Hi Jenny,
I love the way you write this one, the stark difference to your other story, the genre and the style, a tricky concept and yet you do full justice ...proving your expertise as a writer...
I get Arnab's desire, his frustrations and his reasons ...had Khushi been an adult, he would never have dreamed of crossing the line which leads him to infidelity...and it's to protect her that he even decides to go to the courtesan, which probably was an accepted practise that time, especially amongst his social class and standing. The fact that he goes all the same ...and is already opening her buttons and even though he feels what Khushi does not know will not harm or hurt her, yes he does think of her, he has in his head committed adultery ..hence the shame and inability to meet her eyes and the shame he feels manifested in his anger towards the situation by being harsh to her. He has not gone all the way, and realises that girls age luckily ..and the gravity of what he was about to do, and leaves has been written brilliantly ...the confusion and the anguish...he is human and this is natural, but that he could get up and leave makes him the protagonist ...
I am not judging him, I have faith in him and his choices and decisions and it keeps me on the edge of my seat while reading, waiting to know what happens next...
Khushi as endearing as ever, wants to be a woman for him, craves for his attention not knowing the implications, the time he does touch her was in anger and hence has no comprehension of what being a woman has bit is a bit worried when she is told by thammi to let him do what he wants with her. I loved that !
I loved how she is worried for him and runs to him when she senses his arrival and clutches on to him and he shameful just appears callous with her giving rise to her rejection once more.
I loved how she has taken the steps she sees fit and has given by her doll, her solace and her companion in order to expedite her growth towards becoming a woman! Loved how he noticed the doll and immediately decides to go and speak to her and apologise, loved their candid conversation ...her aversion to being referred to as a child by him, his asking her why she is in a hurry to he a woman, her immediate response , so that she can live in his room, his surprise asking her why and her very matter of fact response...I want a baby...shocking him and amusing him like never before...and his laughing, I loved it ...loved it all ...a great step towards the future...I always say love, luck and laughter all three important for a real relationship...waiting for the next part Jen...
I hope I made sense, maybe got too carried away...sorry for the really delayed comment!
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