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Ariya FF:"Deception,Intrigue..."#2 *Author's Note* Pg50 (Page 17)

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Posted: 17 August 2013 at 12:12am | IP Logged
Originally posted by Amri174

My favorite devil jii...kaisi hain aap?Tongue My responses in bold red.

Originally posted by devildiva21

hey just read part 5 A B C D
and they were once again super duper top  update...!!!Thanks! I am glad that you liked it.
poor shree thinking about riya and her memories...!!! and kitan tired tha but couldn't say it to  arjunLOL and his analysis on arjun was bang on...Clap Haha, very true. I think others know better about Arjun than he himself.
and arjun hmm he inally realized ki he deep down somewhere he loved riya... and her betrayal about her identity is making him restless...!!! Yes, very trueSmile
okay so riya found that siddharth guy wants to kill arjun... her reactions were awesomely written...could actually visualize it infront of meWinkEmbarrassed just perfect her fear her anxiety everything...!!!  Ohh, that's such a lovely compliment. Thanks!!!
hmm so finally sameer  and chottu also got  a lead on that sidharth guy... gosh is such aCensored threatening sam... iske consequences usko pta nai hai abhi.. jab pta lagega to maza aayega...!!!
aur sameer ka gussa omg .. koi na koi to zarur pitegaWink Haha.Big smile
aisha liza convo and their thoughts  about men  were very heart touching.. both understands what other is going through afterall they both are suffering from the same thing... no notice from their lovers..!! aur ye aisha kiske baare mai baat kar rhi thi? undercover agent? was it riya????  I wanted to show a little bit of bonding between the women. And as to your question, I'll answer it laterWink
aisha shree scene was an another treat... loved it...!!!
omg arjun is now having nightmares about riya mixed with roshni...!!!Shocked and wants a  proper closure for her...!!! Yes, it is very important for him to move on properly before he can commit himself to someone else. I just wanted to show it realistically.
hmm so ariya meeting dustin cohelo almost at the same time??? any reason behind it?Shocked
well riya sure can do anything for arjun... she risked her identity and came to tell commissioner  about her findings..!! inspite of her boss's refusal...!!! Our Riya is a pretty determined lady;)
so shree knows riya is alive after seeing her footage in that club's video...!!! Yes, Shree is very intelligent and I wanted to share some of the credit for finding out about the truth;)
and now arjun also knows that he has actually seen her protecting him almost lying on himWink
guess soon everyone will found out  about her...!!
waise love the way she saved him...!!!Wink and arjun was comforted by her presence...!! awww
hope she doesn't run away...D'oh I just loved writing that scene. I am glad that you liked it.
can't wait to see everyone's reaction on seeing her aliveWink Me tooWink
what no precap?Shocked that's not fairTongue hum bechare bachon ka kuch to khyal karoLOL Will update soon, I promise!!!!
update soon...!!! eagerly waiting for the next chapterWinkEmbarrassedDay Dreaming
P.S. congo shongo  for the 2nd threadPartyDancing loved this mega update on occasion of the 2nd threadWink Thanks so much, sweetie. I am glad that you liked it;)

favorite devil???Wink ji hum bas badia ap btao? howz you now??
@green... hmm answer later haan pkka riya hi hai phr toLOLWink
liked it nah... me loved it...Cool
precap plzEvil Smile

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Posted: 17 August 2013 at 2:03am | IP Logged

Hi Leki...thanks for the lovely comment!!! Even after I left you high and dry at such a crucial point in the story, you commented!!! Thanks for that.


My responses in blue.


Originally posted by Leki

Super Duper update...
Riya's lie have affected guys really bad... i dnt think it will be easy for them to forgive her easily watever reason she states...
Very true...their forgiveness is not to be won so easilyDead
Shree he tried to keep himself busy so that he will forget her memories but its not that easy especially when she was so special... Shree understood what Arjun is going through...The team is going to be Arjun's biggest support in this tough time.*SPOILER ALERT* What will happen if Shree and Chottu team up with him against Riya, and how will she feel? Wink

Arjun he is really in miserable condition... he can't beleive person he have started to love again have lied about her existence... that's hard to digest... he is having nightmares of Roshini's death and now Riya's... how much more pain will he go through...

Rathore he is in no better condition... he diverted his anger towards pub people...Both Arjun and Rathore are dealing with things in their own ways, and I wanted to show that.

Aisha and Lisa understood something big have happened  that affected the guys really badly... Lisa's thought abt Shree was good... More of them in the upcoming chapters.

one thing i'm happy about is the way you concentrate on each and every character and addressing minute details also... Well DoneClap
Thanks! One of my grouses about the show is that the other characters are not given screen space enough. So I wanted to present their sides as well.
So Rathore got clue about the case... Loved the way he confronted that guy... True to chief's roleThumbs Up ThanksSmile
So now NIB is gonna take care of Arjun's protection... well i want to know his reaction when he knows it... but the way things are shapping up i dnt think that will happen...
More on that later!!!
The meeting of NIB Cheif and Commissioner was cool...
Riya's reaction on knowing Arjun's life is on danger well that was predictable... her thoughts feelings about Arjun well potrayed...
so except Arjun every one is aware of Riya's feelings!!!!Yes, Arjun can be so stupid sometimesLOL

OK Arjun going to meet Commissioner and demand some answers regarding Riya...
Finally Shree found out that secret RIYA ALIVE!!!! well what toofan will this bring????
oh he called Arjun but before Shree could drop the atom bomb Arjun got shock of his life... HE MET RIYA!!!!! ShockedShocked
Ariya meeting was epic... the way you set the whole scene was just WOW!!!!You liked it? Me too. The scene just flowed, and I typed down whatever I visualized on my mind.
and you ended as i predicted and No PrecapAngryprecap in 10 mins, esp for youTongue
CONTINUE SOON...

P.S : i thought not to comment but... now update soonish otherwise be ready for KBB's lobbEvil SmileMe scared nowOuch





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Posted: 17 August 2013 at 2:11am | IP Logged
Hi Vampu!!!!


Thanks for your beautiful and lamba commentBig smile My responses in pink. 


Originally posted by Vampire-queen

Hey how are you first tell me? Embarrassed Feeling better, thanks for askingSmile


i always need a peaceful time for reading and commenting on my favs , so sorry for the delay Tongue
I loved the progress in the case, and waiting for you to unfold more pages of the caseWink. Me too, I am loving this journey already.

Ah, it was awesome reading about the tough red faced chief sameer rathod and his leadership!Wink 

The way he treated with the trio one; the manager two; the bartender and three , siddharth guptaAngry * iss kamine par sabse jada gussa aata hai..DeadLOL *.
Handling siddharth gupta was very brilliantly written! Sam losing his temper , chotu and shree controling him and also the nervousness of the suspect . Well written! 
Rathore is one under-appreciated guy on the show, and I wanted to show more of his skills as a cop and a leaderSmile

Finally they got a lead for the case , i am very happy Clap .

The expression of arjun's painful night and his pain, and also those hurtful nightmares of his dead wife is portrayed well. Aww, thanksSmile

Commissioner agreed to meet himShocked. That was shocking! Not really but, it was nice to read the concern for his officers.

It was also awesome reading the character of Anita shukla, riya's boss! She is the officer in true sense! Nationla security is much much more important than anyone's life ( sorry just my POV ). And i am really appriceating her objection to both commissioner and riya! Big smile Your viewpoint is very correct indeed. I wanted to show that there is an objective person other than Riya, who is worried about Arjun, and the Commissioner, who is worried about the ETF and his officer.

and now riya. You are right, how can anyone sit idle knowing that her love is in danger! Loved the way she was ready to cross the boundary apart for her love , her arjunBlushing. But i am feeling proud that she followed the protocol of NIB. Instead of going herslef she alloted her man behind him!wow.. I just had to put that in *blushes*

The inter-relationship between anita and riya is also commendable. Aww, I am glad that you liked it. More of Anita and Riya in the future updates.

One more thing about this story,
the time ploting is most important for any story, and i noticed you are managing this fantasticly this job! Thanks a  ton!!!!

Arrival of arjun at the resurant and at the same time shree calling him, and alos in that time span you described the story . Really its a brilliant job! I wanted to make the scene dramatic, after all it's a high point in the story. I am a big drama queen, ask my parentsLOL

Then the moment riya pushed him and saved him from the bullet! Ah, ths will be the the scene of this chapterWink..
Ah, this scene is the most favourite scene ! I just loved this last part! Thanks againBig smile

It is like he got heaven with her. The man always frustrated with the suffering of immense pain , how hurriedly grab the little source of solace. Heart and he hugged her, not let the thing go away from him, which is comforting him right now. Haha...dekhne se pehle hii samajh gaye ji woh hi hai. Jab pehli baar mile toh aisa hi hua na? Embarrassed

At the same time shree said, that she is aliveHeartEmbarrassed.. And then..then u made a full stop..agrrAngryDeadLOLEeks...scared of Vampu's bite!Shocked

uff i am falling more for thisBlushing

question- the sharp shooter must be following him? Umm ! How he'd get to know that arjun is coming here? This q will be answered later, suspense.Wink

M.K and tim supposed to be there but how come riya knew noticed the shooter? Reveal this soon! I really wanted read the expression riya held when she found arjun at the gun point, her fear, her uneasiness everything.. Please please.. The next chapter starts like that only. Big smile


and sorry tht was just a silly question!LOL Not at allSmile

Don't made me wait a loong this time. The real story starts now i guessWink AbsolutelyTongue

wonderful job *claps*. Big smile Thank you, thank you and thank youEmbarrassed

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Posted: 17 August 2013 at 2:13am | IP Logged
Originally posted by mastmegha22


achha hai
abh precap to dedo


Originally posted by devildiva21

favorite devil???Wink ji hum bas badia ap btao? howz you now??
@green... hmm answer later haan pkka riya hi hai phr toLOLWink
liked it nah... me loved it...Cool
precap plzEvil Smile


Precap coming soon!!!Smile




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Posted: 17 August 2013 at 2:16am | IP Logged
Ok so finally i got some spoiler... me wating for that...
I thought of editing my comment but my roommie was glaring at me so left it lik this... well i was expecting that whenever Ariya meet u will end update at that point so i was prepared... im waiting for some confrontation... 

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Posted: 17 August 2013 at 2:16am | IP Logged
Originally posted by Amri174

Originally posted by mastmegha22


achha hai
abh precap to dedo


Originally posted by devildiva21

favorite devil???Wink ji hum bas badia ap btao? howz you now??
@green... hmm answer later haan pkka riya hi hai phr toLOLWink
liked it nah... me loved it...Cool
precap plzEvil Smile


Precap coming soon!!!Smile





me eagerly waiting

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Posted: 17 August 2013 at 2:17am | IP Logged
Hey i see everyone asking abt ur health what happened???

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Posted: 17 August 2013 at 2:24am | IP Logged
Originally posted by Aks13

Splendid work swthrt. Hats off to u!!!!!!

Loved Sam in his rowdy rathore mood.

OMG thy both were in killer mood n that manager was provoking thm. Oppsss wrong move.

You provide a great scope to Rathod's character to demonstrate his capabilities as a ETF chief, which he never get in the serial. Not only Rathod but u gv equal space to each n every character.

Loved the way Rathod shut the mouth of that manager through his straight frwrd talks.              

Yeyyy thy got the lead coz of Rathod n that Sid malhotra is a piece of crap.

Wow Arjun's sleep was again disturbed by a nightmare but this time its about Riya's death in place of Rosh. May be coz his mind was clouded by her thoughts but where is the gunshot n that too in musty godown was cme frm????? Is this some kind of indication???????

Finally he decided to clear all the mess by talking to commissioner. That's nice thought.

The interrogation of Sid malhtr was damn exciting. He looked like a hard nut to crack but our very own rowdy Rathore showed him his true place. I wish I can saw his expression at that time.

Waaooo Riya can go to any extent to save him. That's amazing n this is wht called true love!!!!

OMG hw cleverly she assigned the task to safeguard Arjun frm any kind of threat to M.K. n Tim.

Wow Shree was shocked beyond limits whn he saw Riya in the footage. I m glad that he didn't get fainted. Wht happened whn he see her face-to-face??????

Oh gosh!!!!!!! Somebody aimed at Arjun but Riya saved him in the nick of time.

Awww he felt that he was familiar with the touch.

Finally thy cme face-to-face.

Cliffhanger!!!!!!!!

Waiting for the fire works.

Continue as soon as possible.



Aks!!! Thanks for another superb comment, sweetheartHug

I know that this is the chapter everyone was waiting for, so I kept it a suspense.Big smile


Lots of Rathore in this chapter...Rowdy Rathore about to kill SiddharthTongue And some Shree and Chottu bonding. I just couldn't resist, they're sweethearts!!!


In Arjun's mind, he has failed two women, who then become victims and die (or so he thinks). He feels responsible for it in a way because he couldn't protect them. So that nightmare scene. But more on that laterTongue


What can I say about Riya? She is such a brave person in my story, you'll learn more about her later.


And our Shree discovered it first! But it was someone else who met her firstEmbarrassed

And yes, cliffhanger indeed! Hope you don't kill meShocked


Precap up soon. And thanks a ton for commenting!!!!

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