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Ek Hazaaron Mein Meri Behna Hain

"Raksha''Bandhan : OS

Neha.K. IF-Sizzlerz
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Posted: 18 August 2013 at 10:37am | IP Logged

"Diii" She mumbled as soon as she heard the sound of the glass bangles hissing, striking with each other and her fav. soothing anklets sound.. She turned behind and tried to find her..

"Kya di, ek toh humein poore saal baad ek dusre ko dekhne ka mauka milta hai aur ispe bhi aap itna time waste kar rahi ho, bas ab aur zyada mat tadpao"
She tried to find her looking here and there

"Tere jitna toh nahin tadpa sakti na main tujhe'' She replied.

"Mere bas mein hota toh main aapke aankh se ek aansoo tak na girne deti Di" She pitched her voice lower.

"Woh toh ab bhi kahan girte hain.." She said smiling weakly, "Ab pehle mujhe dekh toh lene de tujhe jee bhar ke.. main badi hun na.. isliye tujhse zyada mera haq banta hai apni behan ko jee bhar ke nihaarne ka aur wait bhi toh main hi zyada karti hun na"

"Diii, aap bhi na, acha ab bhi jao saamne, werna main Maa ko bol dungi" and she looked at me saying, ''Dekh lo Maa, di ab saamne ni aa rahi, inse kaho mujhe tadpana band kare werna main bhi chup jaungi"

I literally smiled in my own way looking at both of them.. They are STILL imposibble.. Aaj tak samajh nahin paayi ki yeh insaan hi hain ya kya... ya itna samajh gayi hun ki mann karta hai inn dono ko apne mein kahin aise samaa lun ki koi dono ko judaa na kar paaye..

"Nautanki kahin ki" and she saw her appearing infront of herself smiling widely..  Closing the distance between them, she pulled her into a tight embrace... Hugging each other as tightly as they could, they cried out loudly..  This was the only day when they got to cry their hearts out, when they got to see each other, when they got to live the whole 1 year in  these 24hours..

"Kitni dubli ho gayi hai tu" She said looking at  her baby sis from her head to her toe..

"Haan aur aap toh jaise dara singh ban gayi ho na.. Diii, seriously? ab bhi yeh baat kar rahi ho aap... pata hai aapko na yeh dialogue maarne ki aadat pad chuki hai bachpan se... kahin main hatti katti tun tun bhi ban jaaun na toh bhi aap yahi kahogi ki Mannu tu kitni dubli ho gayi hai haha..par afsos woh toh ab ho ni sakta na..'' She sighed, a dull smile gracing the corner of her lips..

"Chup kar aur apna plan bata.. werna mere paaas toh mast plan hai aaj ke liye"

''Nai chahiye aapka plan... aur waise bhi iss baar meri baari hai.. jo Mannu kahegi wohi didi karegi''

''Haanjiii kyun nahin.. jaisi aapki ichha baalike''


and they laughed out loudly... and soon they came in their fav positions.. Her head on her Di's lap and her hand stroking her hair.. Moments were passing beautifully for them as they waited for it..

''Di ek baat bolun?"

"hmmm"

"Gussa toh nai karogi"

"Bol Mannu"

"Aapka wapis jaane ka mann ni karta"
  She asked looking up at her still lying in her lap..

She literally shivered listening to this.. She wrapped her tightly pulling her more closer, '' Nai Mannu... kabhi nahin.. aur iske do kaaran hai.. Sabse pehla aur sabse bada yeh ki Main tujhse door nahin hona chahti hamesha ke liye.. aur doosra kaaran yeh hai ki main use iss baar jeetne nahin dungi" She said with lil anger looking above at the sky..

Manvi felt some known hatered and pain in her touch.. so she just hugged her back.. Jeevika took her head in her hands and looked at her for a long time.. then kissing her forhead with so imense love, she made her sit properly in front of her and took out a Rakhi to tie it on her hand...

"Mannu koi aur samajh paaye ya na par Tu toh jaanti hai na hum shuru se Rakhi kyun baandhte aaye hain..  yeh Rakhi chahe hum ek dusre ko kalayi pe baandhte hain par hamesha se iski dor humare dilon ko ek saath baandhe rakhti aayi hai...  Humne kabhi yeh dor kamzor nahin padne di aur naa hi main ise kamzor ya tootne dena chahti hun wapis jaa ke... toh ek baat gaanth baandh le mannu.. Teri di tere liye thi, hai aur rahegi... Tere saath main Mar ke bhi jee sakti hun, par tere bina jee ke bhi main zinda nahi reh sakti Mannu aur yeh baat tu ache se jaanti hai..Aur woh jise log pathar se banaa ke poojte hain..woh ek baar toh jeet gaya humse.. lekin iss baar main use jeetne nahin dungi...Itnaa door kar chuka hai humein par ab aur nahin karne dungi...

Diii bas... shaant ho jao...I am sorry di... Mujhe pata hai ki aapki sabse badi khushi Main hun, phir bhi pata nahin kyun yeh topic leke baith jaati hun.. kya karun.. aapke jitna hi pyar aapse main bhi karti hun na... kabhi kabhi lag jata hai bura sa ki meri wajah...

"Chupp Mannu.. bas ho gaya ab... yeh topic close aur ab jaldi se meri sooni kalayi bhi sajaa de..."
She said forwarding her hand..

Manvi took her hand, kissed it and then tied a Rakhi on her wrist...

and this is what they do every year.. I still remember the day when people brought Manvi to me.. It was a scary painful night...  As soon as I took her into my arms, i saw Jeevika falling lifeless..  people took her back leaving Manvi to me but i couldnt handle her... That night there was a painful noise inside me.. i was feeling burdened... Her cries were making me restless.. Log kehte hain ki main logon ko mukti deti hun, par pehli baar koi mujh mein samaa ke bhi tadap raha tha...  Jahan meri baahon mein aake log sukoon mehsoos karte hain wahin meri baahon mein koi qaid mehsoos kar raha tha... Ajeeb si hulchul machi thi usmein bhi aur uski wajah se mujh mein bhi...

Kehte hain bhagwan ke niyam koi nai badal sakta.. par kabhi kabhi Bhagwan ko khud hi badalne padte hain.. aur kyun na badle woh jab Aisa pyar ho do logon ke beech... jahan ek ko mere andar hone ke bawjood bhi bechaini ho rahi thi aur dusre ne jeene se hi mana kar diya tha.. tab bhagwan ko jhukna pada tha..badalne pade the apne niyam... chaahe poori tarah nahin par kuch toh karna hi tha inn dono ke liye..  aur tabhi inn dono ko iss din milne ki anumati mili thi... Yeh Rakshabandhan ka din jis din ka dono poora saal besabri se intezaar karti hai.. Kudrat ka yeh niyam aisa hai ki dono itni paas hoti hain par phir bhi ek dusre ke liye tadapti hain... Ek jo apna bejaan shreer chod yahan meri chaukhat pe baithi rehti hai iss umeed se ki uski Mannu mujh mein se nikal ke use milne aayegi ..aur dusri usi chaukhat pe sar jhukaaye mujh mein se bahar nikalne ka intezaar karti hai...
Kabhi kabhi khud ko sambhalna mushkil ho jata hai jab bina yeh jaane ki jahan woh sir jhukaa ke ro rahi hai woh uski didi ki godd hai jiske liye woh ro rahi hai... Kudrat ke saare niyam badal daalne ko mann karta hai jab woh meri lehron ko choone ki koshish karti hai Bina yeh jaane ki woh apni Mannu ka sir sehlaa rahi hai...
Meri hi aankhon ke saamne itne paas hoke bhi unmein poore ek saal ki doori hoti hai... Par inke liye yeh ek din hi inke chaaron jahaan hote hain.. bhool jaati hain yeh ek saal ki tadap iss ek din mein..Duniya ke liye Ek mar chuki hai aur dusri Zinda laash hai par Mere liye dono mere saamne jeeti hai.. aur jee rahi hai toh sirf ek dusre ke liye... aur Main.. main dekhti hi reh jaati hun.. aur Ek Maa kar hi kya sakti hai...
Haan.. Maa... Maa hi toh hun main inki... mere hi paas toh badi hui hain yeh... aur mere paas hi rehti hain.. Shankar bhagwan ki jattaton ki qaid se nikal ke inn behno ki qaid mein jakdi hui Main GANGA aur yeh Meri bachiyon ki kahaani :)


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I dont know if it made sense or not.. i felt like writing it so just wrote it..

Do leave ur reviews... thankuuu

and Happy Rakshabandhan to all of YOU :)

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Amii90 IF-Dazzler
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Posted: 18 August 2013 at 10:41am | IP Logged
Originally posted by Neha.K.

Kehte hain bhagwan ke niyam koi nai badal sakta.. par kabhi kabhi Kabhi kabhi khud ko sambhalna mushkil ho jata hai jab bina yeh jaane ki jahan woh sir jhukaa ke ro rahi hai woh uski didi ki godd hai jiske liye woh ro rahi hai... Kudrat ke saare niyam badal daalne ko mann karta hai jab woh meri lehron ko choone ki koshish karti hai Bina yeh jaane ki woh apni Mannu ka sir sehlaa rahi hai...


Undoubtedly, this has to be one of your BEST work on Jeeman- period!!! I remember you mentioning the concept of them celebrating Rakhi while one of them is not physically present in the world and I had not thought in my wildest dreams that it can yet be so powerful and emotionally charged!! Absolutely Brilliant and again, only YOU can generate such ideas without disappointing the readers as you do complete justice to the concept as it comes with pure conviction! Innovative at its level best and such emotional piece of work that probably has hit the deepest core of Jeeman relationship and bonding - "Hamesha Ke Baad Bhi"!!! I love the entire OS but obviously the part quoted above is just spectacular which highlights the trio that exists within each other and for each other- Jeeman, God, and Ganga- one cannot think of Jeeman without these elements!

Emotional enough like I said and obviously made me teary eyed and more for the reason that the show failed on all levels to cash on such beautiful concept and chemistry of the sisters and I wouldn't have mind if the ending of the show had been something similar along the lines of your OS! What is worse that they have managed to contradict their own storyline and have disrespected all that was associated with Jeeman and one such pulling factor was "Ganga" where both of them confided their worries and thoughts but alas even that was not spared from the wrath!!!

But anyways coming back to your work, I think it is something that would provide solace for all the disappointment and sadness we have been bearing since last few months and would be etched in our memories forever- last Rakhi sequence of the show has indeed been the best courtesy of you and your writing skills! Thank You
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Edited by Amii90 - 22 August 2013 at 5:47pm

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Posted: 18 August 2013 at 10:45am | IP Logged
Wonderfull OS.. This kind of realisation was badly needed.. :)

Mwah.. <3

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Posted: 18 August 2013 at 11:06am | IP Logged
One word:perfect
Made me remember da relation of jeeman ruined by da CVs
Awesome OS
Sweet!!!
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Posted: 18 August 2013 at 11:13am | IP Logged
Perfect Clap
Di this OS is Mind blwoing Approve Seriously JeeManHug
U are too good u know
Love u di Hug

Edited by _Maggie_ - 18 August 2013 at 12:17pm
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Posted: 18 August 2013 at 11:26am | IP Logged
Awesome os...
Jeeman is one of the best sisters i have ever seen in tv...
The way u describ their bond just awesome...
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Posted: 18 August 2013 at 12:18pm | IP Logged
Res!
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Posted: 18 August 2013 at 1:12pm | IP Logged
Awesome os...
Jeeman is one of the best sisters i have ever seen in tv...
The way u describ their bond just awesome...
 i just loved it to the core of my heart  and thanks for the pm to dearSmileSmile

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