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Kehta Hai Dil... Jee Le Zara
Kehta Hai Dil... Jee Le Zara

SARUV OS ^^ LAMENTING LOVE ^^

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Posted: 17 August 2013 at 7:36am | IP Logged
HEYA GUYZZ :) 
IM NEW IN THIS FORUMS (actually everyone is ) 
and thought to write an os (one shot) on saruv 
but firstly i would like to introduce myself 
im ANMOL CHOPRA u can call me anu ...im 13 and will turn 14 in nov.  ( i know im really young to write an os ) and im from delhi,INDIA so enough of my bakbak here goes my os -


there are 2 things u should keep in mind while reading 
1- there are just 4 charecters in the story -- 

 A. DHRUV- CHIEFTAIN OF RAIGHAR 
B. SACHI  - YUVRANI OF RAIGHAR
C. BRIJRAJ - FATHER OF SACHI AND KING OF RAIGHAR  
D. A BOATMEN 

2. ITS NOT A HAPPY ENDING STORY ...IT WILL BE SAD IM TELLING U IN ADVANCE 
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2 people coming running 
man - jaldi karo ...run fast we don't have much time 
women - i can't run ...main aur nhi bhag sakti !!!!
man- don't give up ...he closes is eyes took a dreap breath and open his eyes and continue speaking - agar mujhse pyar karti ho toh plzzz mere sath chalo...
women slightly looses her grip on his hands which she was holding tightly in her hands 
man looks at her in shock 
women tighlty inter winds her fingers with his and start running very fastly 
they reach the sea shore 
man - hey u ...pointing towards a guy standing next to a boat 
   suno idhar aao 
boatsman points towards himself and says me ??? 
man- aur koi dikh rha hain yaha ???? 
boatsman - han bolo kya hua 
man - jaldi hume yaha se dhur ...dusri taraf le chalo main tumhe bohot paise dunga 
boatsman in hypertone - kya ??? pagal toh nahi ho gye bade saheb (sir )...itni tez tufan mein aap chahte ho ki main tumhe dusri taraf le kar jau ??? ho kon tum ??? han  ??? 
man - im chieftain of raighar DHRUV and pointing towards the women he says with proudness  AND SHE IS HER HIGHNESS YUVRANI OF RAIGHAR...
boatsman bow down and say - maf karna bade saheb ...lekin iss mausam main jana theek nahi hoga 
dhruv - tum samaj nhi rhe ho ...hume yaha bohot khatra hain ...hum dono teen din se bhag rhe hain ...plzz do not tarry anymore ...
still seeing that boatsman was not convinced so he continues 
horsemen of maharaj is behind us jaldi karo warna they will discover our footsteps ...
after taking a pause of 2 mins he continued - think who will cheer my bonny bride ?? when they will stain her love ?? 
after listening to the story boatsman say - i'll go my chief, i'm ready ...its not for your money but for your winsome lady ..and by my word my boat in danger shall not tarry ..though the waves are raging white ..i'll drop you to the other side 
by this the strom grew loud quickly ...the water - wraith was shrieking 
and every passing moment was growing dark ...
but still as wilder blew the wind 
and as the night grew drearer 
coming down the armed men their stamping sounded nearer 
plzz be fast ..plzz be fast ...the yuvrani cries ...
though the tempests round us gather ...i'll meet the raging of skies , but not an angry father 

finally the boat left a stormy land 
a land of fear for yuvrani and chief 
a land where the saw each other 
a land where they fell in love with each other
a land from where they were running 

but still a stormy sea was still to be crossed 
the water was prevailing the human power ...the waves were conquering  them 
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maharaj reached the fatal shore 
a deadly shore his wrath was changed to wailing 
for, sore dismaye'd through strom and shade 
his child he did discovered 
one hand she strech'd for aid ..for help 
and other was round her love 
"come back come back " he cried in vain 
and i'll forgive u and chieftain...
oh my daughter - my daughter 
but it was all in vain : the loud waves lash'd the shore 
the water wild went over his child 
and he was left LAMENTING 
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yes the lovers were no more
 the deadly sea ...
the sea where they first saw each other ate them ...there they took their last breath in each other's arms ...there they were lying dead ...in eachother's arms with their beloved they spent their whole life in 3 days being together thogh they were hiding ...they were running but they were with eachother till the last breath .....

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so guyzz it was it i know it was really a bakwas sorry sorry if u didn't like it and i wasted ur time 
but if u liked it plzzz atleast hit the like button plzzz ...
and plzz give suggestions too 

LOVE ANMOL 

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Posted: 17 August 2013 at 7:42am | IP Logged
Hi AnmolSmile Even I am Any, so I will call u Anmol. You have written very well for a 13 yr old. Good work.Thumbs Up Keep writing...
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Posted: 17 August 2013 at 7:45am | IP Logged
Originally posted by ak75

Hi AnmolSmile Even I am Any, so I will call u Anmol. You have written very well for a 13 yr old. Good work.Thumbs Up Keep writing...

hey any :) 
thanxx alot yar :) 

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Posted: 17 August 2013 at 7:59am | IP Logged
It's really nice Anu, for the 1st time I've managed to understand the dialogues in hindi!!! Wink
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Posted: 17 August 2013 at 8:03am | IP Logged
Originally posted by Rishani7

It's really nice Anu, for the 1st time I've managed to understand the dialogues in hindi!!! Wink


thanxx a lot ...

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Posted: 17 August 2013 at 8:16am | IP Logged
must say it was simple and sweet.Nice..Smile (sad ending notwithstanding)..
you wrote with lot of heart anmol...
cheers!Thumbs Up

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Posted: 17 August 2013 at 8:18am | IP Logged
Originally posted by .nimmi.

must say it was simple and sweet.Nice..Smile (sad ending notwithstanding)..
you wrote with lot of heart anmol...
cheers!Thumbs Up

thanxx alot 
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Posted: 17 August 2013 at 8:46am | IP Logged
Anmol HugDont think its a bakwas story Embarrassed U write well at this age. Nice one dear. Embarrassed Keep writing. Smile

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