nyce chappy!!!! 😃
full hustle bustle... train pe jaana ho to aisa hi hota hai...😛
awww... this moti is the cutest character.. his pouts conveys everything... 😆
rofl... ye toh kahin bhi ladne lag jati hai...🤣
train walo Ko ye nhi pata na ... ki moti apni owner se bilkul opposite hai... ekfam sharif.. 😉😆
hayeee... it looks so realistic...😊
train me toh milne se rahe...😳
but agle update me zaroor milana inhe...😉
actual story ab shuru hui hai... 😲 .. toh ab tak kya introduction tha ya timepass...😆
Originally posted by: crazysky
wow
i just loved it namswowsuperbi just loved the way u r portraying everyone's charactergunna , chinnu, bunnyawesome love themevery scene feels so real in this likeeverytime i read i felt this is happening in real world somewhere n the song is awesomelove the update yaardo frequently update this one
Originally posted by: lovely7010
Wonderful update
loved itthe train journey seems to be excitingupdate soon
Originally posted by: manzilmukul
Chapter4 and 5
HUGS BACK TO YOU🤗I am myself a lazy reader but I when I read I want to feel the entire story..So my reviews will keep pouring ..
Well You know somehow I am loving Chinu and this HIT AND MISS kind of scenario between her and Bunny...
You know as I am a doctor myself by profession all this sternness and coldness which doctors are associated with is so relatable..I would like to throw a bit more insight on it .There is a Process known as DE-HUMANIZATION which is a slow but a very REAL process with doctors and medical students..You know with tonnes of Blood and Biology involved,a doctor sometimes loses heart and becomes mechanical..If you frequent hospitals,you will be shocked to see how doctors actually can laugh away even after a death and have a samosa over it...
Its ghastly but its REAL then..So somehow Bhardwaj and his coldness is REAL..he is absolutely a standing example of DEHUMANIZATION...
Well now coming back to the updates..You know I have a feeling that no matter How shallow Chinu appears as a typical giggling cindrella princess but like Ayush she also has something hidden inside her..I donno how far am I right? But may be some childhood devoid of her parents attention has made her appreciate and value life and love...
Dhruv Tara,kaka and Neethu are nothing but merely projections of her own warmth which she might have lacked..Tell me am I missing something? But yes Her parents have been unknowingly so engrossed with their works ..perhaps she missed that care and attention all her life and thus she projects it through showering love and care to the world..You know Narmada often the ppl who are neglected try to seek warmth by spreading love everywhere..I might be wrong but Chinu's sunshine does have a deeper meaning ?
I loved the whole Neethu -Chinu story and convincing..Chinu is surely much more deeper than what you had projected her as a typical idiotic teen...I am feeling a halo and sunshine around her!!
Lovely updates!!..Beautiful ,progressive writing...
P.S- awww cute Moti is such a cute name..I think you might be having a gala time with Moti😳
Originally posted by: manzilmukul
Chapter 6
Yes I am back😆😆😆
LOL 😆
Well well well..I guess I was right about Chinu.It does somehow struck me and I was right.First of all loved the way you showed and weaved an interesting family history between the leads ,tracing their roots back to their ancestral village..LAND OF CLOUDS!!I love the name..Clouds summarize fluffiness ,volatility and at the same time rain ,fertility and something latent in it..
Just like Chinu..Her out fluffiness and dream world is a striking contrast to the latent pain inside her and poignant with rain-(read shower of love...)
I must say beautiful symbolism used her..If at all that was meant to be..
Chinu's aloof father and her mother's deprived childhood have Similarity ..somehow the mother daughter duo have had a life like true counterparts..However Sunanda had a father like figure and Chinu had her mother..But still both of them lacked REAL love or COMPLETE family...
I am loving this story Narmada...I must say with what appeared to be a teen flick at the first chapter ..is much more beautiful and deeper..Lovely..👏
Hopefully I will be able to catch up with the rest of chapters by the evening..Until then
hasta -la viesta😆😆😆
Originally posted by: manzilmukul
Chapter7
Well well I love their meeting..Chinu as her usual self very particular about bargaining..again very true to her character and family status..Love her prudence and then that whole Havan..You know Narmada I somewhere had Ayush in my mind as a person who seeks acceptance from his father by his rebellious nature..Happens with kids at his age ...Unable to stand tall and pass out with flying colours on the weaved dreams of their parents ,they seem to fall out with rebellious streaks just for seeking attention...Its the unconscious mind games in psychology..Very well thought out streak...
Well their meeting was cute with some palpable attraction, fluttering of hearts..Interesting*gears up for some more*
Did I hear he is going to his ancestral village ?Hola seems some interestig events are about to unfold..Chinu might go to the village too..
Looking forward to their banter..😛
Another lovely update..Jumping on to the latest one🤓
Originally posted by: manzilmukul
CHAPTER8...
Independence day Rains and I am sitting with my cuppa coffee and finished the latest one too in a go Ahh Bliss..
So this cosmic connection and this soul bond...Beautiful👏👏👏
I love the song you used a perfect blend for Ayush's high strung temperament !! Chinu and Moti..Aww I love the puppy already😆😆😆😆
You did keep it realistic too because for IR and pups you need to seek permission and keep it in a luggage boggy..you cannot just carry around your pet...
So I am now waiting for their proper face off now..
BTW my heart just melted for Sunanda ..a lonely childhood and a loveless marriage..Poor thing but no wonder both Chinu and Sunanda are so close..Love the mother daughter duo..
Now I can very smartly bug you for updates...Can't wait for the next chapter already!!
Lovely and Simple writing style..Narmada!!
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