: Surprise! Happy 1000th episode!!!

The duo break into smiles and ACP sir, Freddy, and Dr. Salunkhe walk in behind them also surprised. ACP sir realizes that the call he got about the mass suicides was fake just to get them to come to the surprise party.

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@..optimist..

IF-Sizzlerz

+ 4

Posted: 10 years ago

ENTRY 2 :

(wrote it while discussing about the episode and the precap on the EDT of Rahasa Dweep IV 😉)

At Daya's house...

Daya having dinner after a tiring day. The doorbell rings.

Daya : (Checking the clock) Poune-baaraa!! Itni raat ko kaun aaya??

Daya opens the door...

Daya : Arey Fredy, tum? Tum itni raat gaye yahan kaise?

Fredy : (worried) Sir, aapka phone shayad lug nahi raha hai...

Daya : Tum aise khade kyun ho? Andar aao!!

Fredy saw that Daya was having his dinner. So he came in and sat beside Daya as Daya ate. Fredy refused to eat anything.

Daya : Achha bataao, kya baat hai?

Fredy : Sir, humein Bureau jaana hai!!

Daya : (shocked) Bureau?!! Abhi kyun?

Fredy : Sir, Abhijeet Sir ka phone aaya tha... Urgently bulaya hai!! Aapka phone nahi lag raha tha, isiliye Abhijeet Sir ne mujhe aap ko saath lekar aane ke liye kaha hai!!!

Just then Daya's phone rings and Abhi tells him to reach Bureau immediately.

Both, Daya and Fredy, hurry towards the Bureau in Fredy's car.

* * *

ACP and Abhijeet already present in the Bureau. Daya and Fredy enter to see the Seniors walking up and down the Bureau in anger and disappointment.

Daya : Errr... Kya hua hai Abhijeet? (Abhijeet remained silent) Sir? (ACP too didnt speak)

Daya and Fredy confused... After a while...

Abhi : (angry) Yeh log kya samajhte hain? Ki woh humein kuchh bhi karne ke liye kahenge aur hum karte rahenge?!!

Sensing Daya and Fredy's confusion, ACP makes it clear...

ACP : Humaare "Guptcharon" se pata chala hai ki humein phir se Jungle aur paani mein bhejne ka irada hai unka!!

Daya : Kya?!! Phir se??

Fredy : Arey Baap re! Mujhse nahi hoga Sir yeh...!!

ACP : I know Fredy, I know..!! Kisi ko nahi karna hai yeh...

Abhi : (determined) Hum ab chup nahi baithenge Sir!! Kuchh na kuchh toh karna hi padega!!

Daya : Haan Abhijeet! Ab bohot ho raha hai yeh!!

Fredy : Lekin hum kya kar sakte hain Sir?

Abhi : (with sparkling yes and a mischievious smile) Mere paas ek plan hai!!

ACP : (a bit worried) Abhijeet, chal kya raha hai tumhaare dimag mein?!! Jo bhi karna hai bohot soch-samajh ke karna!!

Daya : Haan Sir! Aap uski fikar mut kijeeye... (to Abhi) Abhijeet, pehele plan toh batao!!

Abhi shares his plan with everyone. Everyone agrees with him. All leave the Bureau. Abhi offers to drop Daya on the way. Daya offers to drive to his house. As both sat into the car...

Daya : Tumhara plan toh perfect hai Boss!! Hum gayab ho jaayenge... Yeh log humaara kuchh bigaad hi nahi paayenge...!! (angry) Jab TRP's down ho jaayenge na, tab pata chalega inko!!

Abhi : Haan!! Jab tak hum khud koi kadam nahi uthaayenge iske khilaaf, yeh aisa hi chalta rahega!!!

Daya : Lekin haan, sab ek saath gayab ho gaye toh unhein hum pe shaq ho jaayega...!!

Abhi : Theek kehte ho Daya!! (thinks) Theek hai, pehele main nikalta hoon yahan se... Phir ek ek karke, tum, ACP Sir aur Fredy bhi aajana... Aur Salunkhe Saab ko bhi bata dena (winks) Chhuttiyan manayenge (laughs)

Daya : Lekin hum jaayenge kahan?

Abhi : Uska bhi intezaam ho jaayega... (winks)

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Edited by neha_dna - 10 years ago

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Anu

@buublly

Goldie

Posted: 10 years ago

ENTRY:3

(This is my first attempt in any WAS contest,so if there's any mistake than plz avoid it.)

At Daya's house.

Daya: arey Freddie, tum is waqt yahan ? sab kuchh theek toh hai na?

Freddie: sir meri life me kuchh bhi theek nahi ho sakta.

Daya: accha aao pehle baitho yahan, kuchh loge?

Freddie: nahi sir mujhe kuchh nahi chaahiye.

Daya: ab batao kya pareshaani hai tumhaari?

Freddie: sir wo meri wife...

Daya: ab kya farmaan jaari ker diya tumhaari wife ne?

Freddie: sir usne mujhe dusshera me 3 dinon ki chutti lene ko kaha hai.

Daya: 3 dino ki chutti!

Freddie: haan sir wo darasal meri wife kaafi samay se mayke nahi gayi hai aur Is bar usne soch liya hai ki wo dusshera ki chhutti me mayke jaayegi, wo v mere saath

Daya: accha?

Freddie: sir usne to dhamki v di hai ki agar maine chhutti nahi li to wo mujhse ek mahine baat nahi karegi. Aur sir aapko to pata hi hai ki hame tyohar me ek din ki chhutti v kitni mushkil se milti hai.

Daya: ab kya Karen Freddie hamara kaam hi kuchh aisa hai.

Freddie: sir main manta hun lekin thoda waqt to family ko v dena chaahiye na? aakhir wo v to hamari hi zimmedari hain .

Daya: hmmm ye v sahi hai to tum ACP sir se baat kyun nahi karte?

Freddie: mmmain ! arey baap re nahi sir ,aap to jaante hi ho ki unke saamne meri bolti hi band ho jaati hai,haan agar aap ya Abhijit sir unse baat karo to wo zaroor maan jaayenge.

Daya: achha theek hai main aaj unse baat kar..(mobile rings, Daya picks up d phone)

Daya: haan Abhijit , bolo... achha? Par tum ho kahan is waqt? ...achha theek hai main thodi me aata hun...arey nahi yaar isme pareshaani ki kya baat hai. Tum wahin ruko main aata hun.

Freddie: kya hua sir?

Daya: arey wo Abhijit ki gaadi kharaab ho gayi hai raaste me aur aaj taxi waalon ki hartaal v hai Isliye mujhe jaana hoga use pick up karne ke liye,tum aisa karo tum bureau pahooncho, main Abhijit ko le kar aata hun,phir ACP sir se baat karke dekhte hain, kya hota hai.

Freddie: sir aap pakka baat karoge na ?

Daya: haan baba, ab tum jao, Abhijit mera intezar kar raha hoga.

Freddie: theek hai sir..

Abhijit: achha hua Daya tum aa gaye varna main to(Daya interrupts)

Daya: lekin tum is restaurant me kya karne aaye the, ye to tumhare ghar se kaafi door hai? Kahin Dr. Taarika ke saath koi...

Abhijit: kya yaar Daya, tum v na, hamesha..

Daya: arey boss main to mazaak kar raha tha..

Abhijit: actually wo mera khabri hai na Mahesh, main usi se milne aaya tha. Wo yahaan waiter ka kaam karta hai.

Daya: to kya bataya usne?

Abhijit: Daya bahut badi gadbad hone waali hai .

Daya: gadbad??

Abhijit: haan Daya , Mahesh ne bataya ki usne restaurant me 2 logon ko baaten karte suna hai ki wo dusshera ke din koi bahut badi gadbad karne wale hain.

Daya: kya? Kaun the wo log?

Abhijit: pata nahi yaar, Mahesh ne unka peechha v kiya tha per wo kahin gaayeb ho gaye. Lekin use shaq hai ki ve zaroor kisi aatankwadi group se jude hue hain..

Daya: Abhijit phir to hame jald se jald ye baat ACP sir ko bataani hogi.

Abhijit: meri baat hui unse phone per,wo bureau me hamaara intezaar ker rahe honge.

Daya: to phir chalo jaldi se.

Abhijit: haan chalo.. (both sit in d car)

ACP: haan abhijit kuchh pata chala un logon ke bare main?

Abhijit: nahi sir,lekin Mahesh ko poora shaq hai ki ve kisi aatankwadi sangathan se jude hue Hain jo dusshera ke din saher me badi tabaahi machaane wale hain.

ACP:kya??

Daya: sir, phir to hamen jaldi hi kuchh karna hoga, kyunki navratri shuru ho chuki hai aur dusshera me kuchh hi din bache hain.

Abhijit: lekin Daya hame to ye v nahi maalum ki ve kis aatankwadi group ke liye kaam kar rahe Hain aur ve karne kya waale hain..

ACP: Abhijit maalum nahi hai to maalum karna padega. Kyunki jab desh ki surakshaa khatre me ho to hum yun haath per haath rakh ker nahi baith sakte. Aur waise v dusshera buraai per achhaai ki jeet ka prateek hai, aise din hum unke napaaq iraadon ko hum kisi v kimat per Kaamyaab hone nahi denge.

Abhijit: haan sir, aap bilkul sahi keh rahe hain.

ACP:toh phir jaldi se undono ke sketch banvao aur saare log lag jao kaam per, kyunki hamare Paas waqt bahut kam hai. Mujhe ministry me v khabar pahunchaani hogi.

Abhijit & Daya: yes sir.. (Daya turns nd suddenly reminds)

Daya: arey Freddie main to tumhaari chutti ki baat karna hi bhul gaya, main abhi..(interrupts)

Freddie:rehne do sir mujhe koi chutti nahi chaahiye.

ACP: chhutti?? Kise chaahiye chhutti?

Freddie: kkkisi ko nahi sir , wo mujhe chaahiye thi sir lekin ab nahi chaahiye.

Daya: lekin Freddie tumhaari wife..

Freddie: sir wife ko main samhaal loonga, aur zyada se zyada kya hoga, wo mujhse ek mahine baat nahi karegi, chalega , lekin is waqt maasoom logon ki jaan bachaana zyaada jaroori hai.

Isliye chhutti cancel.

Abhijit: arey wah Freddie ye hui na baat ! to ab lag jao duty per.

Freddie: o. k. sir..

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Ravi

@DemonStar

IF-Sizzlerz

+ 2

Posted: 10 years ago

ENTRY 4:

Daya sir is relaxing at home early after a tiring day, and about to have some refreshment when the doorbell rings. He opens the door and sees Freddy sir there.

Daya sir - (smiling) Arre Freddy, tum yahan, iss waqt?

Freddy sir - (tense) Sir... aapse zaruri baat karni thi sir!

Daya sir - (growing serious) Accha? Kyun, kya hua? Aao, andar aake batao.

He leads Freddy sir into the house. The latter takes a single look at his dining table and gasps in shock. Daya sir is obviously surprised as there's nothing remarkable on the table.

Daya sir - Arre, kya hua Freddy? Kya hai wahan?

Freddy sir - Sir... aapne kahin woh fruit juice toh nahin piya?

Daya sir - (suspicious) Abhi nahin, par peene jaa raha tha. Kyu, kya...?

Freddy sir - (gasps) Sir! Thank God main time par aa gaya! Warna pata nahin kya ho jaata! Sir, uss juice mein zeher hai sir!

Daya sir - (shocked) Kya?!?!

Freddy sir - Haan sir! Ye zeher Tropicana ki factories mein milaya jaa raha hai aur...

Daya sir - (realizing) Ek minute... ek minute. Kya kaha?

Freddy sir - Tropicana factories mein sir! Dr. Ghanchakkar badla le raha hai Tropicana se kyunki unhone uski special Fruity Booty flavour ko accept nahin kiya! Isliye usne saare juice mein aisa chemical mila diya hai ki peene waala ek mutant banana ban jaayega!

Daya sir remains quiet for a while, then sighs and puts a hand on Freddy sir's shoulders as he leads him to the dining table.

Daya sir - Yaar Freddy, idhar aao zara, baitho mere saath.

Freddy sir - (still in a shock) Aise kaise sir??? Aap nahin jaante, aaj shaam ko Nikhil aur Pankaj woh juice peekar bade-bade kele ban gaye! Abhi unhe horticultural department mein preservatives ke saath rakha gaya hai...

Daya sir - (sighing) Freddy, jaanta hoon apne schedule mein bada pressure hai, par yaar jab director "CUT!" bole toh asli duniya mein waapas aa jao!

Freddy sir - Huh? Sir...

Daya sir - Nikhil aur Pankaj theek hain... maine khud hi unke banana costumes order karwaaye the. Aur sirf woh hi nahin, agle episode mein hum sab log mutant bananas honge, aur Dr. Salunkhe ke antidote invent karne tak waise hi case solve bhi karenge. Bhool gaye Singh sir kya bole the aaj subah?

Freddy sir - (remembering) Oh, haan! Sorry sir, main toh bhool hi gaya tha...

Daya sir - Koi baat nahin Freddy, hum sab ka kuch aisa hi haal hai. Ye sab daanav-daitya waale episodes karne ke baad reel aur real ke beech difference hi nahin dikhta!

Daya sir's phone rings and he attends to it.

Daya sir - Hello... oh, good evening sir! Accha... issi waqt? OK sir... hum aate hain. (To Freddy sir) ACP sir ne turant bureau aane ko kaha hai. Chalo.

Duo and Freddy sir arrive at the bureau to see ACP sir looking unusually somber. Duo exchange meaningful glances, and all three of them approach him.

Daya sir - Good evening, sir. Kya hua? Aap pareshaan lag rahe hain?

ACP sir - Haan Daya. Ek khabar hai... ab buri hai ya acchi, khud hi sun lo. Abhi thodi der pehle Singh sir ka phone aaya tha.

Duo and Freddy sir wonder what new fantasy stunt is in store for them now.

Abhijeet sir - Kya kaha unhone, sir?

ACP sir - Plans thode change ho gaye. Suna hai Scottish Airlines ke tickets 80% kam ho gaye hain ek hafte ke liye, isliye hum logon ko Scotland mein ek special episode shoot karna hai.

Duo and Freddy sir - KYA??

Daya sir - Kaisa episode, sir?

ACP sir - (sighing after a brief pause) "Giraftaar Loch Ness Monster." Monster pe khoon ka ilzaam lagta hai aur humein usse begunaah saabit karna hai.

There's pin-drop silence in the bureau for 2 minutes.

Abhijeet sir - Loch Ness Monster? (chuckling) Ye... ye mazaak hai na, sir?

He fruitlessly checks the calendar to see if it's April Fool's Day.

ACP sir - Kaash mazaak hota Abhijeet. Par ye dekho, Tingu baba ki dukaan se Loch Ness Monster ka costume bhi order karwa diya hai.

He points to the corner where a giant deflated rubber doll of Barney the Dinosaur is kept.

Freddy sir - Par sir, seriously, Loch Ness Monster? Hum log toh Mumbai CID...

ACP sir - Ab kaun samjhaaye unhe, Freddy. Channel waalon ke orders hain! Suna hai iske baad Salunkhe ek time machine invent karega aur hum sab long Pliocene era mein chale jaayenge. Wahan aadi-manav murder case investigate karenge.

Everybody is stunned.

Abhijeet sir - (desperately) Matlab sir, ho sakta hai woh Fruit special cancel ho jaaye?

ACP sir - (sighing) Nahin, apna "CID Phal-Phool Rahasya" series World Fruit Day par broadcast hoga. Aur haan, Singh sir bole sirf bananas rakhenge toh boring hoga. Ye dekho list, tum sab ko kya-kya mutant fruit banna hai. Costumes order kar di hain.

They see the list:

ACP - Blackberry
Abhijeet - Apple
Daya - Mango
Freddy - Orange
Purvi - Grapes
Rajat - Plum
Sachin - Cherry
Shreya - Strawberry
Dr. Tarika - Pear
Nikhil - Watermelon
Pankaj - Pineapple

...and are left speechless.

ACP sir - Chalo ab tayyari shuru kar do! Agle hafte Scotland ke daldal mein hi camping karni hai.

He dismisses them. They don't hear him out of shock for two minutes until he's forced to shout and convey his message. They gradually leave, still stunned.

As Daya sir starts getting into his car, Abhijeet sir approaches him.

Abhijeet sir - Yaar Daya, kya hai ye? Jungle mein darinda maan liya, zombies maan liye, haathi ke size ka bhediya maan liya, jungle mein Jhingalala Hulu bhi kar liya... par Loch Ness Monster? Aur woh bhi Barney the Dinosaur? Aur phir sab ko aalu-tamatar bana denge??

Daya sir - (slyly) Boss, tumhara hi toh dialogue tha, karna padta hai!

Abhijeet sir - (with a small smile) Woh toh hai. Ab bhi kuch karna padega.

Daya sir - Accha? Woh kya?

Abhijeet sir - (sly smile) Mass bunking.

Daya sir - Huh??

Abhijeet sir - Hum sab ke tabiyat achaanak rahasyamai tareeke se kharaab ho jaayegi. Singh sir se bol denge unn fruit costumes se allergy ki wajah se hua hai. Mauke ka faayda uthake issi pe episode bhi banwa denge, ek CID-Adaalat crossover. Hum log toh hospital mein lete hi shooting kar lenge, aur phir "recover" hone ke baad leave leke sab vacation pe chalte hain.

Daya sir - (grinning) Kya baat! Daad deni padegi, boss. Waise vacation kahan manayenge?

Abhijeet sir - Aapke ghar mein. Ready rakhna sab kuch humari mehman-nawazi karne ke liye.

Daya sir - (laughing) Jaisa aap kahein. Chalo, jaldi se Freddy ko milkar batao apne plan ke baare mein. Warna woh aur baaki sab kilt aur bagpipes leke Scotland jaane ki tayyari shuru kar denge.

Both of them laugh heartily.

Edited by DemonStar - 10 years ago

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Sonali.

@Sonali.

IF-Dazzler

Posted: 10 years ago

Entry 5:

(This is my first attempt in WAS and after watching Abhijeet sir falling from the waterfall scene. I got really emotional and wrote this. Sorry if it is not meant to hurt anyone's feelings.)

At Daya's home Daya is having dinner and just the bell rings. Daya opens the door and it's Freddy.

Daya: Aree Freddy tum yahan aur woh bhi iss waqt? Aao Khana khaoge?

They come and sit at the dining table

Freddy: aree nahi sir, khana vana nahi chahiyee...

Daya: kya baat hain yaar, itne naraz kyun lag rahe ho...

Freddy: Sir aap ko pata hain naa iss baar team Satara jaa rahi hain

Daya: haan pata hain, par tumne toh chutti le rakhi hain naa tum naraz kyun ho? (phone rings) Hello, haan sir, okay amin aata hoon

Freddy: kya huva Sir?

Daya: ACP sir ka phone tha abhi bureau bulaya hain Chalo Freddy

In the bureau ACP sir, Abhijeet, Daya and Freddy present

Daya: baat kya hain sir?

ACP: tum logon ko toh pata hain naa... tumhe do din mein satara jaana hain

Daya: haan sir pata hain... Par huva kya hain?

ACP: Daya mujhe kuch khas sutron se pata chala hain ki Aditya ko wahan kisi jharne se girna padega!

Abhijeet, Daya, shocked

Daya: kya?

Abhijeet: par sir yeh toh

Freddy: Yeh toh zyatti hain sir...

Daya: haan sir agar Aditya ko kuch ho gaya toh...

ACP is speechless in some time he says

ACP: Iske protest mein... Main Salunkhe, Feddy aur baki sab iss sab ne iss series mein participate karne se inkaar kiya hain...

Daya: Main inn writers ko abhi Dekhta hoon sir... Jo chahenge who likhenge kya?

Daya moving forward towards his car

Abhijeet: Daya, ruko yaar meri baat toh suno...

Daya: Nai yaar tum yeh scene nahii karoge...

Abhijeet: scene likha jaa chukka hain sab tay ho gaya hain yaar... Main manage kar longa... Aur B.P sir ne kaha hain meri safety ka pura dhyaan rakenge.. don't worry..

Days is still angry. They both open the door of the car to sit

Abhijeet: (with a tensed expression) iss mein thoda khatra toh hain but I will manage... (smiles) Aur tum ho naa... Chalo ab hotel chalte hain... Freddy bata raha tha iss chakkar mein tumne khana bhi nahi khaya.. Aaj yeh dinner meri taraf se... They smile and sit in the car

Edited by Sonali. - 10 years ago

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@ANGELICEYES

IF-Rockerz

+ 2

Posted: 10 years ago

ENTRY 6
11.15 p.m.,
Restaurant parking
Daya : Maza aaya na Boss aaj restaurant mein khake? Kitna lajij khana tha..
Abhijeet : Haan bilkul lekin aur jyada maza ata agar bill tum pay karte toh.
Daya (with a naughty smile) : Boss, mere liye toh itne dino baad hum dono ko eksath waqt bitane ka mauqa mila yehi bohot hai.
Abhijeet : Hmm.. Tumhare wajah se hi aaj kal hum dono saath waqt nahi bita pate.
Daya (hurt) : Kya baat kar rahe ho Boss?
Abhijeet : Kyun sahi toh kahe raha hun.. Tum hi aaj kal 24 ghante Shreya aur Nikhil ko aapne saath lekar ghum te ho.
Daya : Abhijeet tum bhi? Kam se kam tum toh samjha karo. Main thodi unhe aapne saath leke ghumta hun. Wo dono hi humesha mera saath gum ke jaise chipke hue rahete hai.
Abhijeet (bursts into laugh and wink) : Kaun sa gum se chipke rahete hai? Fevicol ya Dendrite?
Daya : Are yaar yeh battese dikhana bandh karo.. Main toh tang aa gaya hun inse.Kabhi kabhi sochta hun ke tranfer leke kahin aur chala jaun.
Abhijeet : Haan yeh thik hai. Kardo application transfer ki uss DCP ke pass jaa kar.Kamse kam Shreya aur Nikhil se chutkara toh mil jayega tumhe.
Daya : Abhijeet, tum sach mein chahte ho ki tum logo ko chor ke? Ek minute ek minute..kahin tumhare dimag mein koi aur chakkar toh nahin chal raha hai?
Abhijeet : (let out a smirk) Aab tum sari baatein yahin khade hoke karoge kya? Ghar nahi jana. Chalo gadi mein baitho.
Both sit in the car and set off for their homes.
8.15 A.M.,
Next to next morning,
Daya's residence
The doorbell rings and Daya comes out after having a shower ready for going to bureau. He opens the door and finds his dear Freddy standing there with a bright face.
Freddy : Good morning Daya sir.
Daya : Are Freddy tum..itni subah subah. Aao ander aao.
Freddy : (bit hesitate and speak) Umm..wo kya haina Sir ki meri wife kal raat ko mayke gayi hai toh subah ka breakfast khud banane ka man nahi kar raha tha. Isliye socha ki..
Daya (laughing) : Freddy bas itni si baat. Tum bhi naa. Chalo baitho maine abhi khana shuru nahi ki hai.
Both take their chairs and start eating. Suddenly Daya's phone rings..he sees Abhijeet's name flashing on the screen
Daya : Good morning Boss..haan bolo..acha..kuch bataya..nahi, acha thik hai. Main ata hun. Freddy, haan wo mere sath hi hai..abhi aa rahe hai hum dono.
9.05 A.M.
CID Bureau
Daya and Freddy enter and see ACP sir and Abhijeet present there already with tense face. ACP sir is walking here and there agitatedly.
Daya : Kya hua Sir.. Abhijeet ne abhi abhi phone karke bataya aapne humlogo ko emergency taur par bulaya hai.
Abhijeet : Haan Sir aab toh bata dijiye. Daya aur Freddy bhi aa gaye hain.
Acp (agitatedly) : Pata nahi yeh DCP saab aapne aap ko samajhte kya hai. Jab jo marzi ayein karenge.
All get confused.
Freddy (in a worried tone) : Kyun sir aab kaunsi nayi musibat khari kar di hai unhone?
Acp (more agitatedly) : Kaal raat mujhe unka phone aaya tha yeh kah kar ki unhe Shreya aur Nikhil ne jo transfer application bheja tha wo unhone accept kar liya. Aur toh aur aaj subah subah hi uske written orders bhi bhej dia hai,wo dekho pada hai mere table pe.
Freddy gets totally confused. Here Duo just have a glance at each other and let out a smirk. Freddy : Magar sir DCP sir aisa kaise kar sakte hain achanak?
ACP : Wohi toh samajh mein nahi aa raha Freddy. DCP ka toh kahena hai ki dono ne khud unke office jake application di hai. Mujhe toh iss baat pe hairani ho rahi hai ki inndono mujhse ekbaar bhi baat nahin ki? Kuch toh gadbad hai(applying his own famous left hand rule)..jarur hai.
Abhijeet (clearing his throat) : Ahh..chodiye na sir iss baat ko. Chitrole ko toh aap jan tehi hai na..ek baar unhone koi commitment kar li toh khud ki bhi nahi sunte..
ACP (shocked) : Magar Abh..
Daya (trying badly to supress his joy) : Haan Sir jaane dijiye na. Waise bhi humari team toh aab army brigade ban chuka hai.Do officers kam ho jayenge toh kam karne mein hi asani hogi na.
ACP wants to say something to Duo giving a suspicious stare at them but at the moment the bureau phone rings. Freddy picks it up immediately : Hello CID Bureau..kahan pe..haan..humlog aate hai abhi and turns to ACP sir : Sir Bandra ke ek Hotel mein do foreign tourists ke laash mili hai. Humein abhi chalna hoga.
ACP : Hmm..thik hai.. Chalo chalte hai phir.
ACP and Freddy move towards the main door. Here Duo just hi-five and burst into laughter.
Daya : Thank you Boss, thank you so much. Jaan chuti meri aab toh.
Abhijeet : Kya yaar Daya. Dost hai hum tumhare. Tumhare liye itna nahi karenge toh kis ke liye karenge. Aur phir mujhe Shreya se baar baar rumal nikalne ke dialogue bhi nahi bolne padenge. Aur agar thanks bolna hi hai toh next time hotel ka bill tum de dena. (Daya gives a shy, cute smile)Aab chalo jaldi. Daya nods in smile and both leave for crime spot.Edited by ANGELICEYES - 10 years ago

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ENTRY #: 7

CAP: One

FREDDIE ring the Bell continuously but Nothing happened, then He knocked the Door, Same Result... Lastly tried to Bang the Door but Nobody coming to Open the Door, He looked Back found DAYA Deary Quillas so taken out His Cell and Dialing His Number, Nobody Picking Up either He placed His Ears over Door so hearing a Ringing Tone from inside... He takes a Big Sigh and taken Out a KEY and pushed it inside and after a Click Voice, He was moving inside...

DAYA who was coming at Dinning Side looking for something and found FREDDIE in front of Him so Ask Confusingly...

DAYA: Arry FREDDIE, Tum... Yahan... Aur Ander Kesy aayey..?

FREDDIE (moving with him): DAYA Sir, Main Kub say Doorbell baja raha tha, phir Darwaza bhi Knock kiya aur Aap ko phone tou Continously kr raha tha.. aakhir mein Aap Kay Ghar ki KEY say Darwaza khola hay...

DAYA (Shock): DII... (confuse) Kaun sii DII... (before FREDDIE correcting Him, He moving His head with) acha acha wo Jo Meri aur ANSHA ki Shadi waly Epi mein theen... (relax) wesay wo aak Tum ko kesy yaad aa gayein.. haan...

FREDDIE (who sat on Dinning Chair with DAYA takes a Tense Sigh and said with Loud tone): DAYA Sir, DII Nahi KEY... (showing) Chabi...

DAYA (angry after looking at KEY): Ye tou Mery Ghar ki Chabi hay FREDDIE, Tumharay pass kahan say aayii...?

FREDDIE (sad): Sir, Aap ye Buruea...

DAYA (cutting in shock): kya Tum Europe ja rahy ho... (rash) Kaam kaun karay ga.. Haan...

FREDDIE really Pitty on DAYA, Before He say anything, DAYA Cell started Ringing but He did not Bother... FREDDIE gives Him the Cell after finding that DAYA did not Hear the Ringer... DAYA picked...

DAYA: Hello... Kaun.?

ABHIJEET: ain, DAYA... Aby kya Mera Naam Nahi flash ho raha screen pr...

DAYA: bolo bhi, (irritate) kya Ghaan Ghaan kr rahy ho...

ABHIJEET Shocked after hearing this and cuts the Call, He was thinking that after Yesterday Shoot FREDDIE Complained Him about DAYA as.

FREDDIE: ABHIJEET Sir, DAYA Sir ko na kuch ho Gaya hay...?

ABHIJEET (funny tone): kya Phir koi Daura par Gaya hay Ganjy Honay Kay baad...

FREDDIE: Sir, DAYA Sir ko Sunai Nahi day raha.

ABHIJEET look at Him in Shock either at that moment He pulled FREDDE Leg or telling Him that might be DAYA playing any Prank with Him but after dealing the Recent Moment, He was in Shock... He instantly SMSed FREDDIE to bring DAYA with Him at Bureau while He was telling all to ACP Sir in Call with Tension...

CAP: Two

ACP Sir Strolling In Anger before DAYA and FREDDIE arrival... He expelled out his Anger regarding DAYA as...

ACP (harsh): Mujhy tou Pehlay hee say Fikr thi... kuch na kuch tou Bura hoga DAYA kay sath... Ufff... Becharay ki Jaan Aik Musibat say Nikalti nahi kay Dusri Sar pr Khari...

ABHIJEET: haan Sir., Itni Mushkilun say tou Usy AC DUCT PHOBIA say bahar nikala tha... Poori Garmi ka Season jahan AC DUCT dekhata, Bha Bha kr kay rona shroo kr deta... Phir RISHIKESH mein DHENCHU ko Apnay Locket ka Aadha Hissa tour kr Pehna diya aur kehnay laga ye Mera BHAI hay... Bachpan mein RISHEKESH mein Ganga kinay Kho gaya tha... abhi us Tension say Nikla Nahi tha kay... ISHQ WALY LOVE nay tou Becharay tou Bawla hee bana diya...

ACP (tense): haan aur is LOST ISLAND waly Epi nay tou bacha Kuch sub Cheen liya... kal JHINGA LALA HUM HUM kr raha tha...

ABHIJEET (tense tone): aur Sir, Kal kay Shoot kay baad tou Mujhy Gari say bhi Uterny Nhai day raha tha kay , Hath pakr kay bolnay laga... Tujhy Main chorun ga nahi...

ACP (after a second): agar FREDDIE Saheh keh raha hay ABHIJEET tou DAYA ko DR kay Pass lay jana Zaruri hay...

ABHIJEET: Jee Sir, warna tou...

FREDDIE with Difficulty taking DAYA to Bureau Where ACP Sir and ABHIJEET already Presented and in Tension... DAYA stand with FREDDIE and ABHIJEET glanced towards ACP Sir and initiated...

ABHIJEET: Sir, Aap khud batayein, sub ko Malum hay Kay Mujhy Height Phobia hay... Magar Mujhy hee Gira diya... Kya ye Scene RAJAT ya SACHIN Nahi kr Sakta tha..?

ACP: phir Un ki TRP kesay barhti ABHIJEET... Ye Log Na Humein Pagal bana kr Chorein gay...

ABHIJEET: Wohi tou Sir agar DAYA Nahi hota (looking at DAYA keenly but found nothing, look at ACP again in tension and completed His sentence) tou Mera Bachna tou Mushkil... (suddenly in Emotional tone) hain na DAYA, agar Tu Nahi...

ACP Turn and found DAYA did not Respond, All really in Tension, ACP and ABHIJEET discussed that before DAYA and FREDDIE arrival that they will not ask this to DAYA or about any Problem in Direct contact because it Hurts Him so just in Discussing, Keenly Observe Him and trying to find any Problem and if Yes, take Him Immediate to Doctor...

ACP: DAYA...

DAYA did not Respond again so FREDDIE Jerked Him who comes in Rash with...

DAYA: kya hua FREDDIE (to ACP) Jee Sir, Kahyey... (briefing) Sorry Sir, aany mein kuch Der ho gayii... Aik tou Ye FREDDIE na, bolnay laga DAYA Sir, pehlay Shirt badal lein... phir kehna laga kay Mochein Katwa kay aur Baal barha kr chalyey... itna Time bhi laga diya Saloon mein... itni Mushkil say Kuch Dhang ki Wig mili hay (to ABHIJEET) kyun Boss, lug Nhai raha na kay Main Wig pehna hua hun...

ACP and ABHIJEET exchanged Glance and ACP Nod in Positive, ABHIJEET taken Out DAYA for Immediate Check up...

CAP: Three

ABHIJEET trying to Open Car Door and DAYA open His Mouth in Ordering Tone...

DAYA: TAJ...

ABHIJEET Stunned, He looked at DAYA whose Eyes started Sparkling so trying to Hit Him but DAYA saved Himself after changing His Position... ABHIJEET Rash...

ABHIJEET (rash): Sahab nay Acha Drama Khela ... Behray Honay Ka... aur phir GAJNI ban kr aa gaya aur Mochein bhi... ain...

DAYA: jub Do Larkiyaan Tumharay Kaan Kay pass itni Zor Zor say Ceekhein gi na tou Malum ho jayey ga... aur Wig utar dii hay, aur Mochein (wink) jaali...

ABHIJEET: Bako Nahi... Wesay kiya kyun...?

DAYA: Hum Next Series mein EPI mein Nahi Hun gay...

ABHIJEET (inquire tone): Hum Matlab...

DAYA (smiles): ab Main aur Tum alug alug thori hain Boss...

ABHIJEET: acha, wahan Forum mein tou GD nay wabal machwa diya hay... Us Ka tou khayal hay Kay Hum mein Dosti bhi Nahi hay...

DAYA (harsh): choro, Bekaar mein bak bak karti hay... Mujh say Narazgi hay na... Badnaam karti phir Rahi hay...

ABHIJEET (shock): ain ... Mujhy kyun...

DAYA: Us ki TRP Tactice hay Kay Badnaam na hon gay tou kya naam na ho ga... Dekho EK Comment say Forum mein DUO ko Back Karwa diya...

ABHIJEET: hmm.. Aur Hum Next Series mein kyun Nahi hon gay..?

DAYA: Shart lagi hay.?

ABHIJEET: kis pr.?

DAYA: Kaun Bany Ka Acha Cook...

ABHIJEE (start Laughing with): Ohhh acha... Chh.. Chh... Hotel wala Order Nahi lay raha hoga... hain na...

DAYA (embarrass): Jee Nahi, aur Tum na... Bekaar kay Rumors Na phailao... Main nay bola hay na Main sub ko Apnay Ghar bula kr Khud Khana bana kr Khilaon ga ...

ABHIJEET (tease): magar is Dawat mein Biryani Ka Zikr kahein Nahi tha... aur Shahab Kay Liyey tou MAGGIE bhi Acha Khana hoti hay...

DAYA (Embarrass with): kya Boss...

ABHIEET: Wesay Shart lagi kya hay..?

DAYA : Usy Meri Blue Bhangaar Shirt aur Grey Joggers Chahayey...

ABHIJEET: Ain... Acha chal Blue Bhangar Shirt tou Samjh aati hay Kay WO Khud Pehan lay gi, Pr Joggers... (confuse) Us Ka Kya...

DAYA (angry): Kirayey pr chalyey gi aur...

ABHIJEET: haahaahah, Nice Idea aur ye AUR kya hay..?

DAYA: Meray Hair Stylist say Meray Baal Nikalwa Liyey hain... Hr Rent Kay sath 4 Baal ka Free Voucher bhi Customer ko milay ga...

ABHIJEET: hahahhaah... Zabaradst... Good... Wesay Teray Hairstylist Nay Teray Baal Rakkhy he kyun thy..?

DAYA (angry after sitting inside car): tou SALUNKHY Sir ki Wig mein kis Kay Baal Hr Saal lagtay hain...

ABHIJEET (look at Him in Shock and then Bursts Laugh with wink): jabhi Main kahun, Us Wig say Mujhy itna Apnapan kyun feel hota hay...

DAYA penetrates His Anger inside Accelerator while ABHIJEET still Laughing, Both Destination was Obviously TAJ...

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Posted: 10 years ago

Hello friends!! 😃 Okay first of all it is my first time participating in any Write A Scene contest which means this is probably not the best but I have written it with my heart and soul and would appreciate if I get as much feedback as possible. 😳 So here you go my first attempt...😊

Entry 8:

13th October 2013, 9.00am

At Daya's House...

*Freddy arrives at Daya's house and rings the doorbell quite a few times. Daya opens the door and looks worried*.

Daya: Arre Freddy tum...iss waqt yahan?! 😲 Kya baat hain sab teekh toh hain na?! *confused* 😕 aaj phir bhabhi ke saath jagrah hua kya? 😆 *with a naughty smirk on his face* 😛 Accha chalo aao mere saath breakfast bhi karlo phir baat karte hain! 😃 *both of them take their seats*

Freddy: Arre nahi sir nahi aisa kuch bhi nahi hain...woh bas
woh...errr...*hesitating to speak further* 😳

Daya: Kya hua Freddy?! Bolo bolo daro mat! 😊

Freddy: Woh Daya sir baat yeh hain ki aapko abhi issi waqt bureau chalna hoga...ACP sir ne urgently bulaya hain aapko wahan. Chalye aap mere saath warna aaj ACP sir mujhe maar dale ge...chalye na sir! 😳

Daya: Lekin Freddy itni bhi kya jaldi hain?! 😲 Abhi toh sirf 9.00am baje hain aur koi case bhi nahi hain toh phir kya baat hain itni urgent? 😕

Freddy: *Getting frustrated* Chalye na sir bas chalye aur kuch nahi bas!!! 🥱

Daya: Accha teekhe chalo! 😊

*Both of them head to the bureau*

At 9.15am

At the bureau...

*Freddy and Daya enter quickly and when they arrive everyone is confused on looking at ACP sir*

Daya: Kya hua sir?! Itni urgently kyun bulaya mujhe???? Sab teekh toh hain na?? 😳 Abhijeet tum batao kya hua? 😕

Abhijeet: Arre yaar Daya meh bhi yahan pe adhe gante se karah hoon lekin ACP sir kuch bata hi nahi rahe!! 🤔

Freddy: Arre Abhijeet sir simple si baat hogi!! *Freddy interrupts to make the atmosphere a bit jolly* Zaroor ACP sir ko khazana mil gaya hoga aur woh soch rahe hain kahan chupaoo...haina ACP sir?!!!! 😆

ACP sir: *breaking his long silence* NAHI!! 😲 Aisi koi baat nahi hain Freddy!! Tum chup hi raho!!

*Everyone is shocked and tensed* 😲

ACP sir: Daya aur Abhijeet aaj ek aisa din hain jisse hum sab kabhi nahi bula sakte!! Aisa din joh hamare liye kaas gar tumhare liye bohot maiiine (precious in hindi) rakhta hain! ❤️ Socho tum dono aaj ke din kya hua tha?!! 😳

*Abhijeet and Daya start thinking and can't remember anything*

Abhijeet: Kuch bhi nahi sir...! 🤔

Daya: Yaad nahi aa raha sir...aap hi bata di jiye na!! 😉

ACP: KYA?! Yaad nahi aa raha aaj ka din?? Kuch toh gadbad hain kuch toh gadbad hain!!! 😳

Freddy: *interrupts again* sir aaj toh...*whispers in ACP's ear* 😲

Abhijeet: Kya hua sir hame tension ho rahi hain?

Daya: Kya batao Freddy please!!

*After 30 minutes of confusion,,,,Daya and Abhijeet shout*

Duo: Aaj ke din toh hum dono dost banne theh!! ⭐️

*ACP sir and Freddy clap and cheer!!*

ACP: Haan sahi bilkul sahi Daya aur Abhijeet,,,,aaj yahi khaas din hain! 👏

Freddy: Toh celebrations toh banti hain!! 😛

ACP: Bilkul Freddy!

Daya: Arre nahi sir kya aap bhi?!

Abhijeet: Haan sir...koi zaroorat nahi hain!! 😳

ACP: *puts on his stern voice* NAHI!! Ab jo mai boloo ga wahi hoga!! 😎

*Abhijeet and Daya nod their heads agreeing to every word ACP sir says*

ACP: Toh chalo chalte hain...celebrate karne...ussi restaurant pe jahan par hum sab last time gaye the! 😛 Iss baar dyhaan rakna ki Purvi aur Shreya phir se kidnap na ho jaye! 😆 *Everyone laughs* 😆

*Everyone heads to the venue*

At 11.00pm...

*Celebrations end with everyone going home happily*

*Daya stops Abhijeet*

Daya: Rukho Abhijeet!

Abhijeet: Haan kya baat hain Daya??! 😕

Daya: Chalo mai tumhe drop kar deta hoon! Chalo behto! 😃

Abhijeet: Accha teekhe mere dost kardo...tum mannhe toh nahi wale! 😉

*Both laugh* 😆

Daya: Saach mein Abhijeet aaj hum dono ne iss anmol dosti ke 16 years complete kiye...saach mein bohot aacha lag raha hain!

Abhijeet: Dosti? Sirf dosti? 😲 Nahi Daya aaj humne hamare brothers ke rishte ke bhi 16 years pure kiye aur mai aaj kitna kush hoo main bata bhi nahi sakta! ⭐️

Daya: Haan sahi baat!! 👍🏼 Tumhe pata hain Abhijeet...inn saare saalo mein mujhe kabhi bhai ya dost ki kami kabhi mesoos nahi hui! ❤️ Kyonki tum theh jisne mujhe hamesha aapna kandha diya siir rakhne ke liye! 🤗

Abhijeet: Haan sab pata hain! 😊 Aaj hum promise karte hain ki hum aakrhi daam takh saath nahi chode ge...saache dost saache bhai ban ke rahe ge chahe kuch bhi ho jaye!! 😃

Daya: Arre yeh promise toh hamne apni phele mulakat phe hi kar diya tha!! 😉

Abhijeet: Accha mujhe laga ki tumhe kaha yaad hoga?! 😛

Daya: Kyun? 😕

Abhijeet: Kyonki tum toh hamesha Nikhil ko healthy recipes sikhate rahete ho aur Shreya ko bajate rahete ho! Ahem Ahem! 😛

Daya: Nahi yaar Abhijeet aisa kuch nahi hain!! 😆

Abhijeet: Pata hain mazak kar raha hoon!! 😊

Daya: Accha mai tumhare liye kuch laya hoon! 😃

Abhijeet: Kya? 😕

*Daya takes out two friendship bands out of his pocket*

Daya: Usdin tumne Satara mein aapni jaan dene waale theh aur tumhne ek baar mere baare mein hamari iss dosti ke baare mein nahi socha! 😭

Abhijeet: Haan...sorry Daya...mein tumhari jaan kese risk pe daal sakta tha...😳

Daya: Chup ekdum chup! 🥱 Ye lo Abhijeet yeh friendship band aaj mein tumhe penhata hoon 🤗 *Daya ties a friendship band on Abhijeets hand* (the flashback is shown when Abhijeet was letting go of Daya's hand 😒) tumhare haath pe taakhi aagli baar jab tum mera haath chodne ki baat karo tho tumhe yeh friendship band tumhe kaske pakar ke rokle...hamari dosti ko yaad kar kar please hazar baar sochna ki tum kya kar rahe ho! ❤️

Abhijeet: Arre...thank you so much Daya! 😃 *he also ties a friendship band around Daya's hand* Accha mein promise karta hoon ki yeh hamesha phenkar rakhoo ga aur kabhi aisi harkat nahi karoo ga aur iss friendship band ko hamari dosti ki tarah hamesha sabse special rakhoo ga apni zindagi mein! ⭐️

Daya: Yeh hui na baat! 👏 Ab chalo ghar chalte hain!

*Both sit in the car and drive off*
Edited by pinkpearl5 - 10 years ago

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