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#1PolemicJackanapes: Complete [Note + Blog Link Pg154] 3Jan 2016 (Page 28)

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Posted: 02 July 2013 at 9:48am | IP Logged
This time I am quick! :D

LOL! I can almost see myself in Payal, I hate apologizing, not because of pride, but I never have a clue where to start. And I end up saying something more offensive!

Garima behaves like my mom, LOL. I still need to give her a daily report on my day, and this is my second internship. But mom's are like that :)

Loved the convos between both Garima and Payal as well as between Payal and Arnav. Love the teasing! Now Aakash can be a gentleman in public ;)

Love it! Continue soon!


Edited by BlueMystique - 02 July 2013 at 10:00am

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Posted: 02 July 2013 at 9:48am | IP Logged
Well, thank you for the dedication, Twiggs. I fell out of bed and then remembered that I had to unres so here I am.

Well, this was an amazing chapter. Simply loved the mother-daughter equation and the Payal-Arnav equation. Payal's apology was so direct and Garima aunty is TOTALLY like my mumma! "Beta khana khaa Lena! Zyada kisiko tang mat karna! And so on and forth 

I miss mumma :(

Anyway, great chapter Twiggs. Already waiting for the next one :D

-Vee 

(ps - sorry for the shooort comment, m think m 2 sleepy yaa?)


Edited by V323 - 03 July 2013 at 5:04pm

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Posted: 02 July 2013 at 9:59am | IP Logged
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All smiles till the end.

Mom's are always like this, no matter if it is your first day anywhere, be it school, be it internship or be it a job, well meri waali tu meri shaddi key baad bhi ek month taak was like this ...Embarrassed

Payal reminded me of Arnav, when he could not apologize but then I love this payal, so unlike the simple , chup chap one.

Loved the whole conversation between Arnav and Payal and now waiting for Khushi to come home and tell mom about her day


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Posted: 02 July 2013 at 10:01am | IP Logged
Beautiful update! So Payal is not bad! She just speak without thinking I guess. It was nice of her to say sorry to Arnav and Arnav didn't make it easy for her. So its Khushis first day at her office? Cant wait to know how that went. Did Arnav bring anything to Khushi Embarrassed

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Posted: 02 July 2013 at 10:02am | IP Logged
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Sorry for the late un-Res. Twigs - Had a rather difficult evening and night thanks to my little one!! Sigh!

The chapter itself was actually flawless in the way you established the very regular but endlessly endearing relationship between Garima and Payal - the mother and older daughter worrying / not worrying about the younger sister on her first day of something - I think you could have recorded some event from my life and written it down - that was how real it felt to me.

I think Garima was right in pointing out what Payal did to Arnav. Sometimes we let ourselves become to complacent in the way we treat others - it simply escapes our notice that every relationship, no matter how close needs a certain level of sensitivity even in honesty. 

Payal is an interesting person - very real. I've seen these girls around me. Their hearts are in the right place but their tongues wag a lot more carelessly. And I can imagine that at some level it is also because people with passion for something don't really understand those without a drive. Thankfully, Payal does want to be good to Arnav. She also does like him for his positives. But does that mean that she couldn't have differences with him? Nah...Don't think he expects that either. Just a little tact...

I love the little nuances you are bringing in. Now the wait for Khushi to be back from her first day!




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Posted: 02 July 2013 at 10:03am | IP Logged
In life, we very rarely meet someone who is purely angelic (white) or pure evil (black). Therefore humans have mostly become synonymous with shades of gray. No wonder then Shades of Gray was such a huge hit Embarrassed

On a serious note...you have proven beyond doubt that Payal is not a bad person. After all she is a good daughter, a wonderful sister who looks out for Khushi and intelligent too...studying medicine and all. 

However, she has more darker shades than anyone else in this story thus far. She is insensitive to begin. I say this because she did not think of  apologizing to Arnav  properly without her mother prodding her. For a future doctor... her insensitivity doesnt speak well for her. 

She knows Arnav better than Akassh because she has known him longer? Not really. she didnt realize what would hurt him and Khushi knew. So not really Payal. You don't know Arnav. 

Between Payal's aggression and Akaash's sweet nature, it is easy to see who calls the shots in this relationsip. 

Intersting update. Waiting to see where you are going with this story LOL

hey! glad you are feeling better nowSmile






Edited by AquaSandhya - 02 July 2013 at 10:51am

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Chapter 3

Twiggy,


What a perfectly incorrect time to read this update! I am fasting! And here you are talking about dosa and sambhaar!

What? Arnav and the Guptas know about PaYash LOL Kya popat hua hai unka :D

Are Arnav and Khushi engaged? The Guptas seem to adore Arnav.

I am liking a cluttered Arnav and an organized Khushi a lot. They are different and I like different Smile

I want to Clap you for the picture board you described in Khushi's room - so realistic. I wonder how much is true with your true life especially the kissing picture Wink *ducks chappals*


Aww! Why is Arnav feeling bad? Not everyone is a brainy or an achiever. If everyone would be an achiever, life would be so dull. And he has her and make that buddhu understand that she would never leave him :D

Finally, Twigs, you naughty naughty babua Embarrassed You made such a fine mockery of the show and the forum. One nice kissie to you for that :D


A cherish-able chapter Star


Edited by lazyleaves - 11 July 2013 at 4:48am
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Chapter 4

Twigs,

Garima is a typical mother. The daughter has her first day of office and she is all nervous LOL

I simply love it when authors show us a friendly banter between Arnav and Payal. I just Heart it :D I am glad that Garima understands Khushi's plight. I know Shashi does too. But I am still angry on Shashi Angry And it is better that I don't speak about the career choice, I will end up ranting again.


This update was focused totally on Payal and Arnav and I didn't miss ArHi at all. Now that is an achievement.


Now what I like most about this story is that it feels I am looking in to the house of two families and being a part of their daily routine Clap


I just hope when Khushi returns home, she is not very unhappy :( Warna mera gussa badh jaayega Angry


BTW, don't mind but the culture you belong to reflects in your writing and I love that :D



Edited by lazyleaves - 11 July 2013 at 5:14am

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