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Ariya FF:"Deception,Intrigue..."#2 *Author's Note* Pg50 (Page 48)

..Amri.. IF-Sizzlerz

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Posted: 16 September 2013 at 12:35pm | IP Logged

I can't believe it! Look who's here!!!

My dear Vampu, happy to have you back again.Hug

My replies in RED.

Originally posted by Vampire-queen

Ah commenting after so long!! You must be angry with meDisapprove
u should beUnhappy Yes, I am very angry. Kahaan chali gayi thi? I thought you didn't like the story any more.
i thought i could not miss the updateTongue
by reading both the parts again , i am again back to track of this storyWink. Tumne yeh kaha, isliye baksh rahi hoon:)

As you have said the part was all about the feelings of our hero and heroine.. Ah beautifully portrayed *claps*. Chal, abb makhan mat lagaAngry But seriously, thanks a lotSmile

First his surprised look, his being intoxicated by her.. And then realizing who she is.. Feeling her to the core. Senseing her more and more, clinging to her tightly and drewing to her towards him for being with himEmbarrassedBlushingBig smile, to never let go her away from himBlushingHeart.. The sudden expression of his loveHeart. Toone toh mujhse zyaada accha describe kiya! Kya baat hai!!! Mazaa aa gaya.

Then his analytical mind, which is countlessly telling him about the delusionUnhappy.. Or he is not ready to accept the realityDisapprove. And how those thoughts are kept aside by his stubbon heart.ConfusedTongue.
and the way he felt his life is again being snatched away by from him.OuchDead
was portrayed very well. Dhanyawaad, Vampu jii:)

You are right ' the heart wants what it wants.'WinkWinkHeart. Absolutely!

And her running away, meeting with his guiltly with shame and then silently apologising him, turn awayUnhappy. Could not blame her. For me that was the best thing she did ever.
She is a spy/secret agent!! And she is bound to do her duty, no matter what? Or who is infront of her. By saving her, she very successfully did her duty, as anyone's life is most important thing in this world, and more to that the person who is the target is her only love of her lifeBig smileHeart, she could not resist. And she runned to save him. Yes, she did! I wanted to show the conflict between the heart and mind. Superb of you to catch thatTongue
But stopped at the very right time and pushed him away *claps*, not giving him the chance to bound her with the ocean of emotion , waving inside their heart, and that might make her weak on her knees and she would end up ruining everything about her mission. Awesome description again! Are you sure you dont want to take over this story from me?Wink

Take a bow girl. I am proud of you. Aww, thanks a ton!!!

Then the shock expression left with arjun, how could he resist, in a minute of his life changed everything.  Yes indeedOuch

At one side his love and then her bitrayal. I think he would forgive her when he will know the reason behind whatever she was hidingConfused, after all he too is a duty bound officer. And a officer could beter understand another. Haha, very true. Par kya woh samajhne ki halat mein hai?

but the problem is how this thing will affect him emotionally. I am really eager to know about this!! Both are right at their own point and now it would be a takkar ka mukabilla.Wink Absolutely right!!!Big smile

then the shock the technical expert got of his life.. That was really heart wreching scene to read ever.
I could understand, when love hurt, it is still bearable( for me Embarrassed), but when it is the person who is called friend, it would hurt like beyont anything .
So the condition through which shree is going through is truely obvious.Unhappy.
His body collapsing and the scream , nearly equal to nervous breakdownShocked then slow voice which could clearly indicating his emotional condition was portrayed very well.  Again, super comment Vampu. Glad you liked this part.

Rathod and chotu, gave the obvious reaction as shree, she os equally important for them. Exactly. Ariya is the backbone of this story, but the others are equally important. 

Then killing the person he ever called his friend, was really hurting. I know he would never accept her as the same way, as the same riya, but really, that would be a scene to read. How he would be indifferent to her. That scene is coming upWink

The tears of rathod and, the way chotu convincing himself that it was allDead, then realizing all , and accusing her for life, for bitrayal was really commendable. Thanks again:)

Sorry for keep you waiting but this was a epic update i have ever read, in my whole life. Aww! Abb mera heart melt hogaya. Abb kya karen, itna lamba comment diya hai toh maaf karna hii padega. Hug

okay exam time. Will see u a litte laterWink OMG...Exam time? All the best, my dear!!!

Edited by -Amri- - 16 September 2013 at 12:40pm

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Hue.Splash IF-Sizzlerz

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Posted: 22 October 2013 at 3:09am | IP Logged
Knock knock!
Pls don't slam the door right on my faceUnhappy oh you could LOL
no excuses! I am super late!
Bandi aapke khidmat mai hazrir hai! Jo saza hai wo manjoorWink

The part started with Comm. Choelo's POV on the matters that happened. But the surprising part was, how deeply he connectes himself with the tow person and their personla life. He too understands the pain and the sacrs on his soul , his rage, his agressivenes , his anger everything that lead him only one way is sikander. And now Riya.

I really don't know what is the past story of riya that made Comm think like that but, there must be something which made him think like this.

The way he connected himself with two of his officers is brillantly written.

I am sure you will reveal it on the right point.

Then comes to Arjun.. One side he was feeling defeated by loosing her grip again but still his little soft part stored its own medicine for the wound. Loved the way his mind restored every moment of the two lady of his life. Roshni and riya. Perfect description of the mixed memories in the blue and green color ! Those words made me drown in the memory lane. Thanks a lott for that.

Next to that, he was very much successful to hide his turmoil composed himself out of the office was commendable. He seems experienced with masking his pain everytime from the outside , increasing his suffocation more. Choelo was right. He deserves the best of this world. Don't know about riya.. But still.

Umm I knew it she must be riya in the conference room. Don't know how will he react! At what point you stopped yaar!

Jumping jhapang to next thread now! Lol

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DivineDarkness IF-Stunnerz

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Posted: 22 October 2013 at 4:44pm | IP Logged
Are yar why im not able to reply to this story... I'm sorry yar wrote comment for half part still more to go... i'm one Lazy female...

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Hue.Splash IF-Sizzlerz

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Posted: 22 October 2013 at 8:42pm | IP Logged
Originally posted by Leki

Are yar why im not able to reply to this story... I'm sorry yar wrote comment for half part still more to go... i'm one Lazy female...

count me with you didiyaa

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